I Slip Deeper

Dark_Angel · 07-17-2003, 03:02 AM

I slip deeper, as the hole creates my escape
Each day, each thought it determines my fate
The pain in my chest never goes away
It’s a constant reminder, like scars, that drive me insane
Im pushed closer the edge, the wind blows harder
I see the light, but the clouds are turning darker
I see the bottom, it invited me to come down
The waves whisper my name with their constant drown
The salty air stings my eyes but they stay clear
No more tears, I see the way, I’ve forgotten fear
I clutch the rock, it seems to be my only strength
But my hand releases and it’s grip doesn’t clench
I step closer the edge, that fated cliff ledge
A few more steps to freedom I say in my head
From the park I hear screams of laughter, if they only knew
The child they created was about to finally chose
To know the truth, about whether death is painful
I always thought yes, but now it seems to be my angel
It turns so dark, like the weather is my emotions
Gusty winds, dark clouds and rising waved oceans
Although I don’t mind it, it is me reflected
The world saw through my lies, I’ve been detected
Yet as the wind blows it still cant call out
Cant shout out ‘help, this girls about…’
But I’ve fallen, this thing is a thrill
An adrenaline rush that can only kill
So I’m lost in the ocean of tears and pain
Finally drowned in my own sorrow filled ways

Xero Satsujin · 07-17-2003, 03:19 AM

I wrote a piece a long while ago about an ocean of pain. I drowned too, and everybody surrounded me. But it was too late because I had already drowned within my own sorrowful ocean. I like this piece, it brings me back to the reason why I write...

skandelous_lala · 07-17-2003, 08:31 AM

nice piece, enjoyed the read

*GeMiNeYeZ* · 07-17-2003, 02:02 PM

this is a great poem, i like the imagery in it and everything... great job.

mixedlove · 07-17-2003, 05:00 PM

oh wow that was really good i feel you on that note

Mind~$oul · 07-17-2003, 05:43 PM

"if they only knew
The child they created was about to finally chose
To know the truth, about whether death is painful
I always thought yes, but now it seems to be my angel"

very poweful lines there. Imagery was on point

one luv

Dark_Angel · 07-17-2003, 07:46 PM

thanks for the replies, appreciate it

6ftground · 07-17-2003, 08:01 PM

Some days we find floods in are own back yard..Other days we just pray to weather it through our internal turmoil..But you know those day come and go like bad weather…We all been in the mist of the storm and it feel like salt water onAn open wound…. I know I almost drowned a couple of times..But my faith and prayers are herd I’m just glade I had the patients enoughTo receive them… I like this piece… a worth read… peace 6FTG

07-17-2003, 03:02 AM	#1 (permalink)
Dark_Angel Dark_Angel Join Date: Jul 2003 Location: Australia Posts: 798	I Slip Deeper I slip deeper, as the hole creates my escape Each day, each thought it determines my fate The pain in my chest never goes away It’s a constant reminder, like scars, that drive me insane Im pushed closer the edge, the wind blows harder I see the light, but the clouds are turning darker I see the bottom, it invited me to come down The waves whisper my name with their constant drown The salty air stings my eyes but they stay clear No more tears, I see the way, I’ve forgotten fear I clutch the rock, it seems to be my only strength But my hand releases and it’s grip doesn’t clench I step closer the edge, that fated cliff ledge A few more steps to freedom I say in my head From the park I hear screams of laughter, if they only knew The child they created was about to finally chose To know the truth, about whether death is painful I always thought yes, but now it seems to be my angel It turns so dark, like the weather is my emotions Gusty winds, dark clouds and rising waved oceans Although I don’t mind it, it is me reflected The world saw through my lies, I’ve been detected Yet as the wind blows it still cant call out Cant shout out ‘help, this girls about…’ But I’ve fallen, this thing is a thrill An adrenaline rush that can only kill So I’m lost in the ocean of tears and pain Finally drowned in my own sorrow filled ways

07-17-2003, 03:19 AM	#2 (permalink)
Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes Join Date: Jul 2003 Location: Sinking into the paper, like I was ink Posts: 2,196	I wrote a piece a long while ago about an ocean of pain. I drowned too, and everybody surrounded me. But it was too late because I had already drowned within my own sorrowful ocean. I like this piece, it brings me back to the reason why I write... __________________ !.¸(`!.¸Xero Satsujin¸.!`)¸.! "Laissez les bon temps rouler" "Time to a writer is like play dough in the hands of a toddler..."

07-17-2003, 08:31 AM	#3 (permalink)
skandelous_lala back from the dead Join Date: Sep 2000 Location: Hey! Fuck you and the horse you rode in on! Posts: 26,707	nice piece, enjoyed the read __________________ ALL YOU REALLY KNOW IS WHAT I CHOOSE TO SHOW Good Mourning, Good afternoon, Good nite, what have you done with your life?. Everybody's time comes to be embraced by the light you only afraid to die when you ain't livin right

07-17-2003, 02:02 PM	#4 (permalink)
GeMiNeYeZ ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~ Join Date: May 2001 Location: District Heights, MD Posts: 11,131	this is a great poem, i like the imagery in it and everything... great job. __________________ G e M i N e Y e Z ´·´.`.·ìÌìÌìíÍíÍí·.´.`·`Da Revolution´·´.`.·ìÌìÌìíÍíÍí·.´.`·` h \| g "If their purpose is of human origin, it will fail. But if it comes from God ...You cannot defeat them." ´.`.·ìÌìÌìíÍíÍí·.´.`Neon Genesis Evangelion´.`.·ìÌìÌìíÍíÍí·.´.`

07-17-2003, 05:00 PM	#5 (permalink)
mixedlove Registered User Join Date: May 2003 Location: where i'll die Posts: 17	oh wow that was really good i feel you on that note __________________ this place will bring to my dimise my writing destroy all of what i am without comprimise but its time lets make this right.

07-17-2003, 05:43 PM	#6 (permalink)
Mind~$oul I'm Pretty Join Date: Apr 2001 Location: North Memphis BITCH! Posts: 17,139	"if they only knew The child they created was about to finally chose To know the truth, about whether death is painful I always thought yes, but now it seems to be my angel" very poweful lines there. Imagery was on point one luv __________________ "Everybody wanna be a nicca, but don't nobody wanna be a nicca"-Paul Mooney "I tried to live right, but society aint made for niccas to live right"-Joe Budden

07-17-2003, 07:46 PM	#7 (permalink)
Dark_Angel Dark_Angel Join Date: Jul 2003 Location: Australia Posts: 798	thanks for the replies, appreciate it

07-17-2003, 08:01 PM	#8 (permalink)
6ftground MC-KHP Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: 3 story house by the mountains Posts: 1,751	Some days we find floods in are own back yard..Other days we just pray to weather it through our internal turmoil..But you know those day come and go like bad weather…We all been in the mist of the storm and it feel like salt water onAn open wound…. I know I almost drowned a couple of times..But my faith and prayers are herd I’m just glade I had the patients enoughTo receive them… I like this piece… a worth read… peace 6FTG __________________ DaMiddleFinger

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