IV @ MadPoet

Insanevillian · 03-27-2004, 06:33 PM

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Insanevillian · 03-27-2004, 06:56 PM

im here of course...

Madpoet · 03-28-2004, 11:31 AM

Check Check...Fuck a IV

And ah.....good luck to MaDpOeT

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Madpoet · 03-29-2004, 10:10 PM

13. The nightmare returns…your sleeps been troubled for the past month with visions of the Grimm Reaper coming to claim you. But this time, a new twist. An old man with wisdom in his eyes stands between you and death. As death swings his scythe for you the man turns to you and whispers “I can help you.” You wake up in a cold sweat. Trying to get your mind off the dream you walk over to the gas station near your house. So intent on deciphering the meaning of your dream you trip over a man hunched in the shadows. You back away quickly and apologize. He looks at you. It’s the man from your dream…

Start writin.....

Madpoet · 03-30-2004, 02:25 AM

Nightmares torment my head when I am in bed
The past -N- last few nights I've dreamt dread
Unkempt and underfed I walk around a tired wreck
Always late and not wired properly for sound check
Every night when I lay down it gets dim -N- deeper
He is always coming for me...Death...The grim reaper
He's as scary a sight as anyone would ever want to meet
In the dream I end at his feet..Always white as a sheet
Ready to greet his scythe when abruptly I wake up
Quivering -N- trust..Im not an easy man to shake up
Or break up so I fight off dreamland as long as I can
Listen to song just to feed my low ass attention span
Man I fell out flat..in the chair as I sat
I Always awoke -N- the same place wit my game face -N- a baseball Bat
The chase -N- all that.. it was there..the runnin for my life
The reaper gunnin for me... wit an oversized knife
I fell to the floor..twisted my ankle.. it went numb
As the reaper descended so did a man with great wisdom
My rule of thumb is always go with the flow
So when he spoke he did so slow -N- I listened so I could know
Why I am forced to behold such a terrible and grave view
The sage whispered "If you follow me..I can save you"
Fore I was through and I figured I was dead
I awoke in a pool of sweat shaking and not a coffin instead
Did my dreams decieve cause this was hard to believe
Did I acheieve some horrid hell I am forced to concieve
Is it a curse or worse is it some kind of karma pay back
For some messed up shit I did in my youth way back
Took a swig of jack and got up -N- put on my pants
Mumbiling to myself like a madman who always rants
Gotta clear my mind and while it is easy to rewind
My thoughts arent so easy to drop and leave behind
I confined them and decided I was way low on smokes
This kind of night..Ill go see Joe he's always got jokes
I Left -N- walked out my crib mad quick
Brick By brick this situation was gettin sick..like bad thick
Drug dealers hang out all up where I live on the block
But since thats my home they dont offer to give me rock
I get to "Quick Stop" and go to open the door
I trip on somethin in the shadows..it's a man lying on the floor
"My bad duke"..He looked up..you wouldnt believe what I saw
This is where things got heated and raw...I couldnt hold up my jaw
The man lying down look so familiar..like that exact same guy
Didnt know how to react..all I could ask is "Whats ya name? -N- why?"
"Why do these terrible thoughts creep when I sleep?"
"WHen Im asleep"..I grabbed his dirty body.."Listen man this is deep!"
How can you help me motherfucker? This man just blankly looks
"I see there is nothing now...GOD will now close your books"
He turns to walk away..starts to talk and says "Pray"
"ASSFUCKER THATS FUCKING GAY....COME ON MAN DONT FUCKING PLAY!!!!!!!!"
He looked over his dirty shoulder colder.. "Dont you realize?"
I get bolder "NO and I despise any form of suprise or lies!"
You wont change..for you the situation is too far gone
You are too stubborn..more than any I've met bar none
In that instant I froze when he again rose to depart
He broke my heart as if someone has thrown a poisonous dart
I allowed him to leave because you all see
That wise old homeless man in my dreams..he was me....

Insanevillian · 03-30-2004, 09:57 PM

BOOM!!!

