I'm sorry you're me bestfriend

[allnakey]

My heart doesn’t bend that way
Through the passion of lust
I lost your trust
Praying for a thunderstorm
Love doesn’t seem very likely
Maybe I’m a blank slant
Waiting to die today
Way over my head

Missing pieces break me
Bringing us further
From completely dying
Crying for murder
I wouldn’t be surprised
If we stumbled
Crumbled
And fall to the floor

I still believe in something
Your pale skin
Even if it’s nothing

I drink too much
But I smoke just enough
I know my luck is shit
But my patience is patient
Am I’m alive
Obstructive my own liberties
Living ahead of me
Denying the threat of uncertainty

What’s not uncertain is I love you
But I don’t trust you
With my heart
Enough to say
You are me

With me you’ll die
Without me
You’ll cry
I’m sorry
I can’t be you’re everything
But I’m enough to get by

[flaco_rivera]

i hate when stuff like that happens..definitely know where your coming from..good read.

[UFO the Phoenix]

this was heart felt....been a hot minute since you dropped in this realm.....I read this before but didnt respond because I didnt know what to say....this seems mad personal and yet all I could find was the errors and mistakes....I dunno if you wanna hear all that....so I bounce....the one thing that stood out to me was all the "ing's" I've been told by professors and successful authors not to overuse the ing....in fact if you could write any poem without them it sounds that much stronger....but I feel in your case this doesnt apply because it seems to be written in a somewhat emotional outburst....and the sturcture of our hearts cannot be tamed.....so yea this was felt




(PS: I hate to keep bugging you I feel like I'm one of the reason you dont come on AIM anymore....but I still need a haiku from you....the ode to the realm collabo pretty much cant post it until I get something from you and lpoet....I have so much respect for ya'll....so sometime in augest I'm gonna need that....PM/EMAIL....or whatever send it to me...pz)

[allnakey]

Yeah Ings, Lys, and ions, ays... should be limited when trying to write stand out poetry... also meters should be establisted weather they are Iambic or not. Blah Bah Blah blah blah... Spell check should be used and punctuation is a must. If you haven't noticed a lot of what is written in the realm isn't "poetry" it's a close relation to it. This is just tied together emotion nothing special...

I consider the realm more a writers soul... then a straight up poetry place. It's raw and just filled with vibrant life... for the most part it's writing with a purpose, maybe not to the readers, but to the writer.

Don't get me wrong in no way did I take offense to your comment, just responding

And your professor is right... With one more english class I'll have a liberal arts in english, never thought I'd get that.


I thought I gave you something over AIM not all that long ago, but I'll get at you soon I guess

[shadygrady]

wow that is raw talent.... keep up the good work man

[Forrester]

nice piece...very heartfelt...I'm going through some similar stuff right now so I completely understand the foundation of this...

[Deaf Def]

wow... that's all i have to really say is wow... keep writing!!! i wish people wouldn't sleep on good shit like this but it happends and don't let it discourage you lol... i loved it.
Pz. OnE!

[lpoet]

Missing pieces break me
Bringing us further
From completely dying
Crying for murder
I wouldn’t be surprised
If we stumbled
Crumbled
And fall to the floor

thought those lines were crazy....i actually read this when you first posted it but was to lazy to reply..

forgive me..

lol..

shits nice..it feels like a very emotional piece from you...i picture you drinking and writting this for some reason..lol

good shit man..