53. Urizen VS 54. Wrongmakeswrite

TeKneeK · 07-27-2003, 12:25 AM

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07-28-2003, 07:35 AM

Ima edit my votes here

vote 1
vote 2
vote 3
vote 4
vote 5
vote 6

wrongmakeswrite · 07-28-2003, 05:32 PM

pick your own.. & it's wrongmakeswrite.. no capital..

wrongmakeswrite · 07-28-2003, 06:36 PM

8. Write a SERIOUS but very sexy, sensuous story of you and your girl making love.

now it wasnt ••••ed nicely - it wasnt special recipe..
it was just pure - purely showed the best'a me..

it was casual beginnings, an aquaintance made..
it was just LIKE AT FIRST SIGHT- but a date was made..
took her to the park, walked & sipped lemonade..
talked about life, the snow, & the ocean's waves..
the sun was bathed in the smiles & the games we played..
she impressed me - i impressed her & we was both clean shaved..
never rant nor rave, this chick was a babe..
from her face to her smile to the muscles in her legs..
she was perfection to the strong hearted..
a projection of an angel harp-ed - it was great & love was started..
reguardless of popular belief, we were made to be..
i was made to see, this girl - like a soulmate to me..
hold if i was late, never got upset..
never said any lines of anger, nothing to regret..
but yet, it wasnt planned there was no betty crocker..
now i'm imagin wrinkles & pastures, talkin in matching rockers..
of course there's cock blockers - checkin the skins..
but i knew, she knew - they were just like most men..
always walked - never sped up to run..
just took a dash of hope, a sprinkle of fun..
set it on high, 2-3 months it was done..
i would pay for the grub - but she'd payback with a hug..
forget sexual acts - we went to the kitchen to make love..

.. i went 25

07-30-2003, 02:28 PM

9. A sudden stinging thrust lunges your right ribcage... as you gasp and gaze at your friends at a party... and you clutch your right side.... discovering you been shot... and as you began to fall ... just before you hit the floor... your entire life flashes before your eyes... and you see your friends running for you as you begin to fall....... what did you flashback to before you hit the ground... dead

let me just walk away I dont need beef today//
I came to the party to dance chill and play//
why the hell this dude actin all rude//
didnt know it was his chick but I aint gun let him ruin my mood//
..............................bang. ...............................
shit a gunshot I aint waiting for the body to drop//
the fear in my body must be the reason why my right side feel so hot//
I still gotta move why aint my legs running//
as I look down I see my body is gussing//
blood...its soaking my shirt//
Im about to die but why doesnt it hurt//
it must be the shock that paralyzed my body//
as I lose my eye sight I see everybody running for me//
as I grab my wound everything goes black//
certain memorys enter my mind as Im about to fall to my back//
why did I have to scream at my mother//
why wasnt I never nice to my little brother//
always had to say no and get out my room//
I hope that isnt how he remembers me as I now travell to the moon//
from all the females I used and abused//
to all those who wanted to love me but I refused//
I now leave this earth not knowing what love was about//
no this cant be but I dont have enough air in my body for me to shout//
as I feel my body giving it up//
a light emerges from nowhere and lifts me up//
as I open the door in front of me I see nothing but flames//
and I hear a thousand screams scream a thousand names//
as the door locks a voice welcoms me home//
a smile on my face cus eventho I am where I am I know now I will never be alone

wrongmakeswrite · 07-30-2003, 03:24 PM

i liked your last bar.. nice ender.

07-30-2003, 03:44 PM

thnx I like the way you playd with
your words

wrongmakeswrite · 07-30-2003, 06:48 PM

1. http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusic-audio-league/610280-7-insanity-9-6-vs-8-dmetrious-5-0-a.html#post6892826
2. http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusics-storytelling-league/610258-57-dr-cause-vs-58-dj-tactics-vs-59-marc-antony.html#post6909129
3. http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusic-audio-league/610283-1-contenders-match-3-black-jesus-14-2-vs-4-insolence-19-8-a.html#post6909203
4. http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusic-audio-league/610284-title-match-1-insanevillian-27-5-vs-2-cigma-20-5-a-post6909271.html
5. http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusic-audio-league/610277-13-stony-8-4-vs-14-tha-talent-21-9-a.html#post6909319
6. http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusic-audio-league/610276-15-richard-corey-5-0-vs-16-life-support-6-0-a.html#post6909504

Ruthless Mic · 07-30-2003, 07:40 PM

Vote = Urizen

He had the better verse outta the 2. His imagery wa slusted very specific besides the other cat's piece imagery was not found which lost my interest, therefore my vote goes to urizen.

wrongmakeswrite · 07-31-2003, 02:51 AM

i didnt know imagery was all that mattered?

TeKneeK · 07-31-2003, 04:19 PM

correct me if im wrong.. but URIZEN --- arent u late posting ur verse?

