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MetaSin · 03-02-2008, 04:47 PM

had to rehash my verse cuz of an error on my behalf...

i liked the first piece a lot, but i'm pretty sure that was over the line max... i liked the flow, and structure of the verse... I think it flowed extremely well, and the emotions were articulated nicely... The topic was nothing groundbreaking, but the fact that it was done well imo, made it more than suitable.

2nd verse.. on second read, the suicide ending makes more sense... for w/e reason while i was reading i had this image of you in the hospital looking out one of the huge windows, rehashing the events of the past... Obviously you weren't at the hospital, thus giving you more time, and making the premeditated suicide make much more sense, in my eyes... On first read i thought the verse was good, until the ending which i didn't like and was the primary reason for me voting against you.

Vote Eye....

03-02-2008, 04:47 PM	#9 (permalink)
MetaSin I Don't Believe In You... Join Date: Jan 2002 Posts: 2,040	had to rehash my verse cuz of an error on my behalf... i liked the first piece a lot, but i'm pretty sure that was over the line max... i liked the flow, and structure of the verse... I think it flowed extremely well, and the emotions were articulated nicely... The topic was nothing groundbreaking, but the fact that it was done well imo, made it more than suitable. 2nd verse.. on second read, the suicide ending makes more sense... for w/e reason while i was reading i had this image of you in the hospital looking out one of the huge windows, rehashing the events of the past... Obviously you weren't at the hospital, thus giving you more time, and making the premeditated suicide make much more sense, in my eyes... On first read i thought the verse was good, until the ending which i didn't like and was the primary reason for me voting against you. Vote Eye.... __________________ TMU Precision "Ol school vibe, cuz I'm smokin reefer... and the blunt burn slow, like ya soul on ether... listenin to nasty nas and jay.... cuz ion like what other rappers got to say... blueprint, stillmatic, and yea I'm still at it... cats is lookin at me like I'm a real addict... cuz smokin that green is a real habbit... folk call me knowin that I will have it..."- Loot You don't wanna see the drama I could really Bring... I'll let that milli ring and turn ya body into silly string."- Loot Last edited by MetaSin; 03-02-2008 at 05:36 PM.