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MaliciousChic · 06-12-2003, 07:03 AM

The prodominent female, came here to raise hell, the standard bar tryna be ova the top, fa ²²²²²z who think they hot. Tha gurl here is neva afraid, to send a subliminal phrase, and see the reaction on ur face. I came up and still rising, got ²²²²²z from every label talkin bout sign this, I'm too nice and I'ma stay the nicest, here's the mic back, MaliciousChic here where's my contest?!, I confess, must not be enough ²²²²²z w/ balls to step up and get knocked down and turned into a stupid ass mess. The colors I spray, on ya white tee shirt look like red spray paint, I came correct u came faceless, cross my path wrong u can be legless. I don't fuck w/ pplz children, I not a babysitter I'm ruthless, the name says its all I take ova property or anything cause i be Malicious, don't fuck w/ this. [IMG][choc][/IMG]

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The quotes, I note, can be compared to me like bible scriptures. Fuck w/ me and ur liable to get hurt, emotionally and mentally.

RIPallthat · 06-12-2003, 08:43 AM

First off all no beef....

I rated it like this

wordplay=needs improvement
punches=not to bad
creativity=????
metas=?????
personals=ok
flow=great

MaliciousChic · 06-12-2003, 01:13 PM

basically, I can only respect ur opinion............That was a intro wasn't meant to be complex, but uh if u wanna see skill den u can just let me know.............or not. Holla or not

Resilient. · 06-12-2003, 03:23 PM

Aight girl, you need alot of work. First off, try to separate your bars using "//" or something close, and hit enter after each line, you know? Now, that "rating" up there, don't believe suttin' unless it has an explanation, like I'ma do for you now.

Work on everything.

I knew where your bars ended and started, so it was easy to figure out you have no flow at all. To get a good flow, try to even up your syllables for each line. Approximately 13-17 syllables.

Also, try to get some better multies in your verse. Multies are pretty easy, yet hard to make sense with them. This is when you use a number of rhyming words in your 2 lines. Here's an example: Eminem "Patiently Waiting"
Don't let me lose you, I'm not tryna confuse you
When I let loose wit this uzi and just shoot through your Isuzu
You get the messege? Am I gettin through to you?
You know what's comin, you motherfuckers don't even know, do you?
By the way, Eminem is probably the best example for multies.

Try and add Metaphors and Similes in yoru verse too to ••••e it up.

So yea, you need some work.

Pz

krisp · 06-12-2003, 03:35 PM

um yeah listen to illweeman...hes 110% rite...keep rhyming .also listen to and read lyrics...sometimes it helps when u see how other people do it...good luck..

MaliciousChic · 06-12-2003, 05:13 PM

thanx ill, aleast u ain't bein no dickhead ur being helpful......so once again thanx. I've been t this for about a month or 2, but i learn fast so its no big thang. I have Eminem's CD's and 50 just in case, so I know what ur talkin bout. Thanx and I'ma post again if u don't mind, check back w/ me to see if I've improved. 1

Resilient. · 06-12-2003, 07:42 PM

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Originally posted by MaliciousChic
thanx ill, aleast u ain't bein no dickhead ur being helpful......so once again thanx. I've been t this for about a month or 2, but i learn fast so its no big thang. I have Eminem's CD's and 50 just in case, so I know what ur talkin bout. Thanx and I'ma post again if u don't mind, check back w/ me to see if I've improved. 1

No dizzle shawty. hit me on AIM if ya got any questions . . . I usually mentor people, but I gave that up. I'll be willing to give you tips tho no doubt.

06-12-2003, 03:23 PM	#4 (permalink)
Resilient. ILLWEEMAN Join Date: Sep 2001 Location: En-Why Sucka Posts: 23,774	Aight girl, you need alot of work. First off, try to separate your bars using "//" or something close, and hit enter after each line, you know? Now, that "rating" up there, don't believe suttin' unless it has an explanation, like I'ma do for you now. Work on everything. I knew where your bars ended and started, so it was easy to figure out you have no flow at all. To get a good flow, try to even up your syllables for each line. Approximately 13-17 syllables. Also, try to get some better multies in your verse. Multies are pretty easy, yet hard to make sense with them. This is when you use a number of rhyming words in your 2 lines. Here's an example: Eminem "Patiently Waiting" Don't let me lose you, I'm not tryna confuse you When I let loose wit this uzi and just shoot through your Isuzu You get the messege? Am I gettin through to you? You know what's comin, you motherfuckers don't even know, do you? By the way, Eminem is probably the best example for multies. Try and add Metaphors and Similes in yoru verse too to ••••e it up. So yea, you need some work. Pz __________________ I'M JUST A H O O L I G A N OF CYBER RAP (What The Shit is a Textmaster?) ------------------------- iLLWeeZGoD Baby! My RBL Battle Vs. Linesman

06-12-2003, 03:35 PM	#5 (permalink)
krisp you knowwwwwww Join Date: Jun 2003 Posts: 5,018	um yeah listen to illweeman...hes 110% rite...keep rhyming .also listen to and read lyrics...sometimes it helps when u see how other people do it...good luck.. __________________ THE RM POLICE: Locking up homo Posters since 2007. Currently in homo posting jail: On homo posting probation:

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06-12-2003, 08:43 AM	#2 (permalink)
RIPallthat The Licensed Assasin Join Date: May 2003 Location: DC Posts: 136	First off all no beef.... I rated it like this wordplay=needs improvement punches=not to bad creativity=???? metas=????? personals=ok flow=great

06-12-2003, 01:13 PM	#3 (permalink)
MaliciousChic Registered User Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: philly ya heard Posts: 8	basically, I can only respect ur opinion............That was a intro wasn't meant to be complex, but uh if u wanna see skill den u can just let me know.............or not. Holla or not

06-12-2003, 05:13 PM	#6 (permalink)
MaliciousChic Registered User Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: philly ya heard Posts: 8	thanx ill, aleast u ain't bein no dickhead ur being helpful......so once again thanx. I've been t this for about a month or 2, but i learn fast so its no big thang. I have Eminem's CD's and 50 just in case, so I know what ur talkin bout. Thanx and I'ma post again if u don't mind, check back w/ me to see if I've improved. 1

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