Please... just stop

06-15-2003, 08:09 AM

I'm sorry for making you mad mom, but please don't knock me down, Im just trying to understand what you go through.
Aren't the abrasions on my physical being and emotions enough for you.
If it wasn't for you, I wouldn't be able to do the things I was meant to do.
Please don't blacken my appearance to make yourself happier.
I just want you to absorb me in your arms because thats what I'm here for.
Also, never lay a hand on my sister again, she did nothing to you at all.
I'd rather stand in her place, at least I can get up no matter how many times I fall.
Sooner or later you must realize your hand wont hurt me, the belt wont hurt me, nothing will hurt me.
The only thing that hurts me is the fact that you treat us like dirt, you see
You had to realize that you would need us later on in life
but now that she has a husband, and I got a wife
we dont need you or your strife
I dont want to go through it, so it looks like your path on life is on a skid
But, I must thank you for teaching me how not to treat my kids.

thanks for reading.

Feme Sole · 06-15-2003, 08:15 AM

wow......i wrote a vicious piece for my mommy before too......raw emotions here.....you kinda took me there....youre improving with every piece and if you ever need help with anything let me know......

06-15-2003, 08:37 AM

i need to stop forcing rhymes, or words, or something like that.

lpoet · 06-15-2003, 09:08 AM

i likes...i think i've told u that at times your stuff seems a lil forced...but that can be improved...i like this piece...very raw...like a vent.....a much more controled vent then i would do...lol..but still good......had some nice stuff in here

Aren't the abrasions on my physical being and emotions enough for you

feeling that.....

enjoying all your work...glad your sticking around....get at me on aim sometime....mahgirba

*GeMiNeYeZ* · 06-15-2003, 06:32 PM

dang... alot of emotion in this piece directed to your mother... i do agree about forcin ya rhymes. nice job though!

augee.ali · 06-15-2003, 11:23 PM

This reminds me of Eminem's "Cleaning My Closet"....Got me over here singing and shit...*I'm sorry mama...I never meant to hurt youuuu....* Nice drop.

06-15-2003, 08:09 AM	#1 (permalink)
iconoclast Guest Posts: n/a	Please... just stop I'm sorry for making you mad mom, but please don't knock me down, Im just trying to understand what you go through. Aren't the abrasions on my physical being and emotions enough for you. If it wasn't for you, I wouldn't be able to do the things I was meant to do. Please don't blacken my appearance to make yourself happier. I just want you to absorb me in your arms because thats what I'm here for. Also, never lay a hand on my sister again, she did nothing to you at all. I'd rather stand in her place, at least I can get up no matter how many times I fall. Sooner or later you must realize your hand wont hurt me, the belt wont hurt me, nothing will hurt me. The only thing that hurts me is the fact that you treat us like dirt, you see You had to realize that you would need us later on in life but now that she has a husband, and I got a wife we dont need you or your strife I dont want to go through it, so it looks like your path on life is on a skid But, I must thank you for teaching me how not to treat my kids. thanks for reading.

06-15-2003, 08:15 AM	#2 (permalink)
Feme Sole TheGirlWhoSoldTheWorld Join Date: Apr 2002 Location: i stay below the surface, breaking bread with worms, it's depravity, not gravity, that anchors flesh to earth Posts: 18,029	wow......i wrote a vicious piece for my mommy before too......raw emotions here.....you kinda took me there....youre improving with every piece and if you ever need help with anything let me know...... __________________ Malo: let me put my middle finger in your monthly blood and paint a smile on your face love never gave me an orgasm Look at you unbelievably brilliant beautiful you you're looking deliciously divine darling you really and truly do

06-15-2003, 09:08 AM	#4 (permalink)
lpoet POET Join Date: Oct 2002 Location: Indianapolis, IN Posts: 12,672	i likes...i think i've told u that at times your stuff seems a lil forced...but that can be improved...i like this piece...very raw...like a vent.....a much more controled vent then i would do...lol..but still good......had some nice stuff in here Aren't the abrasions on my physical being and emotions enough for you feeling that..... enjoying all your work...glad your sticking around....get at me on aim sometime....mahgirba __________________ "SHE CAME BACK TO ME AND I PRAY SHE STAYS" --lpoet

06-15-2003, 06:32 PM	#5 (permalink)
GeMiNeYeZ ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~ Join Date: May 2001 Location: District Heights, MD Posts: 11,131	dang... alot of emotion in this piece directed to your mother... i do agree about forcin ya rhymes. nice job though! __________________ G e M i N e Y e Z ´·´.`.·ìÌìÌìíÍíÍí·.´.`·`Da Revolution´·´.`.·ìÌìÌìíÍíÍí·.´.`·` h \| g "If their purpose is of human origin, it will fail. But if it comes from God ...You cannot defeat them." ´.`.·ìÌìÌìíÍíÍí·.´.`Neon Genesis Evangelion´.`.·ìÌìÌìíÍíÍí·.´.`

06-15-2003, 11:23 PM	#6 (permalink)
augee.ali Lively Up Yourself... Join Date: Feb 2003 Location: Gem City Posts: 1,734	This reminds me of Eminem's "Cleaning My Closet"....Got me over here singing and shit...I'm sorry mama...I never meant to hurt youuuu.... Nice drop. __________________ *Lively Up Yourself...* And Don't Be no Drag...

06-15-2003, 08:37 AM	#3 (permalink)
iconoclast Guest Posts: n/a	i need to stop forcing rhymes, or words, or something like that.

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