Insomnia

BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum · 05-24-2003, 06:48 PM

INSOMNIA

Light shines down
Right now
In dreamscapes
We fake
Lies in the existence
of
Time in these rhythmic old
minds
That can see us,
Be us in an instant
Subconscious rears us
Close in an instant,
I
Used to think sleeping
Was neither being
Awake or dead
Born of breath
The
Faith of a mustard seed
I
Know that the
Subconcious awakes
When the conscious
is away
For
Memories and Reveries
Reverberating past lives
Try
Not to deny
The reality of dreams
Reality of screams
Reality of scenes
I see that reality
And that reality is me
Frightfully crying
The insanity
Is prying
Through the thousands of eyes
We perceive
Can perceive the real me
Can't perceive the real he
So my life isn't fair
Body is revealed
Seeing my life isn't there
I fear
The Dreams
Distance existence
Draws near
Sinful Repentance
Is clear
Living like
Death is the goal
Living
in a warm bed
But I'm breathlessly cold
And I awake
Exhausted
from Nightmares of reality
I'm scared of what's happening
From there to the saddening
I am pinched by love
But still kicked by somber
Moods that wander
Through the tears of the thousandth Eye
Tears of a thousand cries
I drown when I deny
So many lies
And my
Dreams
Awaken them
And reveal my true soul

To Heaven...

=====================

Just a li'l keystyle. I waited too long. A post was needed.

Jen Li · 05-24-2003, 08:15 PM

*is speachless*
this was jus like.... Damn...
the imagary was incredible
flowed great..
this was off the chain fo realz

BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum · 05-24-2003, 08:17 PM

Yo, mad thanks.

*GeMiNeYeZ* · 05-24-2003, 08:42 PM

...wow...

you've got to be one of the best poets i know of... everything i've read from u was wonderful and this is no different... wow...

BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum · 05-24-2003, 10:16 PM

Thanks, Gem! Congrats on ya b'day!

Mind~$oul · 05-25-2003, 02:44 AM

Shit really dont even know what to say about this piece. But i know this is one of my favorites from you now....Great talent man...

one luv

Anonmuz · 05-25-2003, 05:45 AM

this is some tight deep and true shit, i'm feeling this to the fullest. dope post, you got a fan. pz.

TuNed RooT · 05-25-2003, 06:19 AM

A very indepth piece in what you were trying to tell us. Kept the attention of the reader throughout the piece. The imagery, as said was breathtaking and very detailed. The metaphores/similies barely need work, although could've used a bit more from my point of view. I believe this poem has already influenced me to read some more of your written work held on rapmusic.com. My blessings..

BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum · 05-25-2003, 12:15 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by TuNed RooT
A very indepth piece in what you were trying to tell us. Kept the attention of the reader throughout the piece. The imagery, as said was breathtaking and very detailed. The metaphores/similies barely need work, although could've used a bit more from my point of view. I believe this poem has already influenced me to read some more of your written work held on rapmusic.com. My blessings..

http://blacksoultan2.tripod.com/contents.html
http://blacksoultan2.tripod.com/contents2.html

The second page I'm still working on. It's a copy of the first page with some new poems added, so some of the poems are repeated on the second page.

Thanks for the love, y'all.

varentao · 05-25-2003, 02:56 PM

I sunk into the picture, though could not write. As it all just kept flowing in my mind, yet couldn't/wouldn't come out, and i didn't want to 'spoil' it..(don't ask..)...

...so when i read this piece...it hit many chords in its own right...

complemented the picture in such a smooth, flowing and in depth way..²²²²inging with it an 'edge' that...well...enabled the words n depth of it to, well...sink...(aye, sink is the right word) into one's mind...in a kind of fleeting yet effective way...it almost echoed one could say...er, so...have i lose you yet?...

...enough said,

..resp...

BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum · 05-25-2003, 06:55 PM

Wow. Thanks, dawg.

resp.

augee.ali · 05-26-2003, 05:42 AM

The way it reads it sounds like an open mic joint...I say memorize, and pull. I looked at that picture when I posted and insomnia was the last thing on my mind.

The Real Nick · 05-26-2003, 09:51 AM

Very nice. You put that picture to good use.

