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[Kano]

I dont write much, this took about 11 min. Let me know if its good or not


Im a straight ryda
yall n!ggas be walkin
I aint gotta say much
I let my style do the talkin

Im thi king of this shit
yall can call me the ace
talk shit to me and your sure to loose some face

This kid is more than great
im a level of spectacular
what other 15 year old kid got girls sucking em up like dracula

forget driven a Accura
im goin straight to the mercades
ride up on yo set just to steal yo lady

what you expect, I am a pimp
when I done with yo girl shes gonna be walkin with more than a limp

But she'll be lucky to be able to walk at all
cuz most girls that leave my room cant walk, they gotta crawl

Im the master of yall like a slave owner on a plantation
better than 90% of the rappers out there and im still rockin playstation

The best in this town
better yet the state
dont call me Kano no mo
call me kano the great

just 15 and got little kids mockin me
but what do you expect from the 904 prodigy

So much talent, so much ability
when im in a battle even my enemy be feelin me

None of yall can touch me
dont pursue it
Step to me and be the first to get persicuted

Its just the way I match words
the way i put em together
I dare to find anyone in the southeast that can flo better

you can look but you aint gonna find no one that can top this
stop frontin like you hot cuz son you not this

Dont try to stop this, im unstopable
But what you expect
check my win/lose record to see whos the best

Different from the rest
im in a whole nother division
when Joan of Ark had her dream, she saw me in her vision





Please be honest, how was that?

[Kano]

bump

[Kano]

Come sombody please, i just wanna know how good that was and where do I need to improve.

[Da KGB]

ah what the hell why not. First off you need more sub topics or references to jazz up your lines a little bit because right now your rhyming is pretty basic. Find some of your favorite subjects and incorporate them in lines via (mets, similes, and etc).

Take your damn time with this ish if you're just starting out Look at whats around you and I'm not talking just the street ish either go beyond that what are you watching on tv now thats sort of thing. For example:


You remind me of a fake unemployed psychic who couldn't come true with true/with false predictions who couldn't get paid in order to preview//...me

I came up with that one from the psychic network believe it or not. But most of all just keep writing and you mind will work for you and don't get upset and mad when somebody gives you constuctive criticism just except thier advice and move on ya know.

alright Peace out yo I hope that help you a little bit because i haven't been on here in awhile.