Deep Soothing Harmony...

varentao · 06-30-2003, 09:10 PM

Blistering pain of thousand lucid souls
Torn and ravaged by these concrete lands
Babylon’s composition spawned from order
I sit upon its rough curb on oblivion’s edge

Soothed by floating notes of arcane dusk tunes

Obsessed with deep lying anal sex
Absorbing screams of pain filled joy
Fixated on her dirty sweet nipples that erect
Each beat played into nether region’s caves

Echoing darkness with laughs of torment...

Soaked in sweat of thick blood amid tears
A bitter hateful voice yells “parasitical pig!”
Angst ridden one replies “but I hate pork”
Songs of string play ‘cannibals by ignorance’

Plucking at my grin as each cry is heard..

Plundering thoughts into cryptic wonderment
The melody smooth like an angel’s caress
It’s raw beauty that I hear tickles every sense...

Look into my eyes and see,
My friend, my enemy, always artiste..
Dark reality

vinous · 06-30-2003, 09:56 PM

ahhhh, shit...i gotta be honest, this poem wreaks of pure brilliance to me,tho im tryin to figure wat its really all about, and im only gettin inklings of understanding....so...i think il wait for others to reply before i give a proper reply, let the others do the thinking for me, haha, pz.

h.wood · 06-30-2003, 11:33 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by varentao

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Plundering thoughts into cryptic wonderment
The melody smooth like an angel’s caress
It’s raw beauty that I hear tickles every sense...

Look into my eyes and see,
My friend, my enemy, always artiste..
Dark reality

i liked these lines and how dark the poem is

Mind~$oul · 06-30-2003, 11:39 PM

Yeah like h.wood said, this indeed is a dark poem. lol somewhat brutal from what i've read. But there was some parts i really didnt get...hope u can expalin some of it

one luv

allnakey · 07-01-2003, 09:42 AM

yo its good and all , but i dont get it, this piece confuses me

well w/e

stay p, much love, peace

varentao · 07-01-2003, 11:04 AM

Aye, it is one of the more cryptic pieces..

...the clues are there, just gotta get ya shovels out...

This is what i was writing to. Though it goes beyond and away from that...it may provide some clue i guess...though still gotta dig alot...cos that's just the basis of it...you know, the train that carries the 'passengers'...gah!

" soothing melody placed in ones soul.Capture the very feelings one may have while being obsorbed with possibly music or the melody of nature....."

^^^Trust me, it's a distant relation to that...

...comments appreciated...though one of the main reasons i post is so i can see what people will get out the pieces (and of course, critique...)..

..resp..

varentao · 07-02-2003, 02:09 PM

I don't usually, but i'm intrigued...

tk2oo3 · 07-02-2003, 02:16 PM

the music is sinful nature of every human being?? i cant come up wit anything else.. i feel like this is describing sin and the unbreakable nature of a person which he succumbs to & the persons unable to resist temptation.. nice piece.. probably went way over my head though haha

*GeMiNeYeZ* · 07-02-2003, 02:27 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by vinous

ahhhh, shit...i gotta be honest, this poem wreaks of pure brilliance to me,tho im tryin to figure wat its really all about

the same thing i was thinking lol.

varentao · 07-02-2003, 09:21 PM

tk2003, you got a bit of it...but overall, nah...has nothing to do with music in the way you were talking of...it was meant in a less literal sense..

..comments appreciated..

iceheart · 07-02-2003, 10:03 PM

i've got an idea what it's about but i want to hear it first, are you gonna tell us?

varentao · 07-03-2003, 07:51 AM

I'll make it loose. Don't want to go to much into it.

One who absorbs and gets exhilariated in a poetic way about pain and misery...of others much as his own.

It's kind of artistic, he sees so much, and has come to a realisation that some might find sick. He himself inflicts very little pain and misery, but he sees the beauty within the darkness, within the pain and misery...within the horror even...(that is so hard to explain, that what i jsut said doesn't do it justice...it's one of those things you either 'get' or don't...)..

But more so it explores the darkness within humanity in general. And how this guy is at least honest enough to recognise it, and embrace it. Control it, yet not control it. The darkness that comes from things tha tmany others would see as light...

...even seeing the sick humour that is within humanity and the wiorld in general.

