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Old 09-10-2006, 01:15 AM   #1 (permalink)
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I'm loved, I hope I'm loved
God can you take me
Take me and save me
So then I can be happy
In your embrace
I’m loved

Today was worthless
In turn I deserve this
I can’t keep being happy
When shit crumbles
Around me

I can’t say enough
I’m fucked
A slave of love
It’s so tough
Straining to gain
Nothing changes
I’m alone with anger
A frustrated tear
I bleed to surrender
Never have I ever
Missed out on so much
Lost and fought
Touched on such hatred
Bleaching the stains
From the white light
I’m awake sleepless
Day dreaming of sheep
Trying to Keeping
All sharp objects
Out of reach

I guess I’m better off
Yeah better off trapped
Wrapped in fake plastic
A bad habit to rid off of
A cost to dispose of
I’m lost and controlled by,
People who don’t know me
So cold and lonely
The world isn’t home
Not to a weak soul


God’s a bitch
With fake remorse
Teaches gun and swords
From a book fables
Making life equate
To shit and rumble
Stumbling on shards,
Of broken glass
Half empty smiles
Cold-hearted laughs
I don’t feel appraised
Or submerged with faith
Take and take
Damned to be damned
Handed something ugly
Can’t make shit of his plan
Shit if we can
I’m still only one man
Don’t know what he’s asking

Today was worthless
In turn I deserve this
I can’t keep being happy
When shit crumbles
Around me

God can you take me
Take me and save me
So then I can be happy
In your embrace
I’m loved
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And I sat watching a flower
As it was withering
I was embarrassed by its honesty
So I'd prefer to be remembered as a smiling face
Not this fucking wreck
That's taken its place

get some balls biatch or else
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Old 09-11-2006, 01:23 AM   #2 (permalink)
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Was deifinitely feelin this piece. It was raw, emotional and relatable.


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I guess I’m better off
Yeah better off trapped
Wrapped in fake plastic
A bad habit to rid off of
A cost to dispose of
I’m lost and controlled by,
People who don’t know me
So cold and lonely
The world isn’t home
Not to a weak soul

^^Fa sho
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Old 09-11-2006, 04:46 PM   #3 (permalink)
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this was dope..bout time u wrote something longer then 8 lines..lol

loved the emotion in this...its funny how u can write about the same thing i do and sound nothing like me in terms of the finish product..i really enjoy that about your work...

anyhow..i was inspired.....hope u enjoy


So often we see
Only what it is that
We want to see
Blinded by misconceptions
God is calling but your
Steadily trying to see
Stop
Wait
Listen for a moment
Gotta take a step back and
Calm down for
With an open ear one can decipher
The truth in any deception and
The traces of hope within despair

Hoplessness can only be found within
Your own self made existence…


...blah...maybe i'll finish it latter
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Old 09-11-2006, 05:27 PM   #4 (permalink)
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A Bit Long But I Must Say This Poem Is "Raw".. Raw in the sense that's its the truth, And It Makes Reading It Really Relatable.. I Like..

God’s a bitch
With fake remorse
Teaches gun and swords
From a book fables
Making life equate
To shit and rumble
Stumbling on shards,
Of broken glass
Half empty smiles
Cold-hearted laughs
I don’t feel appraised
Or submerged with faith

^^Strong For Me..




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Old 09-12-2006, 09:32 AM   #5 (permalink)
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someone Died takes it up the butt!
illness.

damn english class.
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Old 09-20-2006, 01:12 AM   #6 (permalink)
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You put it all out there with this piece man. You usually have a laid back vibe to most of your poems. With this one I could feel the anger, confusion and the frustration. Easily one of my favorites from you man. You're able to write in any style mood you want effortlessly.

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God’s a bitch
With fake remorse
Teaches gun and swords
From a book fables
Making life equate
To shit and rumble
Stumbling on shards,
Of broken glass
Half empty smiles
Cold-hearted laughs
I don’t feel appraised
Or submerged with faith
Take and take
Damned to be damned
Handed something ugly
Can’t make shit of his plan
Shit if we can
I’m still only one man
Don’t know what he’s asking
^I remember when you showed me those lines. Raw emotion displayed at it's best.

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Old 09-20-2006, 01:17 AM   #7 (permalink)
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a gutsy poem that brings up valid conterversy
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