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INk - Very nice twist on the outline, I really liked this story. It was very straight foward. The rhyme scheme was probably your strongest mechanical asset, because your flow kinda bobbed in and out. Sometimes the flow was perfect, sometimes, not so much. The story itself was well told, you had a very good writers voice and your imagery was solid. Although, I would've liked more emotion to evident in the verse, I can see how that would be hard though.

IV - I liked the twist at the end, I definately did not see that coming. Your mechanics weren't as sharp as they usually were, but honestly that ending made up for everything the verse lacked. I mean, it was a decent body, but the lines were stretched and there was a lot of forced wording. However, I feel like the cleverness of you piece won you this match.

Vote - IV...