ok children, this is how to form a punchline/name/verse

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Old 06-10-2003, 11:39 AM   #1 (permalink)
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ok children, this is how to form a punchline/name/verse

first off, this works. i never do any of this though cause i stopped caring about textceeing a long time ago. trust though, if i still did everything im about to post, i'd be legendary.



first you need an idea. lets say youre next victim is called
BaR-FLoWa


totally retarded name. this is what you need to play off first. judgeing by his name, you know hes a newbie and will suck. so what you gotta o is throw his integrity on the floor and make him wanna cry

youre corny as shit dog, its pretty clear
that the last bar with funny lines was called cheers


the bar wordplay comes from his name.

tap a multi into your punch.

im seein here its pretty clear
that a bar aint have funny lines since they canceled cheers

or

you got slapped out ya sandles n techniques dismanteled
plus no bar been funny since cheers had got canceled

see what you got here is different. the setup and punch aint got shit to do with eachother, different from the other two exaples. but you wanna makem relate, it'll make the line that much more painful for your victim.

NEVER SACRIFICE CONTENT FOR FLOW

EVER

i dont care wtf you hear kids, flow aint better than a harsh punch.

example.

you know i show the hardest flow
no need to blow, ya moms a hoe!

^^ fuck that. id rather have this

you know that im better, im flamin this prick
he couldnt bust shots if they came out his dick

also, stay up to date on whats played out and whats fresh. you dont want a played out line in your verse. you CAN though work with it to make a played concept fresh.

raisin the stakes

thats a badly played concept, but you can make it cool

played version

i got mad cash too so youre not a reason to care
cause im raisin the stakes like i been trainin with buffy the slayer

fresh version
youre not up to par, nothing for me to reap in this
you aint raisin stakes if it were an exotic meat dish

raisin-steaks..rasing stakes

another thing, a played line is something everyones tired of seeing used in the same way. sumlines and defeat lines arent really a fucking sin kids, just depends how you use them.

to make a verse, you wanna do all the lines youre goin with, and throwem togather. then what you do is you sort them by wich is better than wich. this is done for consistancy. you dont want your best lines at the start and the less ones at the end, cause the voter gets bored. vice versa, the read remembers how bored he/she was at the start, so you mixem n make the reader go up n down.

a name

use sumtin normal, for christ sake.

message
check
post
reply

these are normal names, dont use stupid cheesy shit like

ill flow rocka
bar-flowa
the mC dope

no. please dont, youll be shunned before droppin the first verse.

thats pretty much everything there is to it. if you have a question, drop it under this and ill get to you.
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thx for nothin...lol

but way to throw it down....props

i was hopin to learn more tho..must be keepin the shiney weapons out of veiw for ya own use ehh?..lol..j/p
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Old 06-15-2003, 04:09 PM   #5 (permalink)
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nice, i was gunna put this up a while ago after the board got wiped but i lost it...

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I agree except for one little thing. Don't compromise the flow either. You're on the net. You have way to damn long to formulate your verse. If you can't make the line ill AND maintain a good flow it was still weak.
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Old 07-11-2003, 03:30 PM   #17 (permalink)
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Quote:
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tap a multi into your punch.

im seein here its pretty clear
that a bar aint have funny lines since they canceled cheers

or

you got slapped out ya sandles n techniques dismanteled
plus no bar been funny since cheers had got canceled
I don't see the multi.

Maybe if you said...

I'm seein shit clearly, like I was handling rears
That a bar ain't had funny lines, since the canceling of cheers
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