Creeping Death

Part I

The Old Man

Seein' the man in the darkness i placed my hand where my heart is...
as the hardest of eyes pierced deeply into the farthest...
depths of my soul, with his breath of ripe mold creasing his mouth...
releasing the stout hes drinkin' which wasnt easing my doubt...
that this greasy devout bum can help me escape from my end...
what the fuck can he do? besides give me some rum or gin...
i thought he could use a friend, till i saw his eyes cross my breast n thighs...
ive had the best of guys since i was 15, im too blessed n wise...
to mess with this scrub, this fuck looks too far from innocent...
but why did i dream of him? fuck it, it must be a coincidence...
he smiled a toothless grin, i winced as i dropped him a quarter...
then ran like a sp.ic to the border to try to get my life in order...

Part II

Back at Home...

my body is itchin', hands are shaking from some inner affliction...
i felt like marshalls mother as i popped prescription pills in the kitchen...
the friction inside my body didnt show, peeps wanted to ride this hottie...
they wanted to slide their shotty inside n pull the trigger like john gotti...
but my guy bought me everything i wanted but the thing i want most...
from rump roast for me to cook to trips down the cajun coast...
but when i asked for what i wanted most, i was greeted with slaps here...
n there till i felt trapped, fear buildin up like waitin for a papsmear...
ive taken this crap near the limit, but im appearin' timid...
n if i can have what i want, shit i would have no fear of this dimwit...
as he drank beer n "kicked it", i went to the spot the bum is dwellin in...
i felt inside, that this guy can really help me out of the hell im in...

Part III

Back to Square One...

i approached the bum, and he was layed out soaked in rum...
it was a pity seeing him laid out where all the roaches come...
he sat up, "IM FOCUSED SON!!!" was the words that he spoke...
"oh shit my bad, i was havin a nightmare" after that i almost broke...
back to my splintered house, but i had some shit to figure out...
n he said, "your the bitch from my dream" as he pulled his dentures out...
"i thought that was u, look i can help u escape the pain your in...
and then he handed me the thing i wanted, a bag of heroin...
.
.
.
.
I took the shit right there next to him, as he cackled n smiled...
my body took it all in, shit i havent had this smack in awhile...
the old man started to fade, and he dissapeared with his toothless grin...
n then my heart stopped, as i escaped this ruthless world im in...

ClasSik · 03-30-2004, 10:13 PM

Nice battle..

Madpoet:real nice flow..vocab coulda been a bit better..the structure was nice..the story ending was the best tho..i loved it..

IV:Very nice vocab..structure was good too..i also loved the ending..but i didnt get the story a little..which took away from the feel..

Vote:Madpoet

headless verseman · 03-30-2004, 10:26 PM

two endings that were percievable, not predictable, but percievable. i liked insane's verse alot more, had good similie's incorporated along with his prose. i didnt like all of insane's plot though, some parts were just ok. i didnt like insane leaving out the figure of death aka the grim reaper, i thought using him as an influence or a character even would have added a bit more to the story.

the actual story of mad poet was alot better. he did have some questionble word choices, and wording, but it was a cool story. flow in both was good enough. hmm, thought insane's verse was technically better and i liked it more, but the actual story of mad poet was better. close.

but, i say vote = insane. i liked it alot more as a whole, mad's story was better, but insane's was written better

tit for tat, i say insane

Status Qu0 · 03-30-2004, 10:27 PM

this was one sided.

i couldn't even finish madpoet's piece. sorry dude, but all you did throughout 75% of it was describe what we already knew happned, complete filler.

the flow was off like mothafucka too, i couldn't catch it.

iv, solid verse, nothing spectaular, the flow was on some early 90's shit lol. like a chronic flow.

oh, some of the times i think you went over the top with the similies, (there was a span of about 4-5) some weren't necessary and some seemed forced.

but even with that said.

iv handled him steadily.

vote - iv.

5 Starre · 03-30-2004, 11:10 PM

yea this was one sided. i dont understand the first vote really but yea. IV had better vocab. better strucher, better flow, and an overall better story. i dont really know what else to say lol. Im not sayin Madpoet sucked bevause he didnt. he had a very nice well put together verse. i liked his story and all but it just seems to me that IV was way too much to handle this week.

v/IV

/\/\oonshyne · 03-30-2004, 11:55 PM

this wasn't one sided, Madpoet had a typical approach to his verse...

which may come off to others as a boring story, or dull verse
i felt like he may have rushed 'parts' in his verse to complete a rhyme, but overall he did a good job

IV had the ol' school in em' for his verse, i felt like i was reading a Kool G Rap verse
nothing came off as filler either, and it was a well told and thought out story
some parts ventured but all in all kept the story unique and intact...
he did a good job with it

vote - iv

Madpoet · 04-01-2004, 11:56 PM

RIse..............

