not really good...but i had too piece

unspoken1 · 06-14-2003, 04:37 PM

it was the best of times it was the worst of times
funny how words ring immortal in the minds of the mortal
for it was the best of times
you and me
the fun the laughter
when i was down you always knew you could unlock the key to my heart
you knew when i was mad
you knew when i was happy
me waking up every morning just to look in your eyes
just to see your smile
just to hear you laugh
yet it was the worst of times
they lying
pretending
games that you played with my soul
who would hav thought you would be the one with the dagger pointed at my heart
the same one who made me laugh
would be the first to make me cry
the same one who made me want to live
would be the first to make me want to die
and die i did
at the hands of you
and yes i do hate you
i hate you for what you did
i hate you for who you are
i hate you

lpoet · 06-14-2003, 05:05 PM

hes back!

haha

glad to see you up in here

funny how words ring immortal in the minds of the mortal

lovin those lines.....this piece was dope....again shows how much you've grown since you've been on this site......your writting is mos def getting better....

still wanting to collab but i have no ideas....

upin

unspoken1 · 06-14-2003, 05:47 PM

well well well....i expect to come back to you having your piece written already guess not haha.......thanks man....uppin

Mind~$oul · 06-14-2003, 05:55 PM

glad to see you postin again. lpoet was right, seems like everytime i read something from you it's better than the last. Keepin growing

one luv

unspoken1 · 06-14-2003, 09:20 PM

thank you....uppin

unspoken1 · 06-16-2003, 12:34 AM

hmmmmmm....uppin

vinous · 06-16-2003, 05:13 AM

this just seems.....real to me, um dont know wat im tryna say, but yeh, real, unpretentious......thin line between love and hate, heh, thats the risk u take....luv the ending for some reason, pz.

mocha_licious · 06-17-2003, 11:49 PM

yes to me u def are the revolutionary wordsmen....ur like a chamelion...(mispell?)..you are very versatile with your pieces and i respect that.....mos def felt this one...last ten lines were my favorite...

06-14-2003, 04:37 PM	#1 (permalink)
unspoken1 Revolutionary Wordsmen Join Date: Nov 2002 Location: beyond the depths of pain Posts: 758	not really good...but i had too piece it was the best of times it was the worst of times funny how words ring immortal in the minds of the mortal for it was the best of times you and me the fun the laughter when i was down you always knew you could unlock the key to my heart you knew when i was mad you knew when i was happy me waking up every morning just to look in your eyes just to see your smile just to hear you laugh yet it was the worst of times they lying pretending games that you played with my soul who would hav thought you would be the one with the dagger pointed at my heart the same one who made me laugh would be the first to make me cry the same one who made me want to live would be the first to make me want to die and die i did at the hands of you and yes i do hate you i hate you for what you did i hate you for who you are i hate you __________________ Overlooked noise.......stay tuned in

06-14-2003, 05:05 PM	#2 (permalink)
lpoet POET Join Date: Oct 2002 Location: Indianapolis, IN Posts: 12,672	hes back! haha glad to see you up in here funny how words ring immortal in the minds of the mortal lovin those lines.....this piece was dope....again shows how much you've grown since you've been on this site......your writting is mos def getting better.... still wanting to collab but i have no ideas.... upin __________________ "SHE CAME BACK TO ME AND I PRAY SHE STAYS" --lpoet

06-14-2003, 05:47 PM	#3 (permalink)
unspoken1 Revolutionary Wordsmen Join Date: Nov 2002 Location: beyond the depths of pain Posts: 758	well well well....i expect to come back to you having your piece written already guess not haha.......thanks man....uppin __________________ Overlooked noise.......stay tuned in

06-14-2003, 05:55 PM	#4 (permalink)
Mind~$oul I'm Pretty Join Date: Apr 2001 Location: North Memphis BITCH! Posts: 17,139	glad to see you postin again. lpoet was right, seems like everytime i read something from you it's better than the last. Keepin growing one luv __________________ "Everybody wanna be a nicca, but don't nobody wanna be a nicca"-Paul Mooney "I tried to live right, but society aint made for niccas to live right"-Joe Budden

06-14-2003, 09:20 PM	#5 (permalink)
unspoken1 Revolutionary Wordsmen Join Date: Nov 2002 Location: beyond the depths of pain Posts: 758	thank you....uppin __________________ Overlooked noise.......stay tuned in

06-16-2003, 12:34 AM	#6 (permalink)
unspoken1 Revolutionary Wordsmen Join Date: Nov 2002 Location: beyond the depths of pain Posts: 758	hmmmmmm....uppin __________________ Overlooked noise.......stay tuned in

06-16-2003, 05:13 AM	#7 (permalink)
vinous Registered User Join Date: May 2003 Location: in a house Posts: 368	this just seems.....real to me, um dont know wat im tryna say, but yeh, real, unpretentious......thin line between love and hate, heh, thats the risk u take....luv the ending for some reason, pz. __________________ just take this longing from my tongue all the lonely things these hands have done

06-17-2003, 11:49 PM	#8 (permalink)
mocha_licious Registered User Join Date: May 2003 Location: in the u.s.a. Posts: 1,280	yes to me u def are the revolutionary wordsmen....ur like a chamelion...(mispell?)..you are very versatile with your pieces and i respect that.....mos def felt this one...last ten lines were my favorite... __________________ Even when i'm hiding, love's calling........(here I come....)

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