[.:Pain:.]

Craccer - I mean, the imagery, the wording, all that shit was dope. That structure, however, was the most horiffic thing I have ever seen. Remember that this is suppose to be based loosely on rap rhythm, and this verse has no fucking semblance of one. I mean, the content was really nice, the story progressed smoothly, the ending was nice, but that structure made your verse a chore to read, to say the least.

Con - Good idea, you just didn't execute. Like GL said develop your stuff more, put more thought and effort in your verse. This verse could've been a whole lot better than what it is if you would have just spent a little more time on it. Mechanics were lacking too. I feel like you have all the bare essentials, you just hafta try and develop more.

Vote - Con, because I hated reading Craccer's verse...