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here is some constructive crtitcism...
1.. flow wasnt that bad... but you have to many similies in it....
"like it was paste"
2 get a better vocab.. use bigger words... and mix it up...
3 get more lyrical... have more than on rhyming word in the sentance....
ex: loke at my sig...the big l line.. it has nice word play..
4. have an eye openeer at the begining of your verse.. // so you you can get our attnetion..
these are just some areas i thought you could improve on...
post another verse...and ill jusge again
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Im tryin to increase the peace
but im forced to unleash the beast
and sweep the streets
with the heat i keep beneathe the sheets -PropheticWordz
Hell no im never stoppin,from the time i got my cock-in
she had her pussy poppin and lockin-PropheticWordz
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