"Broken Dreams" - Spoken Word Track

Everglaze · 07-11-2003, 09:43 AM

"Broken Dreams"

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/everglazemusic.htm

BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum · 07-12-2003, 01:15 AM

I like the loop. Very clear voice. Flows well. I'm really diggin' this. I'm going to have to hear it a lot more times to get it.

BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum · 07-12-2003, 01:17 AM

But your page sucks ass. VERY TALENTED POET, but you suck as a webmaster...

Hit me up when that poetry album was done. I liek the two on your soundclick page, so I'll cop one.

tk2oo3 · 07-12-2003, 01:27 AM

ok um.. your commin wit some half assed shit you aint doin soulfull poetry nor rappin.. it jus sounds bad.. DONT FLOW WIT THE BEAT.. your fuckin racin over it.. slow down & do it soulfully dont even try to land on snares or some shit.. find a different beat thats laid back or somethin if you cant jus go witout flowin on it.. if that was rap id say you oversqueeze your words.. bad whichever direction you go..
sorry but i jus had to say this shit..

Everglaze · 07-12-2003, 11:34 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by tk2oo3

ok um.. your commin wit some half assed shit you aint doin soulfull poetry nor rappin.. it jus sounds bad.. DONT FLOW WIT THE BEAT.. your fuckin racin over it.. slow down & do it soulfully dont even try to land on snares or some shit.. find a different beat thats laid back or somethin if you cant jus go witout flowin on it.. if that was rap id say you oversqueeze your words.. bad whichever direction you go..
sorry but i jus had to say this shit..

Thanks for your opinion, to each their own.

And I wasn't rapping and yes you're right...I did half ass.

tk2oo3 · 07-12-2003, 12:27 PM

i know i sounded harsh yesterday but um try taking a second for a breath every now & then & read wit emotion & variate how you say the words etc.. have some pauses.. thatll get your poetry to where it needs to be.. i think your on the right track tho.. jus seriously racin over rap beats aint good.. you sound like twista attemptin poetry

07-11-2003, 09:43 AM	#1 (permalink)
Everglaze Hip Hop Enthusiast Join Date: May 2001 Location: Canada Posts: 2,698	"Broken Dreams" - Spoken Word Track "Broken Dreams" http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/everglazemusic.htm __________________ [[Break the Norm]] Azn Raps

07-12-2003, 01:15 AM	#2 (permalink)
BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview Join Date: Oct 1999 Location: San Fran to the Bahamas back to Cali in L.A. Posts: 17,465	I like the loop. Very clear voice. Flows well. I'm really diggin' this. I'm going to have to hear it a lot more times to get it. __________________ http://www.soundclick.com/blacksoultan

07-12-2003, 01:17 AM	#3 (permalink)
BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview Join Date: Oct 1999 Location: San Fran to the Bahamas back to Cali in L.A. Posts: 17,465	But your page sucks ass. VERY TALENTED POET, but you suck as a webmaster... Hit me up when that poetry album was done. I liek the two on your soundclick page, so I'll cop one. __________________ http://www.soundclick.com/blacksoultan Last edited by BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum; 07-12-2003 at 01:20 AM.

07-12-2003, 01:27 AM	#4 (permalink)
tk2oo3 Registered User Join Date: Jun 2003 Posts: 2,082	ok um.. your commin wit some half assed shit you aint doin soulfull poetry nor rappin.. it jus sounds bad.. DONT FLOW WIT THE BEAT.. your fuckin racin over it.. slow down & do it soulfully dont even try to land on snares or some shit.. find a different beat thats laid back or somethin if you cant jus go witout flowin on it.. if that was rap id say you oversqueeze your words.. bad whichever direction you go.. sorry but i jus had to say this shit.. __________________ "Theres ten rules to the game, but ill share wit you two Know, niggaz goin hate you for whatever you do Now rule one, get yo cash on, M O B Thats, money over bitches, cuz they breed envy Now rule two is a hard one, watch fo phonies Keep yo enemies close nigga, watch yo homies" "Weak mothafuckaz dont deserve to breathe How many niggaz down to die for me"

07-12-2003, 12:27 PM	#6 (permalink)
tk2oo3 Registered User Join Date: Jun 2003 Posts: 2,082	i know i sounded harsh yesterday but um try taking a second for a breath every now & then & read wit emotion & variate how you say the words etc.. have some pauses.. thatll get your poetry to where it needs to be.. i think your on the right track tho.. jus seriously racin over rap beats aint good.. you sound like twista attemptin poetry __________________ "Theres ten rules to the game, but ill share wit you two Know, niggaz goin hate you for whatever you do Now rule one, get yo cash on, M O B Thats, money over bitches, cuz they breed envy Now rule two is a hard one, watch fo phonies Keep yo enemies close nigga, watch yo homies" "Weak mothafuckaz dont deserve to breathe How many niggaz down to die for me"

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