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Old 06-02-2003, 02:33 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Rate My Lyrix...

rate my lyrix yall...thanx
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It starts as a love for the rhymes/
Start listenin to dope cats, write up your own lines/
To where you're comfortable flowin straight from the mind/
And take your talent to new territory, where all the comp be/
See if you can wreck up cats at the corner round 3rd Street/
Chokin up cats wth words my membrane creates/
I spit one bar, throw up rhymes ajar, and be the center of hate/
Most can relate, to how rap turns shit upside down/
Fuckin with the highest of highs to the lowest of lows in sound/
Diggin tracks deep through the underground/
Have muthafuckers sayin they aint down/
Where they judge your looks before you spit one syllable/
And afterwards nobody be sayin you're not capable/
Of rippin up this rap shit, cuz you got flows and hot shit/
A label's at your door with a contract and a pen to write with/
Sign on the dotted line just cuz you gotta feed the fam/
Sellin your life and soul, but this may be the one and only chance/
To dance that dance and fabricate music/
Sell your lyrics and shit, but come to find out people abuse it/
Fuckin up shit, they distort your whole identity/
Instead of tellin it how it is, you're spittin shit how it should be/
Be marketed commercially, fuck up your whole mentality/
Realize you're in this game to sell units, not use your words/
To send a message out there that only you had heard/
Now its over, your whole passion is gone/
Just cuz some producers came and strung you along/
Played you out for a fool, lost your whole purpose in song/
Now you're stuck thinkin bout where the fuck you went wrong
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Old 06-06-2003, 08:55 PM   #2 (permalink)
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6.5/10

There are many elements you could work on
multies
vocab
creativity
complexity
metaphors

good work keep practicing
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again, thanks krysto...better get to work on those elements...
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again, thanks krysto...better get to work on those elements...
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Just work on flow..and word usage....
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