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TonyRome313 · 06-27-2003, 01:57 AM

Ignore them. It was at least 1o times better than ANYTHING either of them ever posted.
Infact, if you'd recognize how to write that verse you'd most likely get props from alotta peeps on here.
It justs needs to be rewritten to a rhythm.

Just use this (if you catch the flow) and work from their to get your verses to hit that rhythm.

[Your re-edit for you to use and see why I formatted it the way I did. I only had to change a couple small things in wording so don't consider it a ghost write at all]:
Yo- Can you imagine the sheer pain, of nothing ta blanket you but the rain?//
It's an insane range from shame ta rage, he's the legal age ta carry a gauge//
Unleashed like rabid pits uncaged, he comes he goes- so rarely he stays//
In his emotional maze... - for days n' days, he just prays n' prays//
Ta god he'll die... a quick n' painless death, crystal meth//
Addictions caused frictions until conviction, drug addiction caused eviction//
what a position... should a saw a physician, or asked for help//
Too late... unlocked- cocked, he blew back is scalp//

06-27-2003, 01:57 AM	#7 (permalink)
TonyRome313 ROMEssiah Join Date: Feb 2003 Location: 313 Posts: 460	Ignore them. It was at least 1o times better than ANYTHING either of them ever posted. Infact, if you'd recognize how to write that verse you'd most likely get props from alotta peeps on here. It justs needs to be rewritten to a rhythm. Just use this (if you catch the flow) and work from their to get your verses to hit that rhythm. [Your re-edit for you to use and see why I formatted it the way I did. I only had to change a couple small things in wording so don't consider it a ghost write at all]: Yo- Can you imagine the sheer pain, of nothing ta blanket you but the rain?// It's an insane range from shame ta rage, he's the legal age ta carry a gauge// Unleashed like rabid pits uncaged, he comes he goes- so rarely he stays// In his emotional maze... - for days n' days, he just prays n' prays// Ta god he'll die... a quick n' painless death, crystal meth// Addictions caused frictions until conviction, drug addiction caused eviction// what a position... should a saw a physician, or asked for help// Too late... unlocked- cocked, he blew back is scalp// __________________ "Dogg- I'm at the end of my leash, drownin' in the abyss of wisdom/ Been touched by God so many times, got CSC charges against him/" -Tony Rome #1 Cypher Emcee (July 03) Last edited by TonyRome313; 06-27-2003 at 01:59 AM.