My first Post, FEEDBACK Please

[doubledown]

Heres something i wrote quickly, im very very new to this and i know its pretty simple and short but if you can just give me some criticism it'd be appreciated

im lookin for lust cuz love doesnt exist /
thats how i met tiff, she's tonights tryst /
it started with a kiss, she bought all my lines /
put my 2 cent in, let her know she's a dime /
she heaven sent, sweet scent with angelic shine /
said i care about her mind, yeah i love brain /
so I get her on her knees, tell her open wide /
guide my love inside, 10 mins go by and I /
cover her face in white like a veil on a bride /

thanks in advance

[MisterEThoughts]

umm kinda stupid topic but notbad i guess just the topic kinda crappy sorry try to be more complex and don't try to hard to flow it will come.

[doubledown]

its cool, thanks for taking the time to peep it, dont be sorry either, im looking for any feedback i can get, im not expecting compliments, just some criticism i can learn from.