summer tourney: 15- FURL v 18- BAYSICK

Vern Acular · 07-06-2003, 06:36 PM

WELCOME TO THE
VERN & LOJAK
SUMMER TOPICAL TOURNEY

verses are due THURSDAY @ 9pm eastern
votes are due SUNDAY @ 12pm eastern

each participant must vote on atleast 6 battles

:: TOPICS ::

http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...hreadid=597721

good luck to all

BaySick · 07-06-2003, 10:22 PM

i win..

furl · 07-08-2003, 12:28 PM

Signin in thx for showin me this basic I dont even remeber signin up

BaySick · 07-08-2003, 01:35 PM

Topic = Hyperventilation

Ima tell you a little something about hyperventilating..
Nothing more then doubt is what it is, like cyber fucking..
You don’t know what’s gonna happen you could last..
And ur body could shut down and you die relaxed..
The air is seeped out ur mouth like a vacuum ur consumed..
With fear and your doom is near but you appear in zoomed..
In trying to breath ur last breath but you cant catch it..
Its like a death trap when ur next to it you no the shit..
And you can’t do nething to stop form falling in the pit..
But once you do ur through so fighting its what you do..
Hope is all you have and fear is just distracting you..
Kinda like you feel right now, just settle down pal or sir..
Its just me you and the gun on ur face a 38 caliber..
No big deal I just wanted to speak to these Internet people..
Ay you lazy ass fucks ur wasting ur life and ur all pitiful..
I just wanted to say that…ill be at every one of ur houses..
Doin the same thing im doin baysick iv killed all his spouses..
u people are next because ur pitiful and so is Jeff an all his crap....
I was the one that gave him this damn idea he stab me in the back..
….
I mean why you think I have more post then he does..
And I have better avatars then everyone huh its cuz..
I made up this damn rapmusic.com idea and im pissed..
So he gave me posts and it kept me quiet now I insist..
On getting me revenge through everyone of you RManins..
Don’t even think for one second ill take it easy on my friends..
Cuz you’ve all hated on me at least once and iknow it..
But now that will stop, im here to prove it and show it..

Clutching the 38 one down about 20,000 left ya just wait..
Ill be they’re to kill you and ur family don’t even ask for fate..
Because its gone along with ur favorite member baysick..
Consider this verse over and don’t vote cos his been terminated..

Sincerely,

V E R B

[Based on a dream by: Nooneremembersverb i mean Verbicallynasty]

furl · 07-09-2003, 11:56 AM

I'll do Hypervental whatever

Walking along the bridge.. no car an shit
Sweating fierce the breath hurting my ribs
My little brother chattering away
Shit i've been walkin all damn day
no play just work walking an school
it seems my brother's face beems fool
Happens fast in the blink of an eye
The idiot trips, or slips an he begins to fly
Almost over but he grabs the rail
He's whimpering his face grows pale
I grab on to him I will not fail, I hope
Thinkin fast I use my Belt as a rope
I pull him up he smiles, I'm muttering
My throat constricts, a trick? I begin stuttering
The breath in my longs is caught my eyes bulge
I try to calm down remeberin what I was told
All I can so are black spots my vision is blurred
My brother stares at me not sayin a word
The air where is it I can't find any...
My whole chest shudders feelin air a plenty
but none in me, wheezing tryin my lungs so weak...
An to think I was playin ball just last week
it's gettin blink my strength is ebbing
I feel like my throat is covered w/ webbing
My brothers hand slammin onto my back
the spots... all over they begin to stack
like tetris.. thinkin this I begin to wish I had letters
To family an friends this is the end... i'll meet my betters
My mom I don't want to upset her.. AIR!!!!!
I can't find it i feel tinglin from my back to my hair
My face burns my lungs pull wishin to be full
I slowly meet the pavement... a crumpled form..
Killed from an asthma attack so young

8 minutes worth enjoy

Entrensical · 07-09-2003, 02:06 PM

vote-baysick

furl told a nice story, no doubt.. quite nice

baysick came better tho, a better story, a better flow.. and some humor..

so thats why he wins

Resilient. · 07-09-2003, 03:58 PM

Decent battle.