TeKneeK · 07-31-2003, 04:20 PM

neva mind ur ok.

wrongmakeswrite · 07-31-2003, 05:42 PM

just check the time zone of the board.. or atleast the board where i am is on central time.. meaning he posted at 12:28 which is 28 minutes late.. whatever you wanna do.

07-31-2003, 06:16 PM

^^ dont do that son

wrongmakeswrite · 08-01-2003, 11:29 AM

if rules are rules.. then you gotta follow em..
.. i'm leavin it up to them though - cause i dont care

08-01-2003, 01:26 PM

I was on time
if u dont care than dont
let him doubt that

djtactics · 08-02-2003, 12:07 PM

wrongmakeswrite: Your approach on this topic was unique, though I didn't really get it until the ending! FLow was on for the most part... you could have made your piece a little longer and more involved, but either way it wasn't bad.

Urizen: Your piece was pretty good too... some of the lines in there are quality, especially the last one... I think that you could have made yours a little longer too, and that it would have been better. Your flow was not as good as wmw's, and your story wasn't as involved IMO...

...so my vote goes to wrongmakeswrite

TeKneeK · 08-02-2003, 02:19 PM

tie both win.

07-27-2003, 12:25 AM	#1 (permalink)
TeKneeK The Heart & Soul of RMC Join Date: May 1999 Location: L.A. Californ: America's Best Posts: 26,155	53. Urizen VS 54. Wrongmakeswrite VERSES DUE Wednesday 10:00pm PACIFIC/1:00am EST VOTES DUE Saturday 10:00am PACIFIC/1:00pm EST COLLECT YOUR TOPIC OF CHOICE HERE: The RSTL Topics! LINE LIMIT: 4 lines - NO SHOWS 16 lines - MINIMAL 60 lines - MAXIMAL VOTING: No crew votes No payback votes No 2nd Chance Votes YOU MUST MUST MUST -- POST YOUR URL'S OF ALL THE BATTLES YOU VOTED ON HERE IN YOUR OWN THREAD.. VOTE ON 6 BATTLES!!!!! FAILURE TO DO SO RESULTS IN 3 VOTE SUBTRACTION!!! if you win by no-show u are encouraged to vote still in other matches!!!!! GO FOR IT!!!

07-28-2003, 07:35 AM	#2 (permalink)
Urizen Guest Posts: n/a	Ima edit my votes here vote 1 vote 2 vote 3 vote 4 vote 5 vote 6 Last edited by Urizen; 07-31-2003 at 07:16 PM.

07-28-2003, 05:32 PM	#3 (permalink)
wrongmakeswrite the streak wont end. Join Date: Jul 2003 Posts: 123	pick your own.. & it's wrongmakeswrite.. no capital.. __________________ two wrongs make a write..

07-28-2003, 06:36 PM	#4 (permalink)
wrongmakeswrite the streak wont end. Join Date: Jul 2003 Posts: 123	8. Write a SERIOUS but very sexy, sensuous story of you and your girl making love. now it wasnt ••••ed nicely - it wasnt special recipe.. it was just pure - purely showed the best'a me.. it was casual beginnings, an aquaintance made.. it was just LIKE AT FIRST SIGHT- but a date was made.. took her to the park, walked & sipped lemonade.. talked about life, the snow, & the ocean's waves.. the sun was bathed in the smiles & the games we played.. she impressed me - i impressed her & we was both clean shaved.. never rant nor rave, this chick was a babe.. from her face to her smile to the muscles in her legs.. she was perfection to the strong hearted.. a projection of an angel harp-ed - it was great & love was started.. reguardless of popular belief, we were made to be.. i was made to see, this girl - like a soulmate to me.. hold if i was late, never got upset.. never said any lines of anger, nothing to regret.. but yet, it wasnt planned there was no betty crocker.. now i'm imagin wrinkles & pastures, talkin in matching rockers.. of course there's cock blockers - checkin the skins.. but i knew, she knew - they were just like most men.. always walked - never sped up to run.. just took a dash of hope, a sprinkle of fun.. set it on high, 2-3 months it was done.. i would pay for the grub - but she'd payback with a hug.. forget sexual acts - we went to the kitchen to make love.. .. i went 25 __________________ two wrongs make a write..

07-30-2003, 03:24 PM	#6 (permalink)
wrongmakeswrite the streak wont end. Join Date: Jul 2003 Posts: 123	i liked your last bar.. nice ender. __________________ two wrongs make a write..

