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Not sure if I can vote yet or not... so if I'm not supposed to I apologize.
Though both were basic rhyme scheme, some internal rhymes but nothing spectacular. I liked the plot twist of the abusive father piece at the end. But it's sort of hard to end it when it's a competition piece. I see where the "To Be Continued" makes it more of a story piece. But the rest of the story was sort of... "vague" to me. It just lacked emotion. Power.
The lullaby, I like how you fit the lullaby into three portions of life. Reminds me of a few songs I've heard. Like the Kenny Chesney one.
Though the daughter dieing was predictable you still wrote it well. And I like the ending about no angels. No ambulance. The lullaby itself made a good transition.
For better overall story, with more vivid imagery I'd have to give this one to inkwell
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