03-27-2004, 06:33 PM	#1 (permalink)
Insanevillian STILL in CHARGE Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Oakland, Ca Posts: 16,322	IV @ MadPoet THE National Topical League If u are HOME u pick a topic off of this List... NTL Topics!!! HOME TEAMS COME IN and cHOOSE 1!!! If u are AWAY... Dont bother looking at the topics... If The HOME person DOES NOT DROP A TOPIC BY TUESDAY 8:00 PACIFIC... They Lose HOME FIELD ADVANTAGE FOR THE WEEK... 30 LINES MIN... 60 MAX IF U NO SHOW TWO WEEKS IN A ROW... U LOSE YOUR SPOT.... Everyone On RM Is Allowed to vote If They Have Over 1000 Posts... Breakdown is Needed on ALL Battles... U Must Vote On Six Battles A Week And Post In Your Thread which Ones U Voted On... If U Dont U Automatically LOSE... Even If u are winning 20-0 U Lose... Good Luck... -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- __________________ ELITE

03-27-2004, 06:56 PM	#2 (permalink)
Insanevillian STILL in CHARGE Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Oakland, Ca Posts: 16,322	im here of course... __________________ ELITE

03-28-2004, 11:31 AM	#3 (permalink)
Madpoet 2 weeks..and countin Join Date: Dec 2003 Location: myspace.com/madpoet5150 Posts: 13,403	Check Check...Fuck a IV And ah.....good luck to MaDpOeT The subject you will be notified of monday late night.. __________________ Ron Paul would have been our saviour "It is true that if you are poor and can't afford a good lawyer,your odds of going to prison skyrocket, but you know what? Tough!"- Bill O'Reilly *Well FUCK Bill O'Reilly* 2 weeks starts- 4.26.08...prepare for armaggedon

03-29-2004, 10:10 PM	#4 (permalink)
Madpoet 2 weeks..and countin Join Date: Dec 2003 Location: myspace.com/madpoet5150 Posts: 13,403	13. The nightmare returns…your sleeps been troubled for the past month with visions of the Grimm Reaper coming to claim you. But this time, a new twist. An old man with wisdom in his eyes stands between you and death. As death swings his scythe for you the man turns to you and whispers “I can help you.” You wake up in a cold sweat. Trying to get your mind off the dream you walk over to the gas station near your house. So intent on deciphering the meaning of your dream you trip over a man hunched in the shadows. You back away quickly and apologize. He looks at you. It’s the man from your dream… Start writin..... __________________ Ron Paul would have been our saviour "It is true that if you are poor and can't afford a good lawyer,your odds of going to prison skyrocket, but you know what? Tough!"- Bill O'Reilly *Well FUCK Bill O'Reilly* 2 weeks starts- 4.26.08...prepare for armaggedon