Soaked in sweat of thick blood amid tears
A bitter hateful voice yells “parasitical pig!”
Angst ridden one replies “but I hate pork”
Songs of string play ‘cannibals by ignorance’

Plucking at my grin as each cry is heard..

^^^there was a joke in that. A joke that one would only laugh at
if they were the other person, or so absorbed in the 'darkness''..in this case the latter...but ALSO the former...so i can't see much people finding it funny..but it's also kind of another realisation thing...showing another side to him (and therefore humanity)...he laughs at something so sick and dark...not out of hate...but out of observation n what not...

er....i know none of that helped...but you asked for it...

comments appreciated..

skandelous_lala · 07-03-2003, 08:55 AM

i have no idea what the hell you are talking about lol...but nonetheless it was great. good job!

iceheart · 07-03-2003, 10:55 AM

thanks that was very helpful, makes the poem a lot more enjoyable. peace

iceheart

varentao · 07-03-2003, 08:56 PM

^^^does it?! Well i guess you'll be leaving now..*gets hat..*..

iceheart · 07-04-2003, 12:20 AM

varentao · 07-04-2003, 08:25 PM

^^Sick...very sick...muah!..

06-30-2003, 09:10 PM	#1 (permalink)
varentao Registered User Join Date: Apr 2003 Posts: 765	Deep Soothing Harmony... Blistering pain of thousand lucid souls Torn and ravaged by these concrete lands Babylon’s composition spawned from order I sit upon its rough curb on oblivion’s edge Soothed by floating notes of arcane dusk tunes Obsessed with deep lying anal sex Absorbing screams of pain filled joy Fixated on her dirty sweet nipples that erect Each beat played into nether region’s caves Echoing darkness with laughs of torment... Soaked in sweat of thick blood amid tears A bitter hateful voice yells “parasitical pig!” Angst ridden one replies “but I hate pork” Songs of string play ‘cannibals by ignorance’ Plucking at my grin as each cry is heard.. Plundering thoughts into cryptic wonderment The melody smooth like an angel’s caress It’s raw beauty that I hear tickles every sense... Look into my eyes and see, My friend, my enemy, always artiste.. Dark reality

06-30-2003, 09:56 PM	#2 (permalink)
vinous Registered User Join Date: May 2003 Location: in a house Posts: 368	ahhhh, shit...i gotta be honest, this poem wreaks of pure brilliance to me,tho im tryin to figure wat its really all about, and im only gettin inklings of understanding....so...i think il wait for others to reply before i give a proper reply, let the others do the thinking for me, haha, pz. __________________ just take this longing from my tongue all the lonely things these hands have done

06-30-2003, 11:39 PM	#4 (permalink)
Mind~$oul I'm Pretty Join Date: Apr 2001 Location: North Memphis BITCH! Posts: 17,139	Yeah like h.wood said, this indeed is a dark poem. lol somewhat brutal from what i've read. But there was some parts i really didnt get...hope u can expalin some of it one luv __________________ "Everybody wanna be a nicca, but don't nobody wanna be a nicca"-Paul Mooney "I tried to live right, but society aint made for niccas to live right"-Joe Budden

07-01-2003, 09:42 AM	#5 (permalink)
allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself Join Date: Mar 2003 Posts: 2,860	yo its good and all , but i dont get it, this piece confuses me well w/e stay p, much love, peace __________________ And I sat watching a flower As it was withering I was embarrassed by its honesty So I'd prefer to be remembered as a smiling face Not this fucking wreck That's taken its place get some balls biatch or else

07-02-2003, 02:16 PM	#8 (permalink)
tk2oo3 Registered User Join Date: Jun 2003 Posts: 2,082	the music is sinful nature of every human being?? i cant come up wit anything else.. i feel like this is describing sin and the unbreakable nature of a person which he succumbs to & the persons unable to resist temptation.. nice piece.. probably went way over my head though haha __________________ "Theres ten rules to the game, but ill share wit you two Know, niggaz goin hate you for whatever you do Now rule one, get yo cash on, M O B Thats, money over bitches, cuz they breed envy Now rule two is a hard one, watch fo phonies Keep yo enemies close nigga, watch yo homies" "Weak mothafuckaz dont deserve to breathe How many niggaz down to die for me"

