*kyza Soza And Sparkle Collabo* INTOLERANCE

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Old 06-30-2004, 04:12 PM   #1 (permalink)
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*kyza Soza And Sparkle Collabo* INTOLERANCE
SPARKLE AND KYZA SOZA COLLABO...*


Am I invisible to you?
Do you see me or my shadow as I pass you?
Why did it come to this?
How did every1 forget about me?
Before I forever heard my name calling
A bustling corridor
Now an empty corridor
That echoes my lonely footsteps

Words go right through me
…Knee-deep in lonesome quicksand
Why look for the answers
When the questions are hard to understand
See, the walls are whispering
Call out names of failed friendships
Things don’t always work
Is there enough time in life to mend it?


I see a dark tunnel
Without the famous light
That we quote forever…
Where’s my light?
I long to be loved
I long to be noticed
Gone are the days where I laughed
Now are the days that I cry

The lonely light lasts forever
Don’t let it take you
…Down empty paths
The path should let me look forward
Instead of
…mending my past

My future once looked bright
Now it looks dull
I feel alone, trapped in life
All I want is to be seen…
What must I do?
My clothing, my hair,
What is it about me that don’t fit?

It’s fitting how it goes
...From the womb to the tomb
Greed tries swallowing me whole
I fear it’ll consume me soon
Materialistic, seriously…
It drove me sadistic
its sad, the reciepts of sold souls by lucifers side
Resembles my Christmas wish lists

Years of every1 looking up to me
GONE
I held my head up high
I now look to the ground,
And wished it opened up, and swallowed me…

…Wish it opened its jaws
The clutches pull me down by the nails
Why does everyone look up to me?
…When they say I’m destined to fail




Replied to 'empty corridors', 'i know f'd up', 'the other side', and 'lost souls'
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Old 06-30-2004, 06:55 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Decent collab, I think both styles matched up well.

"I see a dark tunnel
Without the famous light
That we quote forever…"

Those lines made me laugh there. So true, feeling that.

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Old 06-30-2004, 07:34 PM   #3 (permalink)
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Why look for the answers
When the questions are hard to understand
The lonely light lasts forever
Don’t let it take you
…Down empty paths
The path should let me look forward
Instead of
…mending my past



alot of us seem to get so stuck inside the past
that we cant look forward to the future
not that the assholes that are so quick to judge us help out anything
but really they seem to give us strength without even realize that theyre doin that...
and i like to keep it that way
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Old 07-01-2004, 01:44 AM   #4 (permalink)
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i liked it though some of the lines seemed a little off balance you guys do match up very well is this your first one together first one its pretty good
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Old 07-01-2004, 07:13 PM   #5 (permalink)
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Old 07-02-2004, 05:12 PM   #6 (permalink)
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Old 07-03-2004, 05:39 PM   #7 (permalink)
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i thought that it was well-balanced, and i'd say it was pretty nice.

good job, both of you.

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Old 07-04-2004, 02:31 PM   #9 (permalink)
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i think you two flowed together really well, i liked the structure and the subject
the poem was excellent both of you represented

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The color of the lines made it kind of hard to read. This was a decent collabo like Soul said... Nothing really stuck out to me, but the piece itself was pretty good. The two styles were a nice little match up.


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"Words go right through me
…Knee-deep in lonesome quicksand
Why look for the answers
When the questions are hard to understand
See, the walls are whispering
Call out names of failed friendships
Things don’t always work
Is there enough time in life to mend it?"

Damn, this was almost perfect. I think you should have used an ABAB rhyme scheme, you have some dope lines right there. I see why you noticed my multies.

I don't think you two's part match up. Sparkle's is cool, but then kyza's is better.. not to compare the two. But to me, they just don't belong together. But both were nice, nice collab y'all. Keep up the good work.
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thanks tyrant, illpoetical, all and quotive

and quotive.. yea, that's because i only write poetry when i really feel ive got something to get off my chest or something to say.. over than that im a textcee and mc. but thanks anyways man
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Old 07-05-2004, 06:55 PM   #15 (permalink)
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I was feelin this, the concept is really strong so it made it easier to understand...Mind Soul took my lines that I was gonna quote though, lol...so just gonna say this was a damn good job...
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nice collab, the style matched fairly well..however, i wasn't really felling the first stanza very well...it felt very mundane, but it picked up and kept its intensity...good drop, keep writing
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