I dont know what to title this poem

mumblez · 06-14-2003, 05:46 AM

Hey everyone I would appreciate a reply, peace!

That night, last night, I didn't mean to blur your eye sight (cry)
I feel bad, I hope that you're alright
We talk, and share our feelings for one another
Last night, our convo was deeper than any other
I hope that our relationship begins to grow
My feelings for you, I would just like to show
Telling you how I feel
Everything I mean, I just keep it real
I wanna see you smile, never cry
Always honest, I will never lie
I promise to be everything you expect
I just hope that you will care for me, never reject me
I care for you in more ways than one
I want us to love one another, and have fun

I express myself to you in ways I've never expressed
I'm glad I'm able to do this, my feelings stay compressed
I needed to releive them
Instead of keep them
They bog me down and make me cry
For reasons unknown why
You tell me I'm a special person
But I'm just a normal version (of a person)
I am glad that you share your feelings with me too
The more you share, the more I care for you

Always wanting to be there
Holding you in my arms and showin you that I care
I can't help to deny that I love you
I wish you could be near me and I would touch you
In ways that you have never been touched before
Lick you from head to toe, make your body moan and soar
Things that I thought that I would never be capable of
Instead I can control your feelings and body with a lick of a tongue
So heavenly, that I bet you are
Nothing more beautiful, I can see you from far
The times that we share together, Im sure will remain
Forever, just me and you, until I go insane

Crazy thoughts often enter my mind
How you feel for me and how you say your love is blind
You say that you care for me but I often doubt
That your love for me is deep as you say it is...
I guess I don't know what love is about
I can't help but to tell you this
Before we get together and you give me my first kiss
I can imagine us together, smiling makin you feel better
Loving me for always, nothing will ever be better
The most important thing that I have to tell you,
Is that I love you

06-14-2003, 07:16 AM

I express myself to you in ways I've never expressed
I'm glad I'm able to do this, my feelings stay compressed
I needed to releive them
Instead of keep them
They bog me down and make me cry
For reasons unknown why
You tell me I'm a special person
But I'm just a normal version (of a person)
I am glad that you share your feelings with me too
The more you share, the more I care for you

That left me in shock, it was really good. especially the line about being a special person, but im just a normal version. Wow, this was great.

mumblez · 06-14-2003, 08:55 AM

Thanks yo, glad you like my writing. Keep uppin plz
-1

lpoet · 06-14-2003, 09:37 AM

2 for 1

i reply to 2 of yours you peep one of mines...

sounds good to me...haha

this shit is blazing man....u should most def post more.......

what iconoclast was dope!

loved this whole piece..solid from top to bottom..seems like a lot of thought was put into it....

now i wanna see more..dont just drop 2 and leave for a 4 mths...

skandelous_lala · 06-14-2003, 09:39 AM

pretty nice....you wrote it like you were actually saying it to some one...pretty cool "crawl inside your mind" feeling

mumblez · 06-14-2003, 09:52 AM

Actually, I was kind of thinking like I was saying it to someone when I wrote it.

Thanks lpoet, I got ya, I'll reply to ya stuff.

-Uno

Mind~$oul · 06-14-2003, 05:48 PM

you already know what i said about this when you sent me this. Great work

augee.ali · 06-14-2003, 08:48 PM

What i like most about this is I can read it and picture how it would be said to someone...A lotta times that's hard to pull off.

chillone · 06-17-2003, 10:31 AM

I'm feelin' what you wrote mumz... very nice work..

