vote KP.. this battle was heated
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Ink - lets start with some positives and then we'll get to the negatives...I think this flowed smoother than most of what I've read from you to date and naturally I'm a fan of the short bar structure, it makes the read friendlier. Another thing I think you hit on well, especially towards the end way the imagery and emotion. Now for the bad parts. I think the first 40 some odd bars just dragged brutally, even though they were short and flowed well. It's just that they were about absolutely nothing
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first of all chris...your imagry is so vivid at times, it's like im there..that shit is so dope.
KP blew me away with his flip and humor in this story..but i didn't like the format..seems like i see that alot on here but your story was ill, nice ending
quoting my vote doesn't justify as breaking down inks verse. this vote does not count.