Baysick - Decent verse. Content was pretty simple though. Try to make it more interesting with some better vocabulary use. That can ••••e it up a little bit, and make it more of an effecting story. Storyline was good, and it was funny, creative, and kept me reading. Flow was aight, could've been a little better. Had some multies here and there as well. Good shit man.

Furl - You had a decent story, but I wasn't feeling your flow at all. Bars were much too short to maintain a good flow. Story line was aight, not as humerous. Simplistic content though, as I told Baysick.

Both need some work here and there, but it comes in time.

Vote - Baysick

Vern Acular · 07-11-2003, 02:11 PM

upping for votes

FortiFied Killa · 07-11-2003, 03:43 PM

alright battle, nothing special about either verse.

baysick- it seemed that your lines were a little stretched out at times and that fucked up your flow. Story was a little odd, kind of dropped at the end.

furl- your flow also dropped at times. story started off looking like it would go nowhere but picked up near the end nicely.

vote=furl

BaySick · 07-12-2003, 11:27 AM

2-1 uppin dammit!

Vern Acular · 07-12-2003, 02:06 PM

going with furl

flow was more crisp although your structure kept switching, in the end i was satisfied enough to pick you over bay, bay had an ok verse, but it was hard to follow flow was off in many areas, but it's good though, props to both of you for showing

Bay St. Mary · 07-12-2003, 09:48 PM

thats fuckin bullshit his verse was garbage..and u people that voted against me are just dumb

07-13-2003, 01:39 AM

Baysick- A little too basic, and non rhyming in some areas. Maintained a good flow and had some attempted nice concepts. Had the vocab(though not much) of the battle.

Furl- Told a nice story, you won that category. But that flow and vocab was too...DOJO. The bars were too short. Had some nice emotion, but that was really all.

Vote- Baysick. Not a great verse from either, but Baysick took it with the little bit of complexity that was there. I had to stuggle to read through Furl's verse, but it got better at the end. Baysick's managed to pull you in here and there so you wouldn't get so bored.

Vern Acular · 07-13-2003, 09:42 AM

it's too late now, but just for the record i actually meant to vote for baysick, i just got the names switched, so im just throwing out my vote, sorry for the mix up

BaySick · 07-13-2003, 12:19 PM

lol my bad for bitchin then..lol
3-1
up

Vern Acular · 07-13-2003, 01:00 PM

winner baysick

07-06-2003, 06:36 PM	#1 (permalink)
Vern Acular 12x RSTL Champ Join Date: Oct 2001 Location: NC Posts: 5,027	summer tourney: 15- FURL v 18- BAYSICK WELCOME TO THE VERN & LOJAK SUMMER TOPICAL TOURNEY verses are due THURSDAY @ 9pm eastern votes are due SUNDAY @ 12pm eastern each participant must vote on atleast 6 battles :: TOPICS :: http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...hreadid=597721 good luck to all __________________ TH3 3LIT3 2005 NO ID TOURNEY WINNER 1x POET TREE CHAMP 12x RSTL CHAMP Yes...I've Beat You Before www.soundclick.com/eulogy www.myspace.com/eulogy46

07-06-2003, 10:22 PM	#2 (permalink)
BaySick ill. Join Date: Jun 2001 Location: SZFFlowsSOONice: i respect you because you try sooo damn hard..its impressive Posts: 6,546	i win.. __________________ Unavailable.

07-08-2003, 12:28 PM	#3 (permalink)
furl Keep Movin Join Date: Dec 2000 Location: New Orleans Posts: 7,610	Signin in thx for showin me this basic I dont even remeber signin up __________________ "If you beefin with Moe, and he tight with Bo, than you gotta wile out man an buck at em both, coz he could retaliate dawg or play them folks" - Lil Derrick R.I.P

