Figure it out...

[Thrilla-Ali]

yo

come down like a panther in the dark
rip through the branches and the barks
chased after my prey long after i decayed
weighed my possibilities, either stop and stay or possibly stray
i keep on going, long after the day been a done deal
i run-feel the essence of my meal through my gums
my lungs start to feel numb but i still keep rolling like a drum
dumb, dumb, dumb rip through the wind and then some
ima stun 'em, out run 'em, gun 'em, from wee to end
my paws extend, then i see a spot - my eyes a photography lens
can't stop, won't stop, i see a mahogany blend
then i see it, i'm close to it's furry little tale - my eye's pause
i got a fury in my claws and im in a hurry for my jaws to bury this little job
quite odd.. took me this long and i prolonged till this state
my mind state is on this meal, on his fate, on this late...
finally, i get on his case, get on his face, get him on my plate
still got him on my mind, even though he just got ate...

[TheReturn]

Some nice rhyming in this, I liked how you switched up the rhyme near the beginning going from done deal and run-feel to feel numb and then some. Pretty tight.

[Evg.poet]

loving the rhyme scheme overall good piece

[Quan]

[mr.rip]

fly to death

[MISSKEYdaQUEEN]

got deeeuuummm...illness
loved this flow!!
nice job!

[~Eloquent]

the predator and the prey..
you think it could be like an analogy of human power kind of,
like to prey on the innocent,
thats the feeling i got from it...sounds like it would sound dope on a track also...

[DaJackle]

nice piece, there's a double meaning here in between the metaphors, it may even be written intentionally, but it's one strong metaphor. nice personification of the panther and I really like your detailed streams of imagery, really adds to the sense that you are stalking, that you are in the hunt. and you evolved the poem towards the end by making it seem like the panther is thinking, even though animals live on instincts. One thing though which may help take your writing to another level is maybe to add in some sensory images. for example when we are hungry, our mind does focus, but our senses heightens. and you can talk about the surrounding smell, the fact that ever crack, whip, and whistling of the wind counts; and the brush of grass and dirt burying your paws. There's so much you can do with sensory images that it just opens up your creative options. hope that helps a bit, thanks for the share! :]