07-01-2003, 11:04 AM	#6 (permalink)
varentao Registered User Join Date: Apr 2003 Posts: 765	Aye, it is one of the more cryptic pieces.. ...the clues are there, just gotta get ya shovels out... This is what i was writing to. Though it goes beyond and away from that...it may provide some clue i guess...though still gotta dig alot...cos that's just the basis of it...you know, the train that carries the 'passengers'...gah! " soothing melody placed in ones soul.Capture the very feelings one may have while being obsorbed with possibly music or the melody of nature....." ^^^Trust me, it's a distant relation to that... ...comments appreciated...though one of the main reasons i post is so i can see what people will get out the pieces (and of course, critique...).. ..resp..

07-02-2003, 02:09 PM	#7 (permalink)
varentao Registered User Join Date: Apr 2003 Posts: 765	I don't usually, but i'm intrigued...

07-02-2003, 09:21 PM	#10 (permalink)
varentao Registered User Join Date: Apr 2003 Posts: 765	tk2003, you got a bit of it...but overall, nah...has nothing to do with music in the way you were talking of...it was meant in a less literal sense.. ..comments appreciated..

07-02-2003, 10:03 PM	#11 (permalink)
iceheart The Frozen Poet Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: antarctica - they sent me here citin some shit like "you are a danger to society" wtf. Posts: 692	i've got an idea what it's about but i want to hear it first, are you gonna tell us?

07-03-2003, 07:51 AM	#12 (permalink)
varentao Registered User Join Date: Apr 2003 Posts: 765	I'll make it loose. Don't want to go to much into it. One who absorbs and gets exhilariated in a poetic way about pain and misery...of others much as his own. It's kind of artistic, he sees so much, and has come to a realisation that some might find sick. He himself inflicts very little pain and misery, but he sees the beauty within the darkness, within the pain and misery...within the horror even...(that is so hard to explain, that what i jsut said doesn't do it justice...it's one of those things you either 'get' or don't...).. But more so it explores the darkness within humanity in general. And how this guy is at least honest enough to recognise it, and embrace it. Control it, yet not control it. The darkness that comes from things tha tmany others would see as light... ...even seeing the sick humour that is within humanity and the wiorld in general. Soaked in sweat of thick blood amid tears A bitter hateful voice yells “parasitical pig!” Angst ridden one replies “but I hate pork” Songs of string play ‘cannibals by ignorance’ Plucking at my grin as each cry is heard.. ^^^there was a joke in that. A joke that one would only laugh at if they were the other person, or so absorbed in the 'darkness''..in this case the latter...but ALSO the former...so i can't see much people finding it funny..but it's also kind of another realisation thing...showing another side to him (and therefore humanity)...he laughs at something so sick and dark...not out of hate...but out of observation n what not... er....i know none of that helped...but you asked for it... comments appreciated..

07-03-2003, 08:55 AM	#13 (permalink)
skandelous_lala back from the dead Join Date: Sep 2000 Location: Hey! Fuck you and the horse you rode in on! Posts: 26,707	i have no idea what the hell you are talking about lol...but nonetheless it was great. good job! __________________ ALL YOU REALLY KNOW IS WHAT I CHOOSE TO SHOW Good Mourning, Good afternoon, Good nite, what have you done with your life?. Everybody's time comes to be embraced by the light you only afraid to die when you ain't livin right

07-03-2003, 10:55 AM	#14 (permalink)
iceheart The Frozen Poet Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: antarctica - they sent me here citin some shit like "you are a danger to society" wtf. Posts: 692	thanks that was very helpful, makes the poem a lot more enjoyable. peace iceheart

07-03-2003, 08:56 PM	#15 (permalink)
varentao Registered User Join Date: Apr 2003 Posts: 765	^^^does it?! Well i guess you'll be leaving now..gets hat....

07-04-2003, 12:20 AM	#16 (permalink)
iceheart The Frozen Poet Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: antarctica - they sent me here citin some shit like "you are a danger to society" wtf. Posts: 692	lol

07-04-2003, 08:25 PM	#17 (permalink)
varentao Registered User Join Date: Apr 2003 Posts: 765	^^Sick...very sick...muah!..

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