Lilburna vs. Deffy_5

[Lilburna]

aight...

10-14 lines
3-0 KO
5 votes

reply to check in... verse due in 24 hours

[Deffy_5]

hi....ok

[Lilburna]

the gift of battlin you is like gettin tha pleasure of sex
in less than a MINUTE this MAN is murdered ~ What's next?
types with his hands, but still can't get in contact
look at his last post ~ he's on the bottom, in fact
he suckin me off ~ so i squirt it on his face
I ~ DON'T ~ NEED a homosexual case
but he's an exception ~ so VERY special educated
thinking that he won this but was really eradicated
I'm expecting you knew that I was callin you dumb
but ya too "Deff" to hear truth poundin on yo drum (ear drum)
you're off tempo ~ birth incidental with no potential
ya fake rap verses and come dry like menthol (alchohol)
nothing good is to come of you ~ why live?
you got nobody and yo girl's about to have my kid
sorry to diss you ~ here's somethin to put you in check
DON't step in my way ~ I'll break ya muthafuccin neck

[Lilburna]

waitin for u... bruh

[Lilburna]

u a no show???

[Deffy_5]

i haven't been home i'll drop later

[Lilburna]

ok then

[Deffy_5]

yawns

why do i do this?

^i ask that question daily..look at dude, he anus
i guess i just like the joy of making a newbie famous
i would talk about all ya grammatical errors and typos
but i wanna leave u with the impression you're the bearer of tight flows
this verse is keyed there's really no point in trying
i mean you're facin Def..dog there's really no point in trying
^heh i ended the same way twice..i'm not acceptin ya hand to me
cause u stuff more burrito's in ya mouth than a mexican family
the site went down a notch..soon ya rhyme crept in
and my verse took a matter of minutes..like yo conception


blah 3 minutes verse

[Lilburna]

ahhh... finally

[Lilburna]

time for some votes, ya'll!!!!

[krysto]

iuno..lil burna obviously put more effort in this

vote-lilburna

better lines

[Deffy_5]

^^u should be hung by an umbillical cord

1-0

[lethal lyricist]

lilburna did put more effort in this. But that's what makes it all the more sad that he got rocked. Def ain't even try an he took this

1

[lethal lyricist]

and for ya'll who ain't too quick..

vote-def

[Lilburna]

aight 1-1... more votes!!!

[Boxer]

Okay let me break this shit down.....

Lilburna-dude ur shit had no punches that hit was really basic

Deffy-Ur shit was aight it was more complex and had a few decent punches...didnt really need to come hard seemed like u didnt try...but u still won in my book....

Vote-Def

If u got beef with my vote battle me mother fucker

[Lilburna]

i do got beef wit it... looks liek u need 2 look @ quality more than a 3 minute quickie, and I'd be waistin my tiem battlin yo sorry-azz

[Boxer]

Originally Posted by Lilburna

i do got beef wit it... looks liek u need 2 look @ quality more than a 3 minute quickie, and I'd be waistin my tiem battlin yo sorry-azz

hold up son let me break ur shit down u lil btich-


the gift of battlin you is like gettin tha pleasure of sex
in less than a MINUTE this MAN is murdered ~ What's next?

(force rhyme+played punch=wasted line)

types with his hands, but still can't get in contact
look at his last post ~ he's on the bottom, in fact

(filler didnt make sence should even be in here)

he suckin me off ~ so i squirt it on his face
I ~ DON'T ~ NEED a homosexual case

(okay now what are u trying to do other than call him gay in tha
most lame way possable)

but he's an exception ~ so VERY special educated
thinking that he won this but was really eradicated

(ur shit dont make sence u jump around way to much)

I'm expecting you knew that I was callin you dumb
but ya too "Deff" to hear truth poundin on yo drum (ear drum)

(now here we go somthing worth reading decent punch kinda
conected nice atempt at a personal)

you're off tempo ~ birth incidental with no potential
ya fake rap verses and come dry like menthol (alchohol)

(stupid line ur ned to keep a consistant subject dont jus pick random ones)

nothing good is to come of you ~ why live?
you got nobody and yo girl's about to have my kid

(um that was a punch.....very weak first time u have stait on ur topic)

sorry to diss you ~ here's somethin to put you in check
DON't step in my way ~ I'll break ya muthafuccin neck

(horrable closer.....should have been best line but probably was one of tha worst)

Tips for future: Stay on topic make sence dont force multi's and dont force rhymes and punch ur whole verse was jus forced

There u go punk ass bitch...if u dont agree with what i said battle me....i knwo for a fact u cant beat me

[MC Justice]

lmmfao..

def smashed on this kid with a 3 line verse? damn, you should log off and kill urself..

btw...vote-def

[Lilburna]

eradicated means "torn from the roots"... yo ass is stupid... go read some books