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09-24-2003, 02:00 PM
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Mrs. _Evil <3
Join Date: Apr 2002
Location: i stay below the surface, breaking bread with worms, it's depravity, not gravity, that anchors flesh to earth
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stress (vent piece)
It bothers me when you say i dont care.
Youre standing there waiting for the elevator
when you could have taken the stairs....
My stares are cold but
I warned you from the beginning....
Loving me will not satisfy your needs
because there isn't enough of me to share
Yet.
Don't settle for a piece of
something
that hasn't had a chance to bloom into
everything.
It bothers me when you say i dont care.
It bothers me when you say i'm mean
simply because i'm not ready to be your queen.
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misandrist/misogynist
he thinks that cause i'm from glasgow i can't rap tight
i'll rip his fuckin' stomach out and make a set of bagpipes
--respek ba
i hate to see y'all frown but I'd rather see her smiling
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09-24-2003, 02:18 PM
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I'm grown...
Join Date: Sep 1999
Location: home of the seahawks/ we talk properly/ and walk our own strut, so why you gawkin b?
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this is some real shit...sometimes, people aren't ready, and the other person needs to realize that...
i'm diggin
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the one and only....
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09-24-2003, 03:00 PM
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skantless bitch
Join Date: Jul 2003
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i think venting pieces are some of the best pieces, i loved this one, mostly cause i can relate to it a lot... great job as always
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Or infact does the blood make you think you have to love?"
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09-24-2003, 04:07 PM
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raising the bar everyday
Join Date: Jun 2000
Location: Long Island
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that was very good
1ne
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How vain it is to sit down and write when you have not stood up to live.
The skill of writing is to create a context in which other people can think.
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09-24-2003, 04:23 PM
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Registered User
Join Date: Sep 2003
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From what I picked up, you were telling him basically you are too young for that type of commitment and you have yet to bloom into the beautiful flower you will become, so there is no way he can have all of you, because you dont even have it yet. Nice poem
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Life is but a vision, it is you that decides how to look at it.
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09-24-2003, 04:30 PM
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OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes
Join Date: Jul 2003
Location: Sinking into the paper, like I was ink
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Originally Posted by Ndividual
this is some real shit...sometimes, people aren't ready, and the other person needs to realize that...
i'm diggin
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Thus the signs of my last relationship, some people dont understand that people need time to bloom into what they are supposed to be. Anyway, I liked this piece, just switch it to my view and I could definitely relate to you. Looks like you and I will be sharing a drink after all Madame Sole...
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"Laissez les bon temps rouler"
"Time to a writer is like play dough in the hands of a toddler..."
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09-24-2003, 10:17 PM
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a.k.a KATURAH
Join Date: Jun 2003
Location: Virginia Is For Lovers
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Very nice...i really enjoyed it...short, to the point, and well said
mad love
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09-24-2003, 10:23 PM
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POET
Join Date: Oct 2002
Location: Indianapolis, IN
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nice drop feme....most def can feel this piece.....love and relationships are crazy....glad i found the person i want to spend the rest of my life with already....
keep droping...always love your work
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09-24-2003, 10:59 PM
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Bluez By Loves Eye
Join Date: Mar 2002
Location: Canada
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Well said I wish I could yell this piece out but yeah nicely convey'd.
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The intimate rhythms of life...
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09-24-2003, 11:13 PM
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I'm Pretty
Join Date: Apr 2001
Location: North Memphis BITCH!
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short but you said what you had to say in those few words
one luv
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09-24-2003, 11:52 PM
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myself
Join Date: Jul 1999
Location: D.C.
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I like the "Yet."
That was my favorite line.
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