in my hand rests the sun

Philly_215 · 08-29-2006, 02:02 PM

In my hand rest the sun,
So when I close my palm
Night falls,
Thru my veins runs water,
Slice me and discover streams of,
Mystic springs life giving as I bleed
Not meant for the long stay
Rather my life was a life built to affect other lives
In my demises,
So as I parish the sun will rise,
From my open palm,
Shedding light on a forsaken child
Baring fruit from there baron fields
Providing reason to live
Open a path clearly lit,
Although still a mystery in its intent
This is my gift,
As a river bleeds,
The sun will rise,
This is my gift in the event of my demise
You will see just watch there eyes . . .

HILARIONSOUL · 08-30-2006, 05:36 PM

This piece reminds me of a biblical scripture.
To me in this poem you wanted to relay to the reader
that this piece “might” be the new resurrection discription.??
Overall this poem reads spiritual to me, and I enjoyed it. Yeah.

UFO the Phoenix · 08-31-2006, 04:05 PM

I was feeling this piece....love the metaphors with nature remind me alot of Absolute Zero and some of the older stuff I use to write....short and sweet....gave me an inner calm...

props

~WORDZ~ · 09-05-2006, 12:02 PM

Loved the imagery but had a hard time grasping the flow of it. But liked the drop as a whole.

08-29-2006, 02:02 PM	#1 (permalink)
Philly_215 The Silent Poet Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: some time here and sometimes there Posts: 426	in my hand rests the sun In my hand rest the sun, So when I close my palm Night falls, Thru my veins runs water, Slice me and discover streams of, Mystic springs life giving as I bleed Not meant for the long stay Rather my life was a life built to affect other lives In my demises, So as I parish the sun will rise, From my open palm, Shedding light on a forsaken child Baring fruit from there baron fields Providing reason to live Open a path clearly lit, Although still a mystery in its intent This is my gift, As a river bleeds, The sun will rise, This is my gift in the event of my demise You will see just watch there eyes . . . __________________ "No bodies going to love me like me so i'm a soul provider" Joe Buddens "So for all you wana be's who's attitude is shitty God don't like ugly but he aint to fond of pretty neither" Lyfe Jennings http://www.myspace.com/watcher07

08-30-2006, 05:36 PM	#2 (permalink)
HILARIONSOUL "one of the roughs," Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Lee Jun Fan Posts: 71	This piece reminds me of a biblical scripture. To me in this poem you wanted to relay to the reader that this piece “might” be the new resurrection discription.?? Overall this poem reads spiritual to me, and I enjoyed it. Yeah. __________________ Your words should be like the immediacy of a (((( sound)))) vibrating in its listeners ears. http://www.poetry.com/bash/bash.html v Poetry.com

08-31-2006, 04:05 PM	#3 (permalink)
UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS! Join Date: Aug 1999 Location: Oceanside CA USA Posts: 2,965	I was feeling this piece....love the metaphors with nature remind me alot of Absolute Zero and some of the older stuff I use to write....short and sweet....gave me an inner calm... props __________________ *The Truth isn't out there because its already landed and the Truth is:* JESUS CHRIST Oddie Sloan

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09-05-2006, 12:02 PM	#4 (permalink)
~WORDZ~ Words are my mind state Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: in the inner circle Posts: 196	Loved the imagery but had a hard time grasping the flow of it. But liked the drop as a whole.

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