Later...

MISSKEYdaQUEEN · 05-26-2003, 03:29 PM

"I'm scared of what's happening
From there to the saddening
I am pinched by love
But still kicked by somber
Moods that wander
Through the tears of the thousandth Eye
Tears of a thousand cries
I drown when I deny
So many lies
And my
Dreams
Awaken them
And reveal my true soul

To Heaven..."

The ending to this is so conlusive....I mean...you know how some endings may inadvertantly(sp?) leave you hanging...you made it so complete!

I love your work Black..I haven't peeped the realm in a while..but I see it's gotten better in here!

I enjoyed the imagery throughout this piece!!!

BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum · 05-26-2003, 09:19 PM

Wow, thanks guys. It means a lot to me.

BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum · 05-27-2003, 02:46 PM

what I don't get is eighty views, fourteen replies.

augee.ali · 05-29-2003, 04:42 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum
what I don't get is eighty views, fourteen replies.

I know exactly what you mean...or someone will reply and say..."That was deep" lol

Feme Sole · 05-31-2003, 03:13 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum
what I don't get is eighty views, fourteen replies.

thats actually a good amount, id be happy with that....

ive been really feeling your stuff lately.....it has the most amazing rhythm and flow too it.......this piece didnt make me say wow or damn like some of your other pieces, but it was still a good piece

peace and blessings

05-24-2003, 06:48 PM	#1 (permalink)
BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview Join Date: Oct 1999 Location: San Fran to the Bahamas back to Cali in L.A. Posts: 17,465	Insomnia INSOMNIA Light shines down Right now In dreamscapes We fake Lies in the existence of Time in these rhythmic old minds That can see us, Be us in an instant Subconscious rears us Close in an instant, I Used to think sleeping Was neither being Awake or dead Born of breath The Faith of a mustard seed I Know that the Subconcious awakes When the conscious is away For Memories and Reveries Reverberating past lives Try Not to deny The reality of dreams Reality of screams Reality of scenes I see that reality And that reality is me Frightfully crying The insanity Is prying Through the thousands of eyes We perceive Can perceive the real me Can't perceive the real he So my life isn't fair Body is revealed Seeing my life isn't there I fear The Dreams Distance existence Draws near Sinful Repentance Is clear Living like Death is the goal Living in a warm bed But I'm breathlessly cold And I awake Exhausted from Nightmares of reality I'm scared of what's happening From there to the saddening I am pinched by love But still kicked by somber Moods that wander Through the tears of the thousandth Eye Tears of a thousand cries I drown when I deny So many lies And my Dreams Awaken them And reveal my true soul To Heaven... ===================== Just a li'l keystyle. I waited too long. A post was needed. __________________ http://www.soundclick.com/blacksoultan

05-24-2003, 08:15 PM	#2 (permalink)
Jen Li Registered User Join Date: May 2003 Location: England Posts: 23	is speachless this was jus like.... Damn... the imagary was incredible flowed great.. this was off the chain fo realz __________________ This British Bitch has a Bite worse than her Bark 00000000 00000000 00000000

05-24-2003, 08:17 PM	#3 (permalink)
BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview Join Date: Oct 1999 Location: San Fran to the Bahamas back to Cali in L.A. Posts: 17,465	Yo, mad thanks. __________________ http://www.soundclick.com/blacksoultan

05-24-2003, 08:42 PM	#4 (permalink)
GeMiNeYeZ ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~ Join Date: May 2001 Location: District Heights, MD Posts: 11,131	...wow... you've got to be one of the best poets i know of... everything i've read from u was wonderful and this is no different... wow... __________________ G e M i N e Y e Z ´·´.`.·ìÌìÌìíÍíÍí·.´.`·`Da Revolution´·´.`.·ìÌìÌìíÍíÍí·.´.`·` h \| g "If their purpose is of human origin, it will fail. But if it comes from God ...You cannot defeat them." ´.`.·ìÌìÌìíÍíÍí·.´.`Neon Genesis Evangelion´.`.·ìÌìÌìíÍíÍí·.´.`

