Help - Brigade - Volume I

[NA Brigade]

Hi, I'm new to this site but want some feedback on a few verses. I have some buzz for freestyle battles and so on around the Toronto, Canada. I just want to know what you guys think of these verses.

They are not in order- just random

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Telling lies on the stage, gets you killed in the street, so from now on everything I do, has lethal consequences for you/

I'm broke, so if you don't lend me money, you get blown worse than coke and a syringe with an overdose of heroin in your throat/

I get them highs and lows like a period while being pregnant, and during getting fallopian tube strangled/

My skull's too thick, no one want's to head butt me cause they get fucked up worse than producing your own cd/

the good stuff

I’m always on the edge, in that state of mind, that serial killers and I dream alike/

My actions make thrillers that earn millions, last one to get dealt with, like the 8 ball in billiards/

My status is colossal can’t be bested, the past three weeks full of drugged up groupie orgies so don’t put it past me, I might be aids infested/

Look clean but its just soap and water, inside dark and dimmer than enslaved gold mines, but I still get mine, once washed the gold and diamonds will shine/

Before couldn’t live up to these preposterous accusations, say I didn’t deserve these criminal and violent protests and demonstrations/

Things changed, I’ve gone past that point of ever coming back to normal sanity, my words and actions like Matrix defy gravity/

Get prosecuted, an atheist a non believer, a mind of genius ideas still waiting for these raw thoughts to simmer/

Insane in the brain is too tame for what I am, so I take the blame in vein wearing the Pandora’s box on my chain/

I get banished from organizations for being too lyrically violent, I pierce and attack like the sharp edge of a diamond/

I defy any authority opposing my path of succession, clinically diagnosed for prolonged lyrical vicious aggression/