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Old 08-30-2003, 07:47 AM   #1 (permalink)
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twistedlyricist takes it up the butt!
I'd say rate this, but you probably tell me it sux... rate it!

It's almost six in the mornin', I'm spittin' with out warnin'.
Head is lead it's just that damn dead,
hasn't bin fed, put to bed, sped up or slowed down,
no frown, just a lyricist clown,
funny, mentally challenged, has not yet avenged the onslaught of his mind, blind with stupidity, humidity of the kind.
Blinded by hate, anger and greed,
with one simple plan, to plant fields of weed.
To get high as a kite, n' toke all night, with unclear sight,
a clouded vision, with envisioned dreams,
streams of thoughts,
a metamorphisis of the mind, a revelation of the human kind.
A blazing silver streak, an untamed freak,
I toke, I try n' provoke more toke of the smoke.
This is my rhyme, if I play a little with the time.
A kinda grime that sticks to ya, ya can't be a prick, I'll prick ya back,
I'll poke ya with a stick, till blood spirts, runs down a wall,
a flowing water fall, running through a mall.
I can't stall, pause for a moment,
I must be a rabbit, keep up with this pacin' habbit,
a cheetah of sorts, like my buddy with the speed that he snorts,
A snortin bull ready ta blow, me being a buffalo I once interupted his flow,
smashed his head of a roof, he wanted ta give me a hoof,
but it don't really matter,
still I don't scatter, I don't tatter or tear,
I'm a comit blastin' my way outta hear, not one single fear, a pain that could sear,
hot as the sun, I sit here deliverin' a pun,
this shit's not done I'm aimin' stun, to shock and amaze and blast people into the canibus haze!
The best damn dayz their is!
For shizzle my nizzle!

Peace!
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This be my signature like this ligature mark on my neck/
Fuck, I should've listened when they said hit the deck, what a wreck/
Fuck it, I 'll just laugh and scoff at the results of how many I off/

I am the sparks of the cold, I'm killin' the NARC's who've been told/
Should have broke into the mold, now I'll just cuss, curse, n' scold/
Peace Yo!
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Old 08-30-2003, 11:12 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Krys takes it up the butt!
You need a focus here/ topic

not really relatin to it

get a topic...some better vocab..meta's...multies..that type of thing

keep practicin 6.5
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So I got the WHOLE rap world on my shoulder they tryin to see
further than I am..O
And I have been tryin to be patient with they preoccupation
with David and Goliath..V
But sooner or later that patience gonna run its course
and Im forced to be a tyrant..A
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Old 09-03-2003, 04:57 AM   #3 (permalink)
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thats me^...hit me up if you have any questions

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Old 09-03-2003, 10:54 PM   #4 (permalink)
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Old 09-03-2003, 11:56 PM   #5 (permalink)
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Nice siggy..wheres mine?..lol
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Old 09-05-2003, 02:10 AM   #6 (permalink)
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twistedlyricist takes it up the butt!
Believe me man! If I could email ya a joint I would!
Peace Man!
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This be my signature like this ligature mark on my neck/
Fuck, I should've listened when they said hit the deck, what a wreck/
Fuck it, I 'll just laugh and scoff at the results of how many I off/

I am the sparks of the cold, I'm killin' the NARC's who've been told/
Should have broke into the mold, now I'll just cuss, curse, n' scold/
Peace Yo!
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Old 09-06-2003, 02:45 AM   #7 (permalink)
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Old 09-22-2003, 05:17 PM   #8 (permalink)
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Malogn takes it up the butt!
yo you really need to try and stay on one thing
you changed the subject so many times its not funny
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