My first poem

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Old 07-01-2003, 03:41 AM   #1 (permalink)
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My first poem
Alright this is my first time trying this tell me whatchall think

at first sight
youre beauty left me amazed
and i thought you might
be the woman that ive always craved
i never noticed you before
but glad i noticed today
my days were such a bore
but you made the boredom go away
i get a warm and tingling feeling
whenever you are around
i have feelings for you that i have been concealing
but ill tell you when the time comes around
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Old 07-01-2003, 04:12 AM   #2 (permalink)
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this was nice, being that it was your first time. But keep writing, and you'll get better and better. Hope to see more from you soon and welcome to the realm

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Old 07-01-2003, 01:46 PM   #3 (permalink)
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nice poem... better than alot of other people's first poems... nice emotion and great job making it rhyme... i hope you continue to write and post up in here!
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Old 07-01-2003, 02:01 PM   #4 (permalink)
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nice job, this girl sounds lucky
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Old 07-01-2003, 04:02 PM   #5 (permalink)
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Old 07-01-2003, 05:53 PM   #6 (permalink)
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this was short n sweet =) this was good for a first poem...i agree with dead2u... thats a lucky girl
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Old 07-02-2003, 02:54 AM   #8 (permalink)
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this was a nice picece...keep writin...elevation comes in time

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