06-14-2003, 05:46 AM	#1 (permalink)
mumblez Registered User Join Date: Sep 2002 Location: Tampa, FL Posts: 131	I dont know what to title this poem Hey everyone I would appreciate a reply, peace! That night, last night, I didn't mean to blur your eye sight (cry) I feel bad, I hope that you're alright We talk, and share our feelings for one another Last night, our convo was deeper than any other I hope that our relationship begins to grow My feelings for you, I would just like to show Telling you how I feel Everything I mean, I just keep it real I wanna see you smile, never cry Always honest, I will never lie I promise to be everything you expect I just hope that you will care for me, never reject me I care for you in more ways than one I want us to love one another, and have fun I express myself to you in ways I've never expressed I'm glad I'm able to do this, my feelings stay compressed I needed to releive them Instead of keep them They bog me down and make me cry For reasons unknown why You tell me I'm a special person But I'm just a normal version (of a person) I am glad that you share your feelings with me too The more you share, the more I care for you Always wanting to be there Holding you in my arms and showin you that I care I can't help to deny that I love you I wish you could be near me and I would touch you In ways that you have never been touched before Lick you from head to toe, make your body moan and soar Things that I thought that I would never be capable of Instead I can control your feelings and body with a lick of a tongue So heavenly, that I bet you are Nothing more beautiful, I can see you from far The times that we share together, Im sure will remain Forever, just me and you, until I go insane Crazy thoughts often enter my mind How you feel for me and how you say your love is blind You say that you care for me but I often doubt That your love for me is deep as you say it is... I guess I don't know what love is about I can't help but to tell you this Before we get together and you give me my first kiss I can imagine us together, smiling makin you feel better Loving me for always, nothing will ever be better The most important thing that I have to tell you, Is that I love you

06-14-2003, 09:37 AM	#4 (permalink)
lpoet POET Join Date: Oct 2002 Location: Indianapolis, IN Posts: 12,672	2 for 1 i reply to 2 of yours you peep one of mines... sounds good to me...haha this shit is blazing man....u should most def post more....... what iconoclast was dope! loved this whole piece..solid from top to bottom..seems like a lot of thought was put into it.... now i wanna see more..dont just drop 2 and leave for a 4 mths... __________________ "SHE CAME BACK TO ME AND I PRAY SHE STAYS" --lpoet

06-14-2003, 09:39 AM	#5 (permalink)
skandelous_lala back from the dead Join Date: Sep 2000 Location: Hey! Fuck you and the horse you rode in on! Posts: 26,707	pretty nice....you wrote it like you were actually saying it to some one...pretty cool "crawl inside your mind" feeling __________________ ALL YOU REALLY KNOW IS WHAT I CHOOSE TO SHOW Good Mourning, Good afternoon, Good nite, what have you done with your life?. Everybody's time comes to be embraced by the light you only afraid to die when you ain't livin right

06-14-2003, 05:48 PM	#7 (permalink)
Mind~$oul I'm Pretty Join Date: Apr 2001 Location: North Memphis BITCH! Posts: 17,139	you already know what i said about this when you sent me this. Great work __________________ "Everybody wanna be a nicca, but don't nobody wanna be a nicca"-Paul Mooney "I tried to live right, but society aint made for niccas to live right"-Joe Budden

06-14-2003, 08:48 PM	#8 (permalink)
augee.ali Lively Up Yourself... Join Date: Feb 2003 Location: Gem City Posts: 1,734	What i like most about this is I can read it and picture how it would be said to someone...A lotta times that's hard to pull off. __________________ *Lively Up Yourself...* And Don't Be no Drag...

06-14-2003, 07:16 AM	#2 (permalink)
iconoclast Guest Posts: n/a	I express myself to you in ways I've never expressed I'm glad I'm able to do this, my feelings stay compressed I needed to releive them Instead of keep them They bog me down and make me cry For reasons unknown why You tell me I'm a special person But I'm just a normal version (of a person) I am glad that you share your feelings with me too The more you share, the more I care for you That left me in shock, it was really good. especially the line about being a special person, but im just a normal version. Wow, this was great.

06-14-2003, 08:55 AM	#3 (permalink)
mumblez Registered User Join Date: Sep 2002 Location: Tampa, FL Posts: 131	Thanks yo, glad you like my writing. Keep uppin plz -1

06-14-2003, 09:52 AM	#6 (permalink)
mumblez Registered User Join Date: Sep 2002 Location: Tampa, FL Posts: 131	Actually, I was kind of thinking like I was saying it to someone when I wrote it. Thanks lpoet, I got ya, I'll reply to ya stuff. -Uno

06-17-2003, 10:31 AM	#9 (permalink)
chillone Registered User Join Date: May 2003 Location: charlotte Posts: 12	I'm feelin' what you wrote mumz... very nice work.. __________________ chillone!!!

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