What Music

StubbilyMug · 02-26-2004, 11:19 AM

just a chunk...no title really...

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What music--
What music?
what music is to me--
What's it to me?!
-use it stupid.
Who's these voices
making my choices?

I can't see
remove the pillow
voidly stuffed with whisper screams.
what do you mean
you can't hear anything?
You have to believe me--
"Go to sleep..."

Wake up.
This is my Ars Poetica
better put multiple syllables in a sentence--
-or else-
won't you listen...

Want to lesson?
no.
Halloosinnit-again,
shrinking into what
has become
the biggest bed...
And it's so comfortable:
my feet dangling, hanging
next to the edge...

Suffocating circulation...
with head pinned
and stomach stapled,
banging out to dry
-lead pensive horse eggs
thirsty from the stable...

Drowning; dehydrated,
mouth open
from a breathtaking disaster.
I tried to GASP the atmosphere--
--but it choked me.

I search so deep into my writings
I see white fibers striping my pensive lines,
where my lead failed to cover
specs of bright blank paper blinds.

I can't see,
and there's no tears--
to wipe away with this loud pillow.
Still though,
I've got a sharpened pencil,
flexible wrists, and vain outlook.
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Zeta · 02-26-2004, 01:58 PM

You're a funny one, nice poetry

Mind~$oul · 02-26-2004, 06:34 PM

"Drowning; dehydrated,
mouth open
from a breathtaking disaster.
I tried to GASP the atmosphere--
--but it choked me."

^amazing lines there man. Where have you been?

one luv

StubbilyMug · 02-26-2004, 07:12 PM

tryin to settle down man i need a job
can anyone find me a sedentiary work from home job??

..im serious

King Tony · 02-26-2004, 08:52 PM

I can't see
remove the pillow
voidly stuffed with whisper screams.
what do you mean
you can't hear anything?
You have to believe me--
"Go to sleep..."

i liked this, expecially ur word usage. nice
stay up

lpoet · 02-29-2004, 08:00 AM

i likes...i like the way that i have to really try to look at your poems from different angels....very creative....think u coulda droped a better title..but still a very good piece...

had some crazy lines in there

UPIn

allnakey · 03-01-2004, 02:43 PM

Yea you have a uniqueness in your writing that just is a joy to read. Your pieces really make me think and see somethings from different perspectives. This piece was real nice and I liked it a lot

Stay Up, Much Love, Peace

02-26-2004, 11:19 AM	#1 (permalink)
StubbilyMug DayorDollar Records Join Date: Sep 2003 Location: Ft. Pierce, FL Posts: 429	What Music just a chunk...no title really... ------------------------------------------------------------------ What music-- What music? what music is to me-- What's it to me?! -use it stupid. Who's these voices making my choices? I can't see remove the pillow voidly stuffed with whisper screams. what do you mean you can't hear anything? You have to believe me-- "Go to sleep..." Wake up. This is my Ars Poetica better put multiple syllables in a sentence-- -or else- won't you listen... Want to lesson? no. Halloosinnit-again, shrinking into what has become the biggest bed... And it's so comfortable: my feet dangling, hanging next to the edge... Suffocating circulation... with head pinned and stomach stapled, banging out to dry -lead pensive horse eggs thirsty from the stable... Drowning; dehydrated, mouth open from a breathtaking disaster. I tried to GASP the atmosphere-- --but it choked me. I search so deep into my writings I see white fibers striping my pensive lines, where my lead failed to cover specs of bright blank paper blinds. I can't see, and there's no tears-- to wipe away with this loud pillow. Still though, I've got a sharpened pencil, flexible wrists, and vain outlook. ------------------------------------------------------------------ __________________ : : Stubbily Mug : : : : DayorDollar Records : : myspace.com/stubbilymug

02-26-2004, 01:58 PM	#2 (permalink)
Zeta Registered User Join Date: Feb 2004 Posts: 371	hee hee You're a funny one, nice poetry

02-26-2004, 06:34 PM	#3 (permalink)
Mind~$oul I'm Pretty Join Date: Apr 2001 Location: North Memphis BITCH! Posts: 17,145	"Drowning; dehydrated, mouth open from a breathtaking disaster. I tried to GASP the atmosphere-- --but it choked me." ^amazing lines there man. Where have you been? one luv __________________ "Everybody wanna be a nicca, but don't nobody wanna be a nicca"-Paul Mooney "I tried to live right, but society aint made for niccas to live right"-Joe Budden

02-26-2004, 07:12 PM	#4 (permalink)
StubbilyMug DayorDollar Records Join Date: Sep 2003 Location: Ft. Pierce, FL Posts: 429	tryin to settle down man i need a job can anyone find me a sedentiary work from home job?? ..im serious __________________ : : Stubbily Mug : : : : DayorDollar Records : : myspace.com/stubbilymug

02-29-2004, 08:00 AM	#6 (permalink)
lpoet POET Join Date: Oct 2002 Location: Indianapolis, IN Posts: 12,672	i likes...i like the way that i have to really try to look at your poems from different angels....very creative....think u coulda droped a better title..but still a very good piece... had some crazy lines in there UPIn __________________ "SHE CAME BACK TO ME AND I PRAY SHE STAYS" --lpoet

02-26-2004, 08:52 PM	#5 (permalink)
King Tony Retired Poet Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: Dirty Jersey Posts: 4,776	I can't see remove the pillow voidly stuffed with whisper screams. what do you mean you can't hear anything? You have to believe me-- "Go to sleep..." i liked this, expecially ur word usage. nice stay up

03-01-2004, 02:43 PM	#7 (permalink)
allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself Join Date: Mar 2003 Posts: 2,860	Yea you have a uniqueness in your writing that just is a joy to read. Your pieces really make me think and see somethings from different perspectives. This piece was real nice and I liked it a lot Stay Up, Much Love, Peace __________________ And I sat watching a flower As it was withering I was embarrassed by its honesty So I'd prefer to be remembered as a smiling face Not this fucking wreck That's taken its place get some balls biatch or else

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