as I reminisce...

NAiT · 06-24-2003, 12:56 PM

I know it's depressing, but I hope I painted the picture in my head. probably not.........

I wake up dreaming of a life once lost
not bittersweet just a permanent frost
the aftertones of agony just apathy
while demons claws scrape my spine
I'm begging myself to reconsider
sometimes I can smell the mountain air
in my mind I see an angel dancing there
in between spots of weeping bleeding starts
my new heart doesn't beat so easily
my new soul doesn't have the same familiarity
so I just sit back and reminisice
remembering how I once visited
in my dreams I wake up missing bliss

Brit Boi Gee · 06-24-2003, 03:58 PM

pretty nice piece, this familar feeling of new feelings which growth brings.

"sometimes I can smell the mountain air
in my mind I see an angel dancing there"

this part was a breathe of fresh air, offered such an escape.

keep it up

Mind~$oul · 06-25-2003, 01:49 AM

"sometimes I can smell the mountain air
in my mind I see an angel dancing there"

damn man that's what i call imagery. That was breath of fresh air. Great work

D.B. · 06-25-2003, 03:31 AM

I wake up dreaming of a life once lost
not bittersweet just a permanent frost

^fav. lines...nice drop...stay up yo

Swiss Miss · 06-25-2003, 03:35 AM

I enjoyed this piece even if it was a lil depressing...life isn't always about familiar faces and good times. Nice

Lauren

06-24-2003, 12:56 PM	#1 (permalink)
NAiT myself Join Date: Jul 1999 Location: D.C. Posts: 1,265	as I reminisce... I know it's depressing, but I hope I painted the picture in my head. probably not......... I wake up dreaming of a life once lost not bittersweet just a permanent frost the aftertones of agony just apathy while demons claws scrape my spine I'm begging myself to reconsider sometimes I can smell the mountain air in my mind I see an angel dancing there in between spots of weeping bleeding starts my new heart doesn't beat so easily my new soul doesn't have the same familiarity so I just sit back and reminisice remembering how I once visited in my dreams I wake up missing bliss

06-24-2003, 03:58 PM	#2 (permalink)
Brit Boi Gee manifest the zen Join Date: Mar 2002 Location: Near To Athena Posts: 15,847	pretty nice piece, this familar feeling of new feelings which growth brings. "sometimes I can smell the mountain air in my mind I see an angel dancing there" this part was a breathe of fresh air, offered such an escape. keep it up __________________ Those friends thou hast, and their adoption tried, Grapple them to thy soul with hoops of steel. -William Shakespeare Brit Boi has a highly calibrated wifermometer

06-25-2003, 01:49 AM	#3 (permalink)
Mind~$oul I'm Pretty Join Date: Apr 2001 Location: North Memphis BITCH! Posts: 17,139	"sometimes I can smell the mountain air in my mind I see an angel dancing there" damn man that's what i call imagery. That was breath of fresh air. Great work __________________ "Everybody wanna be a nicca, but don't nobody wanna be a nicca"-Paul Mooney "I tried to live right, but society aint made for niccas to live right"-Joe Budden

06-25-2003, 03:31 AM	#4 (permalink)
D.B. Death Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: NJ Posts: 153	I wake up dreaming of a life once lost not bittersweet just a permanent frost ^fav. lines...nice drop...stay up yo __________________ D eathblow

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06-25-2003, 03:35 AM	#5 (permalink)
Swiss Miss Registered User Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Western NC Posts: 135	I enjoyed this piece even if it was a lil depressing...life isn't always about familiar faces and good times. Nice Lauren

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