[Master Peace]

I agree wit Speed

Daht you had a solid verse and I liked it and enjoyed the story but it was to lengthy and wordy. Your approach to the story seemed difficult to pull off but you did it in good fashion. Nice drop

Life...I liked your story more because I like the short bar scheme. Not just that alone but it read smoother and was easier to follow. With every line the image popped in my head what was going on in the story. Very solid piece. As for the twist...not as impressive as Dougie made it out to be but it was a nice spin on it.

v/Life