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Old 07-23-2004, 11:21 AM   #15 (permalink)
Ibeechu Farensqure
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Ibeechu Farensqure takes it up the butt!
I agree with talent...the whole god thing was a twist and I never would've gotten it if you didn't explain it either. the last line was like..."is he callin himself god? is he speakin from the perspective of god?...etc.. anyways...it had me guessin. i just thought u coulda cleared that up a little. Really good piece though, good flow, I liked the political approach.

Break Point- this was okay, pretty straight foward story telling, you didn't really develop ur piece to the point of interest.

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