[Master Peace]

Baron...I like your style of writing, but this piece was really long. It was a nice story but I often found myself stopping at times and then going back into it. The concept wasn't bad and your structure was coo, my patience just lacked wondering when it was going to end. I read for the imagery and and anticipation of the story and your piece just had me on and off...still a nice drop though

Seph...as simple as this story was I really liked it. Beginning to end it was a good piece. Structure was good and the flow was on, the only thing that bothered me was the fact that it didn't keep me interested all the way. But what made up for it was how smooth it read and flowed I felt overall you had a better piece

v/Seph