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Coined -
I really liked this poem, I dont see how madpoet felt like it was worthy of just a three, I felt like the rhythm was there, the rhyme was on point, It was a great poem carrying a great message...I feel like this poem Is worthy of a 7.5 ....
True Emcee-
I think this was ended well, There were a couple of lines in here that I really took too and then some other lines my eyes just seemed to skim over, I had to read it a few times to make sure I wasn't missing anything, and when I realized I wasnt, I gave you a 7.
Philly 215-
Whooooooo.....This was an "oh shit" poem. I really enjoyed the rhyme, and I enjoyed the way it was put together and the way you put it down, and I think writing it in spoken word form helped this poem quite a bit, I have no choice but to give you a straight8 tho, there were sometimes when my head was left at the end of your lines and wanting more but not finding it in the next line, However this was well written and youve got a solid 8 here.
Poetic X -
Honest to god truth??????? I didn't like this. I felt like it was a poor pick for a poetry slam, It's a good poem, It truly is ...It just needs to be shaped up a bit, It was a creative way to get your point across but your point wasn't really coming across at least inside of my head. But we dont have limited resources because people are bringing too many children in this world, we have limited resources in this world because people are greedy. I didn't agree with the poem which maybe on some level made me bias, I admit my bias too ....However, It wasn't just the content of the poem that struck me as poor, It was poorly written as well ....I feel your frustration throughout the poem and it carries a good message, and holds good morals ...But I cant really explain truthfully what I didn't like about it, I just feel like ....the rhyme was a bit off in some places, and maybe it was intentional, but if it was, then your intentions got you a 5....
RC
Aint chess a bitch of a game? LOL ....Ok, In parts the rhyme was predictable this isnt always a problem but I found the lines with the predictable rhyme, like the had/glad/sad lines had me kind of taken a back like what the fuck? There should be so much more depth to that like the rest of your poem. HOWEVER, I loved the concept and I loved the rhyme for the most part, Your a very talented individual and your poem made me stop and think at least 4 or 5 times...This was a very well put together and creative poem and I give it a 7.5 ...
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