ok um.. your commin wit some half assed shit you aint doin soulfull poetry nor rappin.. it jus sounds bad.. DONT FLOW WIT THE BEAT.. your fuckin racin over it.. slow down & do it soulfully dont even try to land on snares or some shit.. find a different beat thats laid back or somethin if you cant jus go witout flowin on it.. if that was rap id say you oversqueeze your words.. bad whichever direction you go..
sorry but i jus had to say this shit..
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Know, niggaz goin hate you for whatever you do
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