Free Will Or Won't

Black Liquid · 07-28-2006, 04:04 PM

hmm...

what
the hell
am i
gonna do
today

my 20
bag of

<pfff>

got a
plan
for me

empty 40
on the
chair

passed out
in underwear

cell phone
batt low
but

i dont
care

ash tray
ash gray

grab

roach
by the
leg

eyes glued
to the
tube

while i
sip cof-
fee

lets
see

at 6

damn!

i gotta
slave

its 11
and some
change

shit
still seem
the same

though
i cant
com-

plain

im

goin
in-

sane

stayin up
all night
like gil

got-
fried

got me

wonderin

whats the
point
of any-
thing

faux news
talkin
like

this is
world war
III

turn off

tv

get on

pc

its 12

:15

roll up

more
weed

phone ring

i speak

whats good

hom-
ie

not a
damn

got a
plan

"nah,
nigga

not me"

check this

i left
clicked

guess
what i
seen

theres a
theory
dollar
signs

symobolize

slave-
ry

2 cuffs
one spike

that shits
kinda
deep

even if
it aint
true

least
it make
a nigga
think

though i
never been
locked

ive never
felt free

if you
ask me

man

fuck a
j-o-
b!

seems
like the
same thing
as

sla-
VA-
ry

im aboard
amistad
yellin

give
us
free!

feelin
like i
cant stay

even
though i
"can leave"

fu-
tility
defines

such

proba-
bilities

id be
better
off

home

lightin up
a fat
tree

what goods
a free
will

if i
wont

nah'
mean?
-Liq
WOFTD
www.myspace.com/blackliq

Philly_215 · 07-28-2006, 04:17 PM

hmm. . . sorry i wasn't feeling this one like the last one

but stay up fam

Peace

UFO the Phoenix · 07-30-2006, 12:28 PM

oh snap....I'm gonna have to disagree with philly....I felt this one more....this seem to fit your style and voice more....the sturcture worked perfect....and you really caught the essence of this time in your message....not forcing it down our throats or beating it over our heads...but just saying it how it is....props for this

Free Will Or Won't

--------------------------------------------------------------------------------

hmm...

what
the hell
am i
gonna do
today

my 20
bag of

<pfff>

got a
plan
for me

empty 40
on the
chair

passed out
in underwear

cell phone
batt low
but

i dont
care

ash tray
ash gray

grab

roach
by the
leg

eyes glued
to the
tube

while i
sip cof-
fee

lets
see

at 6

damn!

i gotta
slave

its 11
and some
change

shit
still seem
the same

though
i cant
com-

plain

im

goin
in-

sane

stayin up
all night
like gil

got-
fried

got me

wonderin

whats the
point
of any-
thing

faux news
talkin
like

this is
world war
III

turn off

tv

get on

pc

its 12

:15

roll up

more
weed

phone ring

i speak

whats good

hom-
ie

not a
damn

got a
plan

"nah,
nigga

not me"

^best part....flow was uncanny....I love the in and out of perspectives.......this was tight

reminds me of something Dead Prez would do....(I just seen them live a few weeks back and they real about what they say....and I dunno I guess I got that same vibe from you)

stay up

Mind~$oul · 08-02-2006, 06:12 PM

You got a crazy style, but I love reading your work though. I really want to hear how your work sound in spoken word.

"though i
never been
locked

ive never
felt free"

^Favorite lines. Word I know that feeling. The feeling of soicey having you in a threshold. It's crazy man. Hope to see more from you soon.

One luv

Deaf Def · 08-02-2006, 08:59 PM

i agree with mind~soul... that was my favorite part as well. but i also liked

Quote:

feelin
like i
cant stay

even
though i
"can leave"

that was pretty dope and i also liked this one more and would like to hear this shit spoken dogG! for real. love the style, kinda hard to read, but gets me into it a bit more than other styles and that's why i like this more....
stay ups

lpoet · 08-05-2006, 01:45 AM

this shit is nuts

damn near made me dizy when i read it but i loved it...shit was weird at first but the dope flow had me reading and reading and reading...

theres a
theory
dollar
signs

symobolize

slave-
ry

2 cuffs
one spike

that shits
kinda
deep

hot lines..

keep up the ill shit

Nebulaz · 08-05-2006, 05:17 AM

Ok, flow was ill i'll admitt. But you pissed me off with all the scrolling I had to do =)

RealMS · 08-05-2006, 01:29 PM

shoot what is new to say about your work man. I'm always checking for your stuff when I bounce in around here. The title is enough for me lol. Keep writing.

-Much Love

MISSKEYdaQUEEN · 08-05-2006, 02:34 PM

Yes, yes...a fan I am

I love your format and your raw delivery.
I love it..kinda like me but not

BUT I feel the shit you do hard! I love life poetry, something that makes me think!

Good shit!!

