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Old 11-19-2005, 03:41 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Old 11-19-2005, 05:07 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Is there anything I can do to improve my multis and punches?
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Old 11-21-2005, 04:19 AM   #3 (permalink)
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Is there anything I can do to improve my multis and punches?
there r plently of ways to spinoff multi's n punches..
first think of words you wanna use then find the flow to pronunce it..
next thing is to mold it n bunch it,
its simple guy, imprivise, like no weed? roll your roachies n blunts, bitch...
you need jokes in abundance it throw a punchline..
but metaphores are ••••• forms, they should go on the frontline..
your content and your flow com-bined..
along with your energy is what it takes to make the soul of a rhyme...

lol. i dont know...
yo grams, peep what i posted in your thread...
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Old 11-22-2005, 09:09 PM   #4 (permalink)
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hey!! i LOVE evanescence!! awww... and you're good too!
i have a question about battling, im a girl and guys always pull the sex card on me and it pisses me off! or ill win just because of how i look but i really dont know if i have skills or not.
how do i get guys to look at me as an mc and not just an ass and tits? arggg i want fairness!!
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Old 11-22-2005, 09:19 PM   #5 (permalink)
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hey!! i LOVE evanescence!! awww... and you're good too!
i have a question about battling, im a girl and guys always pull the sex card on me and it pisses me off! or ill win just because of how i look but i really dont know if i have skills or not.
how do i get guys to look at me as an mc and not just an ass and tits? arggg i want fairness!!
help me!!
be consistent with your verses..battle all comers too..joining the RBL is a great start to doing this..and there's never been a female RBL champion..so you can break the barrier..
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Old 11-22-2005, 11:07 PM   #6 (permalink)
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hello sonic! wahts the RBL?? it'd win it! i have a battle now im going it wih ;) be back!!
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Old 11-23-2005, 05:27 AM   #7 (permalink)
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see sonic?? they hate me =( cuz im a girl.
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Old 11-23-2005, 07:04 AM   #8 (permalink)
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^ Just show your ass and tits to win - Lol

Naw - okay there are a heap of ways you can beat a guy if he pulls the sex card, i get alot because of the whole White thing, and the whole english thing

if someone says

"Everyone knows your shit, you're just a ho" <--- anything like that

Flip it and you say

"Oh so you're getting scared because this ho
has got the best flow, and stole the whole show"

Dont ever back down, flip it somehow - make it look like they gave you ammo, Even if it's an amazing punchline, you can always flip it..

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I see in that battle, that everyone was voting for you, then you physced when someone said something bad, Just take it - people respect a proud loser more than a bitchy winner.
For real.



Hope this helps, Just keep working on your stuff.

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Old 11-23-2005, 07:59 AM   #9 (permalink)
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thats cuz they were hating on mee
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Old 11-23-2005, 08:09 AM   #10 (permalink)
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hey can u vote on it and give your honest opinion sir?
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hello sonic! wahts the RBL?? it'd win it! i have a battle now im going it wih ;) be back!!
the rbl is the rap music battle league...
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you little bitch, i dont knowwhat yor plottin.. .
yeah i may be MissIng.. . but you.. . yo'r just 4gotten.. .
no 1 believes in you like you'r loch ness.. .
i already beat you, im only on bar 4 u Got Ten.. .