03-30-2004, 02:25 AM	#5 (permalink)
Madpoet 2 weeks..and countin Join Date: Dec 2003 Location: myspace.com/madpoet5150 Posts: 13,403	Nightmares torment my head when I am in bed The past -N- last few nights I've dreamt dread Unkempt and underfed I walk around a tired wreck Always late and not wired properly for sound check Every night when I lay down it gets dim -N- deeper He is always coming for me...Death...The grim reaper He's as scary a sight as anyone would ever want to meet In the dream I end at his feet..Always white as a sheet Ready to greet his scythe when abruptly I wake up Quivering -N- trust..Im not an easy man to shake up Or break up so I fight off dreamland as long as I can Listen to song just to feed my low ass attention span Man I fell out flat..in the chair as I sat I Always awoke -N- the same place wit my game face -N- a baseball Bat The chase -N- all that.. it was there..the runnin for my life The reaper gunnin for me... wit an oversized knife I fell to the floor..twisted my ankle.. it went numb As the reaper descended so did a man with great wisdom My rule of thumb is always go with the flow So when he spoke he did so slow -N- I listened so I could know Why I am forced to behold such a terrible and grave view The sage whispered "If you follow me..I can save you" Fore I was through and I figured I was dead I awoke in a pool of sweat shaking and not a coffin instead Did my dreams decieve cause this was hard to believe Did I acheieve some horrid hell I am forced to concieve Is it a curse or worse is it some kind of karma pay back For some messed up shit I did in my youth way back Took a swig of jack and got up -N- put on my pants Mumbiling to myself like a madman who always rants Gotta clear my mind and while it is easy to rewind My thoughts arent so easy to drop and leave behind I confined them and decided I was way low on smokes This kind of night..Ill go see Joe he's always got jokes I Left -N- walked out my crib mad quick Brick By brick this situation was gettin sick..like bad thick Drug dealers hang out all up where I live on the block But since thats my home they dont offer to give me rock I get to "Quick Stop" and go to open the door I trip on somethin in the shadows..it's a man lying on the floor "My bad duke"..He looked up..you wouldnt believe what I saw This is where things got heated and raw...I couldnt hold up my jaw The man lying down look so familiar..like that exact same guy Didnt know how to react..all I could ask is "Whats ya name? -N- why?" "Why do these terrible thoughts creep when I sleep?" "WHen Im asleep"..I grabbed his dirty body.."Listen man this is deep!" How can you help me motherfucker? This man just blankly looks "I see there is nothing now...GOD will now close your books" He turns to walk away..starts to talk and says "Pray" "ASSFUCKER THATS FUCKING GAY....COME ON MAN DONT FUCKING PLAY!!!!!!!!" He looked over his dirty shoulder colder.. "Dont you realize?" I get bolder "NO and I despise any form of suprise or lies!" You wont change..for you the situation is too far gone You are too stubborn..more than any I've met bar none In that instant I froze when he again rose to depart He broke my heart as if someone has thrown a poisonous dart I allowed him to leave because you all see That wise old homeless man in my dreams..he was me.... __________________ Ron Paul would have been our saviour "It is true that if you are poor and can't afford a good lawyer,your odds of going to prison skyrocket, but you know what? Tough!"- Bill O'Reilly *Well FUCK Bill O'Reilly* 2 weeks starts- 4.26.08...prepare for armaggedon

03-30-2004, 09:57 PM	#6 (permalink)
Insanevillian STILL in CHARGE Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Oakland, Ca Posts: 16,322	BOOM!!! Creeping Death Part I The Old Man Seein' the man in the darkness i placed my hand where my heart is... as the hardest of eyes pierced deeply into the farthest... depths of my soul, with his breath of ripe mold creasing his mouth... releasing the stout hes drinkin' which wasnt easing my doubt... that this greasy devout bum can help me escape from my end... what the fuck can he do? besides give me some rum or gin... i thought he could use a friend, till i saw his eyes cross my breast n thighs... ive had the best of guys since i was 15, im too blessed n wise... to mess with this scrub, this fuck looks too far from innocent... but why did i dream of him? fuck it, it must be a coincidence... he smiled a toothless grin, i winced as i dropped him a quarter... then ran like a sp.ic to the border to try to get my life in order... Part II Back at Home... my body is itchin', hands are shaking from some inner affliction... i felt like marshalls mother as i popped prescription pills in the kitchen... the friction inside my body didnt show, peeps wanted to ride this hottie... they wanted to slide their shotty inside n pull the trigger like john gotti... but my guy bought me everything i wanted but the thing i want most... from rump roast for me to cook to trips down the cajun coast... but when i asked for what i wanted most, i was greeted with slaps here... n there till i felt trapped, fear buildin up like waitin for a papsmear... ive taken this crap near the limit, but im appearin' timid... n if i can have what i want, shit i would have no fear of this dimwit... as he drank beer n "kicked it", i went to the spot the bum is dwellin in... i felt inside, that this guy can really help me out of the hell im in... Part III Back to Square One... i approached the bum, and he was layed out soaked in rum... it was a pity seeing him laid out where all the roaches come... he sat up, "IM FOCUSED SON!!!" was the words that he spoke... "oh shit my bad, i was havin a nightmare" after that i almost broke... back to my splintered house, but i had some shit to figure out... n he said, "your the bitch from my dream" as he pulled his dentures out... "i thought that was u, look i can help u escape the pain your in... and then he handed me the thing i wanted, a bag of heroin... . . . . I took the shit right there next to him, as he cackled n smiled... my body took it all in, shit i havent had this smack in awhile... the old man started to fade, and he dissapeared with his toothless grin... n then my heart stopped, as i escaped this ruthless world im in... __________________ ELITE

