Alone ALONE ALONE!!!!

MisterEThoughts · 08-15-2003, 05:19 PM

You wake up in the morning,
And go on through your day.
You do the things you always do,
In much the same old way.
Around, all kinds of people,
But when the day is done,
As darkness falls around you,
You go through life alone.

The friends you find all drift away,
Like leaves do in the fall.
You never seem to understand,
The reasons for it all.
I've seen the look upon your face,
The teardrops in your eye,
When love that someone gave to you,
You tossed aside to die.

You're going through your life alone,
And the saddest part must be,
You do not seem to realize,
How sweet your life could be.
To have someone to care for you,
And stay right by your side,
To fill your empty heart with love,
Each and every night.

So, lying in your bed tonight,
Keep this thought in your mind.
If it is really love you want,
It's been here all the time.
And as you see the days go by,
You'll never see again.
All the ones who cared for you,
And love... that might have been.

And if you're ever looking,
For someone who could be,
A lover and a friend to you,
Through all eternity.
You have to look no further,
Than right here by your side,
For I'm the one who loves you,
And will until I die.

ALONE thats how it's gonna be.

49th Prophet · 08-15-2003, 05:59 PM

Damn! Yo this real nice, the structure was flawless to me, it kept a real good flow to it, good shit...nice piece...much love

peace

Dark_Angel · 08-15-2003, 11:09 PM

gotta agree, the fow to this peice was awsome and just kept it up the whole way, emotional peice, i really liked this one from you

fav bit ( all of it really, but this little bit what i wanted to quote)

You wake up in the morning,
And go on through your day.
You do the things you always do,
In much the same old way.
Around, all kinds of people,
But when the day is done,
As darkness falls around you,
You go through life alone.

MisterEThoughts · 08-16-2003, 02:56 AM

thanks all but where all the other peeps at damn peeps come on uppin

Mind~$oul · 08-16-2003, 04:42 AM

have to say i'm very impressed. One of your best piece i've seen. Keep it up

one luv

MisterEThoughts · 08-16-2003, 05:41 AM

thanks mind soullz u the man i am practising bro thaks

Nebulaz · 08-16-2003, 07:06 AM

Now that is how you write a poem.
and while you're practicing, give spelling a try.
=)

allnakey · 08-16-2003, 10:58 AM

That was real good

stay up, much love, peace

Un-SeeN · 08-16-2003, 01:11 PM

Great Piece, Breath taking.

MisterEThoughts · 08-16-2003, 06:12 PM

haha thanks i thought i did good on spelling i guess i was wrong thanks though upping

*Princess* · 08-16-2003, 11:27 PM

i have to agree with everyone else....wonderful piece

my fav lines are
The friends you find all drift away,
Like leaves do in the fall.
You never seem to understand,
The reasons for it all.
I've seen the look upon your face,
The teardrops in your eye,
When love that someone gave to you,
You tossed aside to die.

i could realte a lot with those there.....once again wonferful job keep it up

misspimp · 08-17-2003, 02:00 AM

Tight shit....bout to read it to a person who definetly needs to hear this...like took the words that were on the tip of my tounge (u know the words that just wont come out) right out of my mouth. I felt this piece...

So, lying in your bed tonight,
Keep this thought in your mind.
If it is really love you want,
It's been here all the time.
And as you see the days go by,
You'll never see again.
All the ones who cared for you,
And love... that might have been.
^^loved this part the most...

mad love

MisterEThoughts · 08-17-2003, 04:33 AM

thanks everyone thanks miss and princess thanks a lot much love

vinous · 08-17-2003, 09:23 AM

ahhh, dam man, this really got to me, jst been chattin on line with my ex gettin all emotional and shit wile im readinthis.....dam u this was good....pz.

MisterEThoughts · 08-17-2003, 06:07 PM

thanks vinous thanks a lot

in4it · 08-18-2003, 01:33 PM

very well written beautiful flow to it loved it loved it

08-15-2003, 05:19 PM	#1 (permalink)
MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Bay Area,Cali Posts: 1,962	Alone ALONE ALONE!!!! You wake up in the morning, And go on through your day. You do the things you always do, In much the same old way. Around, all kinds of people, But when the day is done, As darkness falls around you, You go through life alone. The friends you find all drift away, Like leaves do in the fall. You never seem to understand, The reasons for it all. I've seen the look upon your face, The teardrops in your eye, When love that someone gave to you, You tossed aside to die. You're going through your life alone, And the saddest part must be, You do not seem to realize, How sweet your life could be. To have someone to care for you, And stay right by your side, To fill your empty heart with love, Each and every night. So, lying in your bed tonight, Keep this thought in your mind. If it is really love you want, It's been here all the time. And as you see the days go by, You'll never see again. All the ones who cared for you, And love... that might have been. And if you're ever looking, For someone who could be, A lover and a friend to you, Through all eternity. You have to look no further, Than right here by your side, For I'm the one who loves you, And will until I die. ALONE thats how it's gonna be. __________________ complicated visionary....injected beauty... provided by the starry night of misery... http://www.lulu.com/browse/book_view.php?fCID=800464 My Published Book. "A Closed Window Of Truth"

08-15-2003, 05:59 PM	#2 (permalink)
49th Prophet Dark Magic Inferno Join Date: Jul 2003 Location: City Of Fire Posts: 1,239	Damn! Yo this real nice, the structure was flawless to me, it kept a real good flow to it, good shit...nice piece...much love peace __________________

08-16-2003, 02:56 AM	#4 (permalink)
MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Bay Area,Cali Posts: 1,962	thanks all but where all the other peeps at damn peeps come on uppin __________________ complicated visionary....injected beauty... provided by the starry night of misery... http://www.lulu.com/browse/book_view.php?fCID=800464 My Published Book. "A Closed Window Of Truth"