07-30-2003, 02:28 PM	#5 (permalink)
Urizen Guest Posts: n/a	9. A sudden stinging thrust lunges your right ribcage... as you gasp and gaze at your friends at a party... and you clutch your right side.... discovering you been shot... and as you began to fall ... just before you hit the floor... your entire life flashes before your eyes... and you see your friends running for you as you begin to fall....... what did you flashback to before you hit the ground... dead let me just walk away I dont need beef today// I came to the party to dance chill and play// why the hell this dude actin all rude// didnt know it was his chick but I aint gun let him ruin my mood// ..............................bang. ............................... shit a gunshot I aint waiting for the body to drop// the fear in my body must be the reason why my right side feel so hot// I still gotta move why aint my legs running// as I look down I see my body is gussing// blood...its soaking my shirt// Im about to die but why doesnt it hurt// it must be the shock that paralyzed my body// as I lose my eye sight I see everybody running for me// as I grab my wound everything goes black// certain memorys enter my mind as Im about to fall to my back// why did I have to scream at my mother// why wasnt I never nice to my little brother// always had to say no and get out my room// I hope that isnt how he remembers me as I now travell to the moon// from all the females I used and abused// to all those who wanted to love me but I refused// I now leave this earth not knowing what love was about// no this cant be but I dont have enough air in my body for me to shout// as I feel my body giving it up// a light emerges from nowhere and lifts me up// as I open the door in front of me I see nothing but flames// and I hear a thousand screams scream a thousand names// as the door locks a voice welcoms me home// a smile on my face cus eventho I am where I am I know now I will never be alone

07-30-2003, 03:44 PM	#7 (permalink)
Urizen Guest Posts: n/a	thnx I like the way you playd with your words

07-30-2003, 06:48 PM	#8 (permalink)
wrongmakeswrite the streak wont end. Join Date: Jul 2003 Posts: 123	1. http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusic-audio-league/610280-7-insanity-9-6-vs-8-dmetrious-5-0-a.html#post6892826 2. http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusics-storytelling-league/610258-57-dr-cause-vs-58-dj-tactics-vs-59-marc-antony.html#post6909129 3. http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusic-audio-league/610283-1-contenders-match-3-black-jesus-14-2-vs-4-insolence-19-8-a.html#post6909203 4. http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusic-audio-league/610284-title-match-1-insanevillian-27-5-vs-2-cigma-20-5-a-post6909271.html 5. http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusic-audio-league/610277-13-stony-8-4-vs-14-tha-talent-21-9-a.html#post6909319 6. http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusic-audio-league/610276-15-richard-corey-5-0-vs-16-life-support-6-0-a.html#post6909504 __________________ two wrongs make a write.. Last edited by wrongmakeswrite; 08-01-2003 at 12:30 PM.

07-30-2003, 07:40 PM	#9 (permalink)
Ruthless Mic Registered User Join Date: Jul 2003 Posts: 84	Vote = Urizen He had the better verse outta the 2. His imagery wa slusted very specific besides the other cat's piece imagery was not found which lost my interest, therefore my vote goes to urizen.

07-31-2003, 02:51 AM	#10 (permalink)
wrongmakeswrite the streak wont end. Join Date: Jul 2003 Posts: 123	i didnt know imagery was all that mattered? __________________ two wrongs make a write..

07-31-2003, 04:19 PM	#11 (permalink)
TeKneeK The Heart & Soul of RMC Join Date: May 1999 Location: L.A. Californ: America's Best Posts: 26,155	correct me if im wrong.. but URIZEN --- arent u late posting ur verse?

07-31-2003, 04:20 PM	#12 (permalink)
TeKneeK The Heart & Soul of RMC Join Date: May 1999 Location: L.A. Californ: America's Best Posts: 26,155	neva mind ur ok. __________________ .......................

07-31-2003, 05:42 PM	#13 (permalink)
wrongmakeswrite the streak wont end. Join Date: Jul 2003 Posts: 123	just check the time zone of the board.. or atleast the board where i am is on central time.. meaning he posted at 12:28 which is 28 minutes late.. whatever you wanna do. __________________ two wrongs make a write..

07-31-2003, 06:16 PM	#14 (permalink)
Urizen Guest Posts: n/a	^^ dont do that son

08-01-2003, 11:29 AM	#15 (permalink)
wrongmakeswrite the streak wont end. Join Date: Jul 2003 Posts: 123	if rules are rules.. then you gotta follow em.. .. i'm leavin it up to them though - cause i dont care __________________ two wrongs make a write..

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08-01-2003, 01:26 PM	#16 (permalink)
Urizen Guest Posts: n/a	I was on time if u dont care than dont let him doubt that

08-02-2003, 12:07 PM	#17 (permalink)
djtactics Registered User Join Date: Feb 2003 Posts: 62	wrongmakeswrite: Your approach on this topic was unique, though I didn't really get it until the ending! FLow was on for the most part... you could have made your piece a little longer and more involved, but either way it wasn't bad. Urizen: Your piece was pretty good too... some of the lines in there are quality, especially the last one... I think that you could have made yours a little longer too, and that it would have been better. Your flow was not as good as wmw's, and your story wasn't as involved IMO... ...so my vote goes to wrongmakeswrite

08-02-2003, 02:19 PM	#18 (permalink)
TeKneeK The Heart & Soul of RMC Join Date: May 1999 Location: L.A. Californ: America's Best Posts: 26,155	tie both win. __________________ .......................

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