03-30-2004, 10:13 PM	#7 (permalink)
ClasSik The Sickest Phsycopath... Join Date: Dec 2003 Location: Shaolin Island Posts: 1,206	Nice battle.. Madpoet:real nice flow..vocab coulda been a bit better..the structure was nice..the story ending was the best tho..i loved it.. IV:Very nice vocab..structure was good too..i also loved the ending..but i didnt get the story a little..which took away from the feel.. Vote:Madpoet __________________ The root of all evil..its the dollar..Flashy poppin ur collar..dudes will really pop thru ur collar/To get that same god damn dollar..U hold in ur hand..then rob ur wife..Make hell for her life.. Squeel?..NO..stabbed her with the knife/ Go to church..ask god for forgivness.. Back to the streets back to ur business/ Actin like god actually gave u forgiveness/-MHz.

03-30-2004, 10:26 PM	#8 (permalink)
headless verseman Registered User Join Date: Oct 2000 Posts: 16,579	two endings that were percievable, not predictable, but percievable. i liked insane's verse alot more, had good similie's incorporated along with his prose. i didnt like all of insane's plot though, some parts were just ok. i didnt like insane leaving out the figure of death aka the grim reaper, i thought using him as an influence or a character even would have added a bit more to the story. the actual story of mad poet was alot better. he did have some questionble word choices, and wording, but it was a cool story. flow in both was good enough. hmm, thought insane's verse was technically better and i liked it more, but the actual story of mad poet was better. close. but, i say vote = insane. i liked it alot more as a whole, mad's story was better, but insane's was written better tit for tat, i say insane __________________ Most Hated

03-30-2004, 10:27 PM	#9 (permalink)
Status Qu0 Hammer Time Join Date: Sep 2002 Posts: 102	this was one sided. i couldn't even finish madpoet's piece. sorry dude, but all you did throughout 75% of it was describe what we already knew happned, complete filler. the flow was off like mothafucka too, i couldn't catch it. iv, solid verse, nothing spectaular, the flow was on some early 90's shit lol. like a chronic flow. oh, some of the times i think you went over the top with the similies, (there was a span of about 4-5) some weren't necessary and some seemed forced. but even with that said. iv handled him steadily. vote - iv. __________________ hammer time.

03-30-2004, 11:10 PM	#10 (permalink)
5 Starre Big Jaw Entertainemnt Join Date: Feb 2003 Location: Worcester Posts: 3,097	yea this was one sided. i dont understand the first vote really but yea. IV had better vocab. better strucher, better flow, and an overall better story. i dont really know what else to say lol. Im not sayin Madpoet sucked bevause he didnt. he had a very nice well put together verse. i liked his story and all but it just seems to me that IV was way too much to handle this week. v/IV __________________ N..Five Starre..N RSTL Text Rank: Retired #2 RSTL Audio Rank: #22 Music @ http://www.soundclick.com/fivesproductions

03-30-2004, 11:55 PM	#11 (permalink)
/\/\oonshyne He's What They Talk About Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Queens Posts: 892 $/\/\oonshyne takes it up the butt!$	this wasn't one sided, Madpoet had a typical approach to his verse... which may come off to others as a boring story, or dull verse i felt like he may have rushed 'parts' in his verse to complete a rhyme, but overall he did a good job IV had the ol' school in em' for his verse, i felt like i was reading a Kool G Rap verse nothing came off as filler either, and it was a well told and thought out story some parts ventured but all in all kept the story unique and intact... he did a good job with it vote - iv
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04-01-2004, 11:56 PM	#12 (permalink)
Madpoet 2 weeks..and countin Join Date: Dec 2003 Location: myspace.com/madpoet5150 Posts: 13,403	RIse.............. __________________ Ron Paul would have been our saviour "It is true that if you are poor and can't afford a good lawyer,your odds of going to prison skyrocket, but you know what? Tough!"- Bill O'Reilly *Well FUCK Bill O'Reilly* 2 weeks starts- 4.26.08...prepare for armaggedon

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