08-16-2003, 04:42 AM	#5 (permalink)
Mind~$oul I'm Pretty Join Date: Apr 2001 Location: North Memphis BITCH! Posts: 17,139	have to say i'm very impressed. One of your best piece i've seen. Keep it up one luv __________________ "Everybody wanna be a nicca, but don't nobody wanna be a nicca"-Paul Mooney "I tried to live right, but society aint made for niccas to live right"-Joe Budden

08-16-2003, 05:41 AM	#6 (permalink)
MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Bay Area,Cali Posts: 1,962	thanks mind soullz u the man i am practising bro thaks __________________ complicated visionary....injected beauty... provided by the starry night of misery... http://www.lulu.com/browse/book_view.php?fCID=800464 My Published Book. "A Closed Window Of Truth"

08-15-2003, 11:09 PM	#3 (permalink)
Dark_Angel Dark_Angel Join Date: Jul 2003 Location: Australia Posts: 798	gotta agree, the fow to this peice was awsome and just kept it up the whole way, emotional peice, i really liked this one from you fav bit ( all of it really, but this little bit what i wanted to quote) You wake up in the morning, And go on through your day. You do the things you always do, In much the same old way. Around, all kinds of people, But when the day is done, As darkness falls around you, You go through life alone.

08-16-2003, 07:06 AM	#7 (permalink)
Nebulaz fear God, not man Join Date: Mar 2001 Posts: 935	Now that is how you write a poem. and while you're practicing, give spelling a try. =) __________________ "It is impossible to account for the creation of the universe without the agency of a Supreme Being. It is impossible to govern the universe without the aid of a Supreme Being. It is impossible to reason without arriving at a Supreme Being. Religion is as necessary to reason as reason is to religion. The one cannot exist without the other. A reasoning being would lose reason in attempting to account for the great phenomena of nature, had he not a Supreme Being to refer to; and will has it been said, that if there had been no God, mankind would have been obliged to imagine one." - - George Washington

08-16-2003, 10:58 AM	#8 (permalink)
allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself Join Date: Mar 2003 Posts: 2,860	That was real good stay up, much love, peace __________________ And I sat watching a flower As it was withering I was embarrassed by its honesty So I'd prefer to be remembered as a smiling face Not this fucking wreck That's taken its place get some balls biatch or else

08-16-2003, 01:11 PM	#9 (permalink)
Un-SeeN MIC IMMORTAL Join Date: Nov 2000 Location: Tha Cross Roads... Where Man Meets Emcee Posts: 17,336	Great Piece, Breath taking. __________________ ···• MíÇ Infinite Alumni •··· SPLIT ® IMAGE ½ EGO ½ MOD Resting On Our Laurels™

08-16-2003, 06:12 PM	#10 (permalink)
MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Bay Area,Cali Posts: 1,962	haha thanks i thought i did good on spelling i guess i was wrong thanks though upping __________________ complicated visionary....injected beauty... provided by the starry night of misery... http://www.lulu.com/browse/book_view.php?fCID=800464 My Published Book. "A Closed Window Of Truth"

08-16-2003, 11:27 PM	#11 (permalink)
Princess skantless bitch Join Date: Jul 2003 Posts: 591	i have to agree with everyone else....wonderful piece my fav lines are The friends you find all drift away, Like leaves do in the fall. You never seem to understand, The reasons for it all. I've seen the look upon your face, The teardrops in your eye, When love that someone gave to you, You tossed aside to die. i could realte a lot with those there.....once again wonferful job keep it up __________________ "If you wasn't blood, would you still have love? Or infact does the blood make you think you have to love?"

08-17-2003, 02:00 AM	#12 (permalink)
misspimp a.k.a KATURAH Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Virginia Is For Lovers Posts: 1,308	Tight shit....bout to read it to a person who definetly needs to hear this...like took the words that were on the tip of my tounge (u know the words that just wont come out) right out of my mouth. I felt this piece... So, lying in your bed tonight, Keep this thought in your mind. If it is really love you want, It's been here all the time. And as you see the days go by, You'll never see again. All the ones who cared for you, And love... that might have been. ^^loved this part the most... mad love __________________ MAD LOVE "Never to suffer would never to have been blessed" ~THE LATE GREAT ~ ~EDGAR ALLEN POE ~

08-17-2003, 04:33 AM	#13 (permalink)
MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Bay Area,Cali Posts: 1,962	thanks everyone thanks miss and princess thanks a lot much love __________________ complicated visionary....injected beauty... provided by the starry night of misery... http://www.lulu.com/browse/book_view.php?fCID=800464 My Published Book. "A Closed Window Of Truth"

08-17-2003, 09:23 AM	#14 (permalink)
vinous Registered User Join Date: May 2003 Location: in a house Posts: 368	ahhh, dam man, this really got to me, jst been chattin on line with my ex gettin all emotional and shit wile im readinthis.....dam u this was good....pz. __________________ just take this longing from my tongue all the lonely things these hands have done

08-17-2003, 06:07 PM	#15 (permalink)
MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Bay Area,Cali Posts: 1,962	thanks vinous thanks a lot __________________ complicated visionary....injected beauty... provided by the starry night of misery... http://www.lulu.com/browse/book_view.php?fCID=800464 My Published Book. "A Closed Window Of Truth"

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08-18-2003, 01:33 PM	#16 (permalink)
in4it this is the way we roll Join Date: Jul 2002 Location: Da Ill state aint no love in it Posts: 2,778	very well written beautiful flow to it loved it loved it

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