07-08-2003, 01:35 PM	#4 (permalink)
BaySick ill. Join Date: Jun 2001 Location: SZFFlowsSOONice: i respect you because you try sooo damn hard..its impressive Posts: 6,546	Topic = Hyperventilation Ima tell you a little something about hyperventilating.. Nothing more then doubt is what it is, like cyber fucking.. You don’t know what’s gonna happen you could last.. And ur body could shut down and you die relaxed.. The air is seeped out ur mouth like a vacuum ur consumed.. With fear and your doom is near but you appear in zoomed.. In trying to breath ur last breath but you cant catch it.. Its like a death trap when ur next to it you no the shit.. And you can’t do nething to stop form falling in the pit.. But once you do ur through so fighting its what you do.. Hope is all you have and fear is just distracting you.. Kinda like you feel right now, just settle down pal or sir.. Its just me you and the gun on ur face a 38 caliber.. No big deal I just wanted to speak to these Internet people.. Ay you lazy ass fucks ur wasting ur life and ur all pitiful.. I just wanted to say that…ill be at every one of ur houses.. Doin the same thing im doin baysick iv killed all his spouses.. u people are next because ur pitiful and so is Jeff an all his crap.... I was the one that gave him this damn idea he stab me in the back.. …. I mean why you think I have more post then he does.. And I have better avatars then everyone huh its cuz.. I made up this damn rapmusic.com idea and im pissed.. So he gave me posts and it kept me quiet now I insist.. On getting me revenge through everyone of you RManins.. Don’t even think for one second ill take it easy on my friends.. Cuz you’ve all hated on me at least once and iknow it.. But now that will stop, im here to prove it and show it.. Clutching the 38 one down about 20,000 left ya just wait.. Ill be they’re to kill you and ur family don’t even ask for fate.. Because its gone along with ur favorite member baysick.. Consider this verse over and don’t vote cos his been terminated.. Sincerely, V E R B [Based on a dream by: Nooneremembersverb i mean Verbicallynasty] __________________ Unavailable.

07-09-2003, 11:56 AM	#5 (permalink)
furl Keep Movin Join Date: Dec 2000 Location: New Orleans Posts: 7,610	I'll do Hypervental whatever Walking along the bridge.. no car an shit Sweating fierce the breath hurting my ribs My little brother chattering away Shit i've been walkin all damn day no play just work walking an school it seems my brother's face beems fool Happens fast in the blink of an eye The idiot trips, or slips an he begins to fly Almost over but he grabs the rail He's whimpering his face grows pale I grab on to him I will not fail, I hope Thinkin fast I use my Belt as a rope I pull him up he smiles, I'm muttering My throat constricts, a trick? I begin stuttering The breath in my longs is caught my eyes bulge I try to calm down remeberin what I was told All I can so are black spots my vision is blurred My brother stares at me not sayin a word The air where is it I can't find any... My whole chest shudders feelin air a plenty but none in me, wheezing tryin my lungs so weak... An to think I was playin ball just last week it's gettin blink my strength is ebbing I feel like my throat is covered w/ webbing My brothers hand slammin onto my back the spots... all over they begin to stack like tetris.. thinkin this I begin to wish I had letters To family an friends this is the end... i'll meet my betters My mom I don't want to upset her.. AIR!!!!! I can't find it i feel tinglin from my back to my hair My face burns my lungs pull wishin to be full I slowly meet the pavement... a crumpled form.. Killed from an asthma attack so young 8 minutes worth enjoy __________________ "If you beefin with Moe, and he tight with Bo, than you gotta wile out man an buck at em both, coz he could retaliate dawg or play them folks" - Lil Derrick R.I.P

07-09-2003, 02:06 PM	#6 (permalink)
Entrensical still EXS and STC Join Date: Jul 2001 Location: play like a boss, die like a boss Posts: 9,367	vote-baysick furl told a nice story, no doubt.. quite nice baysick came better tho, a better story, a better flow.. and some humor.. so thats why he wins __________________ Trens & Tommy Best of Both Worlds A God Amongst Fools i bring the heat, in fact i get the drama blown, so far outta proportion, i even get ya mama known

07-09-2003, 03:58 PM	#7 (permalink)
Resilient. ILLWEEMAN Join Date: Sep 2001 Location: En-Why Sucka Posts: 23,774	Decent battle. Baysick - Decent verse. Content was pretty simple though. Try to make it more interesting with some better vocabulary use. That can ••••e it up a little bit, and make it more of an effecting story. Storyline was good, and it was funny, creative, and kept me reading. Flow was aight, could've been a little better. Had some multies here and there as well. Good shit man. Furl - You had a decent story, but I wasn't feeling your flow at all. Bars were much too short to maintain a good flow. Story line was aight, not as humerous. Simplistic content though, as I told Baysick. Both need some work here and there, but it comes in time. Vote - Baysick __________________ I'M JUST A H O O L I G A N OF CYBER RAP (What The Shit is a Textmaster?) ------------------------- iLLWeeZGoD Baby! My RBL Battle Vs. Linesman

