"Seeing Your Not Here...I'll Talk & You'll Listen" --VENTING

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Old 08-31-2006, 02:55 PM   #1 (permalink)
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"Seeing Your Not Here...I'll Talk & You'll Listen" --VENTING
Venting..

Sucks.. She Basically Left To "Find Herself"..Now I'm Here, Trying To Be..If The Poem Reads Funny Sorry, Too Tired To Perfect It's structure..Maybe I'll Do It Later. Enjoy.


Seeing Your Not Here…I’ll Talk & You’ll Listen

Just Think Of,

The Millions Of Miles Apart,
Are Simply The Millions Of Miles I’ve Walked, Coming Back For You…
The Millions Of Miles Apart,
Are Simply The Millions Of Smiles That Spark, Looking Back At You…

Knowing Every Smile Reminds,
You, Of Every Smile Of Mine, Too

But,

Seeing Your Not Here…I’ll Talk & You’ll Listen

Just Think Of

The Millions Of Times I Fight With You,
Are The Millions Of More Times I’d Fight For You…
& The Millions Of Times I Fight With You,
Turns Into The Millions Of Times We’d Fight It Through…

Because All Of Those Phone Calls Every Night…
Just, Becomes That Phone Call Where We Fight, To Hold On..

But,

I Love You, I Love You, I Love You,

Sometimes I Often Forget That You Even Know
Is The Hardest Part Of Holding On Really Letting It Go?
People Say Never Stop Kissing Her, & You’ll Gradually Have Her
Why? When It’s Really That Last Kiss That Actually Matters
For Some Reason “I Miss You” Never Use To Seem As Strong
I Guess Those Words Have More Meaning When She’s Really Gone
Hell, What’s The Point Of Writing This? Fuck It, Forget It
Seeing I’ll Never Send It, And She’ll Probably Never Get It
Sometimes There Really Isn’t Any Advice To Be Given
Seeing Your Not Here…I’ll Talk & You’ll Listen..



Bless.


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Old 08-31-2006, 09:53 PM   #2 (permalink)
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..After Re-Reading Now That I'm Over It.. I Don't Like It As Much..lol
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Old 09-01-2006, 12:47 AM   #3 (permalink)
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i wasn't really feelin this piece. it seamed a bit repititive to me. i dunno just something about it that didn't really spark my fancy lol. keep working on ya skills and they will grow tho. take care. OnE
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Old 09-01-2006, 07:40 AM   #4 (permalink)
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We I liked it, you put your feelings out there and i could see them....Keep ya head up pappi
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Old 09-01-2006, 07:02 PM   #5 (permalink)
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Sometimes feelings are just like that. When you are flooded with one particular feeling, in this case, pain or agony or loneliness or what ever, thats are you can relate to. When I had a 3 year relationship end I seriously wrote 4 pages of anger. I liked this casue it was real emotion , raw and uncut.
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Old 09-01-2006, 09:35 PM   #6 (permalink)
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Old 09-06-2006, 12:19 PM   #7 (permalink)
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I dont about this one I get where your coming from but I dont know either way it was emotion put into this
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Old 09-18-2006, 02:03 AM   #8 (permalink)
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Yeah this piece was a bit off to me IMO. But you did say this was a vent man. When your emotions get the best of you, it gets kinda trying to get things out the way you want them too. Atleast you got this out though.

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