[Master Peace]

Dougie...This was not a bad piece. it just got confusing for me. I had to re-read it a couple times but I understand it better now...well at least enough for me anyway but...what lacked was vocabulary. You gave me the picture tho but a better wordbank might of helped you out more in this piece. Structure was good and it flowed well. but it was just simple compared to your opponent

Pain...Your imagery and strucutre was on pint. I really enjoyed this piece and I thought it read very well. I thought that I would get tired of reading it but I didn't. The story kept me interested. You had a better piece overall

v/Pain