dont open your mouth at all.. .
the day u beat me's the day yur grandson's old enough to buy alchohol.. .
dont try to test me friend.. .
you's a bitch, the only way id date you is if i became a lesbian .. .
yor gettin slaughtered duke.. .
im bout to kill you son, lyrically, i just aborted yu.. .
this whole thread is clogged with your headroom.. .
the reason you dont see bow wow in the colombus is cuz u c him in yr bedroom.. .
yo Gam, you see this shit?! this bitch is nasty man!!! lmao
yoo i dont really think its the ass n tits that help u to win battles girl...
you've got some skills for real.
and in all honesty, guys will vote against girls just cuz they're afraid of her potentially becoming better than they are so dont stress it lady...
listen to what kriminal's saying to you. its word.
but really, you've got skill so dont worry about doing good on this site.
you'll make it just fine lol.
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Old 11-23-2005, 07:55 PM   #13 (permalink)
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yo Gam, you see this shit?! this bitch is nasty man!!! lmao
yoo i dont really think its the ass n tits that help u to win battles girl...
you've got some skills for real.
and in all honesty, guys will vote against girls just cuz they're afraid of her potentially becoming better than they are so dont stress it lady...
listen to what kriminal's saying to you. its word.
but really, you've got skill so dont worry about doing good on this site.
you'll make it just fine lol.
lmao aaaaawwwwwww thats sweet lov =*.. but honestly babe i modeled it after one of your verses lmao! i am a quick learner and i adapt well =) what can i say? im not just the avarage bitch.
where's sonic? sonic!!! whare are you?
and the cute australian kid. i watch everyone and i copy what i see them do...
is that bad?
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lmao aaaaawwwwwww thats sweet lov =*.. but honestly babe i modeled it after one of your verses lmao! i am a quick learner and i adapt well =) what can i say? im not just the avarage bitch.
where's sonic? sonic!!! whare are you?
and the cute australian kid. i watch everyone and i copy what i see them do...
is that bad?
lmao yo thats bananas, im glad you're actualy good cuz i'd kill a niggg for bitin the steez lol.
but seroiusly, thats flattering but u've gotta adapt your own style miss.
i can help you to do that if you want. just set up a thread...
definitely not the avarage bitch...
and its good to imitate, but not copy.
nothings wrong with it but its not good either cuz its like you're trying to take on someone elses identity, be your self. no one can say shit to you if you do that...
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Old 11-25-2005, 06:53 AM   #16 (permalink)
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over your eeyes i pull the wool of a sheep.. .
i PM'd you for a battle now im proceeding to Put U To Sleep.. .
bitch, ima stomp u 'till my feet get mushy.. .
nigg4s think im bi-sexual, cuz im adDICted to eatin pussy.. .
so don't expect a win.. .
lyrical form of Lorena Bobbit, i'm makin sure you Never have sex again.. .
your punches are MissIng me.. .
i Crib: H.uman-V.irus ILLnEsses, cuz im immune to deficiency.. .
i spit relentlessly u will see.. .
when u said "on the way up", you were stating your chances of hitting puberty.. .
this is dope ma, but seriously, the only kind of help i can give is helping u discover your own style miss. u got all other angles covered thats word...
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Old 11-25-2005, 02:33 PM   #17 (permalink)
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Could you critique my verse and help me with what i need to work on...

Damn, when I finished reading your shit I began to cheer/
It was finally over, that shit was longer than shakespeare/
It could have been a book, filed under the topic boredomology/
Didn’t know how to end it? How about an apology/
For makin’ us read that shit. Advice: keep it brief, or better yet silent/
All those lines about your gat, just an act pretending to be violent/
Frag ‘em, tag ‘em, and FPS, those are some of your favorite catchphrases/
You play all those Mature videos games that are ruining kids these days/
They have your mind going crazy, settin’ you up in a deathtrap/
They’ve got you thinkin’ crazy things like that you can rap/
Seriously, you don’t even know what crib your from/
Maybe your just worried that I’ll run up on you with a gun/
Your probably a 40 year old white guy, with a pony tail, driving a red corvette/
Go home, try and pretend to be a tough guy on the interenet/
We all know the life you live, is simple, and crimeless/
Rappin’ about shootin’ people, your just trying to get through your midlife crisis/
You’re a loser 2K5 Is when you lost your virginity/
Been waitin 40 years for that moment, you werent even satisfactory/
Her exact words were: “During Sex he ejaculuated Prematurely”/
Do us all a favor, stop fakin’. rap about what you know/
Then PM me up, and ill give you another go/
Cause if like you said, this was a World Premier/
You just choked, and froze in headlights like a deer/
Next match, take your time, write a good rhyme/
Maybe it will be something that I will actually read to the very last line/

According to 4Gotten it was horrible, so could you go a step further than 4gotten and help me find whats horrible about it and how i can improve it

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Could you critique my verse and help me with what i need to work on...

Damn, when I finished reading your shit I began to cheer/
It was finally over, that shit was longer than shakespeare/
lol, funny opener...
It could have been a book, filed under the topic boredomology/
Didn’t know how to end it? How about an apology/
For makin’ us read that shit. Advice: keep it brief, or better yet silent/
All those lines about your gat, just an act pretending to be violent/
ended clever and solidly... last line, ^blah
Frag ‘em, tag ‘em, and FPS, those are some of your favorite catchphrases/
You play all those Mature videos games that are ruining kids these days/
nice try, should've CALLed him the aftereffect of playing those games, would've s