[Quriosity]

bonnie, a bit of a let down and a surprise at the same time, while i found this below your level of creativity, execution, skill and the whole nine it still turned out to be a pretty fulfilling verse for the length, the dialouge was a bit immature-ish and the flow was off at times but overall the plot was decent and you conveyed the story well, very brief and yet still complete or at least it appeared to be seeing as how the story was supposed to feel somewhat incomplete in a sense, nevertheless.. there isn't much to say about such a short verse and there isn't much room for complaint, characters weren't developed but at the same time it didn't feel necessary, the emotion fit the script and was neither overstated nor understated, all in all the elements were in unison minus the flow, it didn't measure up to your normal standard, but i still dug it

memento, i appreciated the mature vibe from this piece mainly due to good word usage but at times i feel it was slightly overdone, the flow was also stronger for the most part than bonnie's and really aided in the progression of the story, the story in itself was somewhat less clarified than the opposition and felt less complete, i see what you tried to do and in the end i think i added most of it up correctly but i feel this would have accomplished more with a little more length to it, as short as this was i felt the story was too brief and skipped too many grave opportunities for supporting details, the result was a distorted story with what appeared to be a pretty decent storyline/subject matter but which was never tied together thoroughly by the writer in order to aid the reader, in the end i still liked it and enjoyed the note that it ended on but i just didn't feel complete after i read it and had to skim through it a few extra times to even begin to feel so

in the end, i've gotta vote for - bonnie bathory on this one, but dope battle

twas a very tough call, but i just felt as though hers was pulled together better for the better total package whereas mem's idea seemed to be more intriguing and had the potential of being outstanding and yet he fell short and sacrificed content to match lengths with his opponent