05-24-2003, 10:16 PM	#5 (permalink)
BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview Join Date: Oct 1999 Location: San Fran to the Bahamas back to Cali in L.A. Posts: 17,465	Thanks, Gem! Congrats on ya b'day! __________________ http://www.soundclick.com/blacksoultan

05-25-2003, 02:44 AM	#6 (permalink)
Mind~$oul I'm Pretty Join Date: Apr 2001 Location: North Memphis BITCH! Posts: 17,139	Shit really dont even know what to say about this piece. But i know this is one of my favorites from you now....Great talent man... one luv __________________ "Everybody wanna be a nicca, but don't nobody wanna be a nicca"-Paul Mooney "I tried to live right, but society aint made for niccas to live right"-Joe Budden

05-25-2003, 06:19 AM	#8 (permalink)
TuNed RooT Love is introduction .. Join Date: May 2003 Location: Within the womb... Posts: 869	A very indepth piece in what you were trying to tell us. Kept the attention of the reader throughout the piece. The imagery, as said was breathtaking and very detailed. The metaphores/similies barely need work, although could've used a bit more from my point of view. I believe this poem has already influenced me to read some more of your written work held on rapmusic.com. My blessings..

05-25-2003, 02:56 PM	#10 (permalink)
varentao Registered User Join Date: Apr 2003 Posts: 765	I sunk into the picture, though could not write. As it all just kept flowing in my mind, yet couldn't/wouldn't come out, and i didn't want to 'spoil' it..(don't ask..)... ...so when i read this piece...it hit many chords in its own right... complemented the picture in such a smooth, flowing and in depth way..²²²²inging with it an 'edge' that...well...enabled the words n depth of it to, well...sink...(aye, sink is the right word) into one's mind...in a kind of fleeting yet effective way...it almost echoed one could say...er, so...have i lose you yet?... ...enough said, ..resp...

05-25-2003, 06:55 PM	#11 (permalink)
BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview Join Date: Oct 1999 Location: San Fran to the Bahamas back to Cali in L.A. Posts: 17,465	Wow. Thanks, dawg. resp. __________________ http://www.soundclick.com/blacksoultan

05-26-2003, 05:42 AM	#12 (permalink)
augee.ali Lively Up Yourself... Join Date: Feb 2003 Location: Gem City Posts: 1,734	The way it reads it sounds like an open mic joint...I say memorize, and pull. I looked at that picture when I posted and insomnia was the last thing on my mind. __________________ *Lively Up Yourself...* And Don't Be no Drag...

05-26-2003, 09:51 AM	#13 (permalink)
The Real Nick Registered User Join Date: May 2003 Posts: 47	Very nice. You put that picture to good use. Later...

05-26-2003, 03:29 PM	#14 (permalink)
MISSKEYdaQUEEN Watch the black panther.. Join Date: Jul 2002 Location: Glenville REPPIN BIYAAAATCHES!! Posts: 17,647	"I'm scared of what's happening From there to the saddening I am pinched by love But still kicked by somber Moods that wander Through the tears of the thousandth Eye Tears of a thousand cries I drown when I deny So many lies And my Dreams Awaken them And reveal my true soul To Heaven..." The ending to this is so conlusive....I mean...you know how some endings may inadvertantly(sp?) leave you hanging...you made it so complete! I love your work Black..I haven't peeped the realm in a while..but I see it's gotten better in here! I enjoyed the imagery throughout this piece!!! __________________ Queen's MySpace Page Queen's Other Myspace Page biaaatches *********************** The battles that count aren't the ones for gold medals. The struggles within yourself—the invisible, inevitable battles inside all of us—that's where it's at.~Jesse Owens (1913-1980)

05-26-2003, 09:19 PM	#15 (permalink)
BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview Join Date: Oct 1999 Location: San Fran to the Bahamas back to Cali in L.A. Posts: 17,465	Wow, thanks guys. It means a lot to me. __________________ http://www.soundclick.com/blacksoultan

05-27-2003, 02:46 PM	#16 (permalink)
BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview Join Date: Oct 1999 Location: San Fran to the Bahamas back to Cali in L.A. Posts: 17,465	what I don't get is eighty views, fourteen replies. __________________ http://www.soundclick.com/blacksoultan

05-31-2003, 05:32 PM	#19 (permalink)
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