I Tried...

[ikon211]

When the time comes
There'll be sadness and despair
But to those sobbing know
I’m in good care
Know when my time comes
I'll have but ONE man to fear
I’ll await the divines answer
Hopefully you’ll say a prayer…
Know rather I've done right
Or rather I've done wrong
It won’t erase the scars
On this planet I've caused
The promises I've broke,
The lies I've told
The people I've hurt,
The wealth I've stole
I’ll convey this curse to heavens with hope,
Staring God in the eye
Begging mercy on my soul.
(I tried)

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[patrown]

this had some real feeling in it, despair.. regret. a bit of acceptance.
keep on with it, maybe dive deeper into one emotion.

[Prov3rb]

Real emotion behind this, very well written. I think I've gone on this same thought process reminiscing about the end of the line and looking back on what I've done. It's overwhelming when you think about it too much; I think the best thing to do is to try and get to know the one Dude you'll need to fear as best you can in your life.

[ikon211]

@patrown: Thanks man, I was aiming for both emotions. Before posting this piece I should’ve clarified this question; “Exactly what is it the characters regret”? He repents because of his decisions (line 15 and 16 shows an example, but doesn't go into much detail...) Eventually regret turns into despair following his final judgment, instead of trying to fix what he did wrong; he accepts his fate. I hope this clarifies the poem a lot more.

@Prov3rb: Thanks man! I’ll do that.

[jesuit223]

hmmmm the ending was very powerful-the part that really stuck out to me