07-28-2006, 04:04 PM	#1 (permalink)
Black Liquid Registered User Join Date: Sep 2003 Posts: 234	Free Will Or Won't hmm... what the hell am i gonna do today my 20 bag of <pfff> got a plan for me empty 40 on the chair passed out in underwear cell phone batt low but i dont care ash tray ash gray grab roach by the leg eyes glued to the tube while i sip cof- fee lets see at 6 damn! i gotta slave its 11 and some change shit still seem the same though i cant com- plain im goin in- sane stayin up all night like gil got- fried got me wonderin whats the point of any- thing faux news talkin like this is world war III turn off tv get on pc its 12 :15 roll up more weed phone ring i speak whats good hom- ie not a damn got a plan "nah, nigga not me" check this i left clicked guess what i seen theres a theory dollar signs symobolize slave- ry 2 cuffs one spike that shits kinda deep even if it aint true least it make a nigga think though i never been locked ive never felt free if you ask me man fuck a j-o- b! seems like the same thing as sla- VA- ry im aboard amistad yellin give us free! feelin like i cant stay even though i "can leave" fu- tility defines such proba- bilities id be better off home lightin up a fat tree what goods a free will if i wont nah' mean? -Liq WOFTD www.myspace.com/blackliq

07-28-2006, 04:17 PM	#2 (permalink)
Philly_215 The Silent Poet Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: some time here and sometimes there Posts: 426	hmm. . . sorry i wasn't feeling this one like the last one but stay up fam Peace __________________ "No bodies going to love me like me so i'm a soul provider" Joe Buddens "So for all you wana be's who's attitude is shitty God don't like ugly but he aint to fond of pretty neither" Lyfe Jennings http://www.myspace.com/watcher07

07-30-2006, 12:28 PM	#3 (permalink)
UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS! Join Date: Aug 1999 Location: Oceanside CA USA Posts: 2,965	oh snap....I'm gonna have to disagree with philly....I felt this one more....this seem to fit your style and voice more....the sturcture worked perfect....and you really caught the essence of this time in your message....not forcing it down our throats or beating it over our heads...but just saying it how it is....props for this Free Will Or Won't -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- hmm... what the hell am i gonna do today my 20 bag of <pfff> got a plan for me empty 40 on the chair passed out in underwear cell phone batt low but i dont care ash tray ash gray grab roach by the leg eyes glued to the tube while i sip cof- fee lets see at 6 damn! i gotta slave its 11 and some change shit still seem the same though i cant com- plain im goin in- sane stayin up all night like gil got- fried got me wonderin whats the point of any- thing faux news talkin like this is world war III turn off tv get on pc its 12 :15 roll up more weed phone ring i speak whats good hom- ie not a damn got a plan "nah, nigga not me" ^best part....flow was uncanny....I love the in and out of perspectives.......this was tight reminds me of something Dead Prez would do....(I just seen them live a few weeks back and they real about what they say....and I dunno I guess I got that same vibe from you) stay up __________________ *The Truth isn't out there because its already landed and the Truth is:* JESUS CHRIST Oddie Sloan

08-02-2006, 06:12 PM	#4 (permalink)
Mind~$oul I'm Pretty Join Date: Apr 2001 Location: North Memphis BITCH! Posts: 17,139	You got a crazy style, but I love reading your work though. I really want to hear how your work sound in spoken word. "though i never been locked ive never felt free" ^Favorite lines. Word I know that feeling. The feeling of soicey having you in a threshold. It's crazy man. Hope to see more from you soon. One luv __________________ "Everybody wanna be a nicca, but don't nobody wanna be a nicca"-Paul Mooney "I tried to live right, but society aint made for niccas to live right"-Joe Budden

08-05-2006, 01:45 AM	#6 (permalink)
lpoet POET Join Date: Oct 2002 Location: Indianapolis, IN Posts: 12,672	this shit is nuts damn near made me dizy when i read it but i loved it...shit was weird at first but the dope flow had me reading and reading and reading... theres a theory dollar signs symobolize slave- ry 2 cuffs one spike that shits kinda deep hot lines.. keep up the ill shit __________________ "SHE CAME BACK TO ME AND I PRAY SHE STAYS" --lpoet

08-05-2006, 05:17 AM	#7 (permalink)
Nebulaz fear God, not man Join Date: Mar 2001 Posts: 935	Ok, flow was ill i'll admitt. But you pissed me off with all the scrolling I had to do =) __________________ "It is impossible to account for the creation of the universe without the agency of a Supreme Being. It is impossible to govern the universe without the aid of a Supreme Being. It is impossible to reason without arriving at a Supreme Being. Religion is as necessary to reason as reason is to religion. The one cannot exist without the other. A reasoning being would lose reason in attempting to account for the great phenomena of nature, had he not a Supreme Being to refer to; and will has it been said, that if there had been no God, mankind would have been obliged to imagine one." - - George Washington

08-05-2006, 01:29 PM	#8 (permalink)
RealMS Pro 31 Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Lafayette/New Orleans, LA Posts: 4,184	shoot what is new to say about your work man. I'm always checking for your stuff when I bounce in around here. The title is enough for me lol. Keep writing. -Much Love

08-05-2006, 02:34 PM	#9 (permalink)
MISSKEYdaQUEEN Watch the black panther.. Join Date: Jul 2002 Location: Glenville REPPIN BIYAAAATCHES!! Posts: 17,647	Yes, yes...a fan I am I love your format and your raw delivery. I love it..kinda like me but not BUT I feel the shit you do hard! I love life poetry, something that makes me think! Good shit!! __________________ Queen's MySpace Page Queen's Other Myspace Page biaaatches *********************** The battles that count aren't the ones for gold medals. The struggles within yourself—the invisible, inevitable battles inside all of us—that's where it's at.~Jesse Owens (1913-1980)

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