All Over The Place...*Key'd*

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Old 07-31-2006, 07:21 AM   #1 (permalink)
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All Over The Place...*Key'd*
So ive not graced the realm for such a long time...Prob coz ive lost my touch hehe, had so much going on, but had a writing block... Anyway, this is just a quick lil keystyle for y'all... Its very much all over the place, i guess thats what happens when you miss someone, you dont know where your feelings are at...

Your lips entice me
My hips invite you...

My tongue suggests
That we should undress...

You hold me near
Taking away all my fears...

FAST FORWARD TO THE PRESENT DAY....

24 hours and no contact
My body yearns for you
My lips call out to you...

Thinking of you next to me
Naked minds yet fully clothed bodies
You pull me in close
Hold your body up against mine
My dress slips
While your lips caress
every last inch of me...

Your kisses are like sundays
Long, quaint and relaxing
Yet so intense, passionate and un-nerving...

*SIGHS*

I miss you baby...*
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Old 07-31-2006, 01:24 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Your lips entice me
My hips invite you...

My tongue suggests
That we should undress..


coughs............. oh wow this intro is enough to excite the reader let alone the person you are writing it too...

i will be back to comment further

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this was not a bad poem. it was a bit all over the place, but it was still on point at the same time, kinda weird to say i guess. it made me want a girl to want me that way too. sigh... oh well my girl will come around soon i'm sure of it lol. take care and keep writing! bring some more sh*t to the board so i can see your growth!
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woooord up hey wooord up hey for real though

lol....sorry this poem was bring back flash backs....I love that line bout naked minds and fully clothed....thats real....when you with that special someone and you can connect on that spiritual tip...thats deep....better then sex........well?

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anyway been a loooong time....I remember ya though....your style is still on point....but the rust does show cant front....keep writing and ya'll dust off the verbs and erase the cobwebs




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Old 08-04-2006, 06:23 AM   #6 (permalink)
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thanx for the love, those that know me on the board will know that im no new-comer to writing poetry but im just a lil on the rusty side right now...

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this made me smile but i want more!!!!


lol..i like the concept of this poem..you played it really well but i would have loved to see you talk a bit more at the begining before you did the fast forward part..i think that would have set it up a bit nicer..

still a dope poem...nice reading you again
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