[Dougie G]

Inkwell: Well ok this was a good verse, it flowed together nicely and rhymed well, had a couple of spots where the flow dropped, and was hard for the reader to follow, but all in all it was a good verse. I think for me, as a reader the length killed it for me, like at one point I was just like "When does it end"

Kid: Well I liked, the story idea and the ending was a great surprise, throught the whole verse, I never really knew she was gonna die, I liked what you did with the pic, good verse.

Vote: Kid for having a better overall story.