i know i sounded harsh yesterday but um try taking a second for a breath every now & then & read wit emotion & variate how you say the words etc.. have some pauses.. thatll get your poetry to where it needs to be.. i think your on the right track tho.. jus seriously racin over rap beats aint good.. you sound like twista attemptin poetry
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"Theres ten rules to the game, but ill share wit you two
Know, niggaz goin hate you for whatever you do
Now rule one, get yo cash on, M O B
Thats, money over bitches, cuz they breed envy
Now rule two is a hard one, watch fo phonies
Keep yo enemies close nigga, watch yo homies"
"Weak mothafuckaz dont deserve to breathe
How many niggaz down to die for me"