07-11-2003, 02:11 PM	#8 (permalink)
Vern Acular 12x RSTL Champ Join Date: Oct 2001 Location: NC Posts: 5,027	upping for votes __________________ TH3 3LIT3 2005 NO ID TOURNEY WINNER 1x POET TREE CHAMP 12x RSTL CHAMP Yes...I've Beat You Before www.soundclick.com/eulogy www.myspace.com/eulogy46

07-11-2003, 03:43 PM	#9 (permalink)
FortiFied Killa Registered User Join Date: Aug 2001 Location: Toronto Posts: 6,615	alright battle, nothing special about either verse. baysick- it seemed that your lines were a little stretched out at times and that fucked up your flow. Story was a little odd, kind of dropped at the end. furl- your flow also dropped at times. story started off looking like it would go nowhere but picked up near the end nicely. vote=furl __________________ Prepare for a moon spanking

07-12-2003, 11:27 AM	#10 (permalink)
BaySick ill. Join Date: Jun 2001 Location: SZFFlowsSOONice: i respect you because you try sooo damn hard..its impressive Posts: 6,546	2-1 uppin dammit! __________________ Unavailable.

07-12-2003, 02:06 PM	#11 (permalink)
Vern Acular 12x RSTL Champ Join Date: Oct 2001 Location: NC Posts: 5,027	going with furl flow was more crisp although your structure kept switching, in the end i was satisfied enough to pick you over bay, bay had an ok verse, but it was hard to follow flow was off in many areas, but it's good though, props to both of you for showing __________________ TH3 3LIT3 2005 NO ID TOURNEY WINNER 1x POET TREE CHAMP 12x RSTL CHAMP Yes...I've Beat You Before www.soundclick.com/eulogy www.myspace.com/eulogy46

07-12-2003, 09:48 PM	#12 (permalink)
Bay St. Mary Registered User Join Date: Jul 2003 Posts: 144	thats fuckin bullshit his verse was garbage..and u people that voted against me are just dumb __________________ Read Me Like I'm The Bible ..Im The Fuckin Future..

07-13-2003, 01:39 AM	#13 (permalink)
Macabre Guest Posts: n/a	Baysick- A little too basic, and non rhyming in some areas. Maintained a good flow and had some attempted nice concepts. Had the vocab(though not much) of the battle. Furl- Told a nice story, you won that category. But that flow and vocab was too...DOJO. The bars were too short. Had some nice emotion, but that was really all. Vote- Baysick. Not a great verse from either, but Baysick took it with the little bit of complexity that was there. I had to stuggle to read through Furl's verse, but it got better at the end. Baysick's managed to pull you in here and there so you wouldn't get so bored.

07-13-2003, 09:42 AM	#14 (permalink)
Vern Acular 12x RSTL Champ Join Date: Oct 2001 Location: NC Posts: 5,027	it's too late now, but just for the record i actually meant to vote for baysick, i just got the names switched, so im just throwing out my vote, sorry for the mix up __________________ TH3 3LIT3 2005 NO ID TOURNEY WINNER 1x POET TREE CHAMP 12x RSTL CHAMP Yes...I've Beat You Before www.soundclick.com/eulogy www.myspace.com/eulogy46

07-13-2003, 12:19 PM	#15 (permalink)
BaySick ill. Join Date: Jun 2001 Location: SZFFlowsSOONice: i respect you because you try sooo damn hard..its impressive Posts: 6,546	lol my bad for bitchin then..lol 3-1 up __________________ Unavailable.

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07-13-2003, 01:00 PM	#16 (permalink)
Vern Acular 12x RSTL Champ Join Date: Oct 2001 Location: NC Posts: 5,027	winner baysick __________________ TH3 3LIT3 2005 NO ID TOURNEY WINNER 1x POET TREE CHAMP 12x RSTL CHAMP Yes...I've Beat You Before www.soundclick.com/eulogy www.myspace.com/eulogy46

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