First poem- Finals

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Old 05-20-2007, 04:48 PM   #1 (permalink)
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First poem- Finals

The first full poem =]
comment/critiques are welcome

The pencil sways furiously
As anxious legs slide the seemingly pulsing floor


A D C A...

Trusting my beloved judgment
I reach deep inside of me
Not knowing this is my undeniable future…

D C A C...


Popped Gum
Shifting chairs
Exaggerated sighs
Echoed though my restless heart
Sanity breaking
Knowledge erasing
I stare at the paper unwillingly
Grasping knowledge…
Yet none of its showing…

D…D…D…D…D…D…

Backstroking in GPA alphabetical soup
I panicked as the simple questions started to consume me


Drowning...
Drowning...
I set my pencil down and started to drift..



Waking on the harmony of flying caps and fluttering silk gowns
in a sea of emotions I wait…
As he calls my name I run to the voice
Only to see this very test in his hands
His eyes burning…

Burning…

Realization hit
I snapped out of it…

The pencil swayed furiously
As I reach deep inside me
Knowing that this really is
My undeniable future
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Old 06-08-2007, 01:57 AM   #2 (permalink)
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